by Sue T.
Member since:
September 27, 2008

TIP-TOEing through life ....

December 06, 2008 08:28 AM EST
views: 112 | rating: 10/10 (15 votes) | comments: 34

tip toe


weary ballerina frame so fine

with faded fettered feet

so delicious you can eat

her woeful silent steps just one at a time.

tip-toe, tip-toe

fettered feet fine

tip-toe, tip-toe

tip-toe the line.

fettered ballerina lost from mother's womb

flutters in despair

so devine you linger where

her heartbeat plays a tune trapped in hollow tomb.

tip-toe, tip-toe

fettered feet fine

tip-toe, tip-toe

tip-toe the line.

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Comments: 34

JOHN BECK Dec 6, 2008, 8:37am EST
Lovely singing verse, Sue. The alliterations work so well.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Dec 6, 2008, 8:55am EST
To be so light on your feet, so airy of thought and mind..........it would be lovely. My heart and soul soar like this, but I find my broken wing tethers me also to reality. I think your ballerina is a bit weary too.

Well-penned, Sue.
John K. Dec 6, 2008, 9:48am EST
This is so much fun! Great job.
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Dec 6, 2008, 9:56am EST
You've really captured the feeling and rhythm of a ballerina moving across the stage on her toes.
Kelly Kay Dec 6, 2008, 10:00am EST
Sue, the combination of alliteration, and the light and airy flow of this transcends the deep sorrow. Nice job!
Stacey *Mamasaid* D. Dec 6, 2008, 10:14am EST
Beautiful work.
Sunaura *. Dec 6, 2008, 1:22pm EST
Exquisitely done
Barbary Chaapel Dec 6, 2008, 3:32pm EST
Beautifully conjuring all sorts of womb images in my head, Sue.
Marge H. Dec 6, 2008, 5:25pm EST
Oh my! This is wonderful in so many ways.
Courtney C. Dec 6, 2008, 5:42pm EST
very nice
Sue T. Dec 6, 2008, 7:35pm EST
Thank you John. You're so lovely.
Selene, your comment is poetry!
JustMe - yes I'd say the ballerina has had enough!
John K - I'm still intrigued .... and honored to see you
Ann - Thank you so much.
Sue T. Dec 6, 2008, 7:39pm EST
Thank you Kelly, Stacey and Sunaura. Your comments mean a lot to me.
Barbary - I always appreciate your feedback. Thanks for visiting!
Marge - you're one of the very sweetest people on Gather - thanks for your ongoing support!
Thank you lovely Courtney.
Sue T. Dec 7, 2008, 1:49am EST
Oh love it, Marianne. A dying swan! Well, yes, I think that is the ballerina! Thank you.
Ah, this really is delicate - a ballerina in a sad ballet, perhaps.
Sue T. Dec 7, 2008, 4:14am EST
Yes, Magi. In someone else's ballet - she needs to take control.
Indeed, Sue. The statement, I am responsible (for what I do and what happens) is ancient wisdom that still is wisdom today.
elizabeth e. Dec 7, 2008, 9:14am EST
In order to dance with confidence
One must hear one's own melody
And not that of another.
Maggie Y. Dec 7, 2008, 11:20am EST
thanks for sharing!
Sue T. Dec 7, 2008, 3:34pm EST
How true Magi and Elizabeth.
Nice to see you, Maggie.
David S. Dec 7, 2008, 11:43pm EST
This was fun to read! The patterns really engaged me.
necee t. Dec 8, 2008, 7:50pm EST
this is very sweet...


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Dawn S. Dec 9, 2008, 9:25am EST
very nice!
David W. Dec 11, 2008, 5:06pm EST
Nicely painted. I love this line,

"...her woeful silent steps just one at a time."

Thanks for stoping by to comment on my post.
Pat Bertram Dec 11, 2008, 7:08pm EST
I like the image of faded fettered feet.
Svetlana Goryacheva Dec 13, 2008, 2:25am EST
Great work... reminded me of our Russian renowned ballet dancers. ;-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Marge H. Dec 13, 2008, 9:03pm EST
I came back to read this again. I sense a theme in your recent works, a message of independence and freedom.
Shelbia C. Dec 14, 2008, 2:32pm EST
This is good.
Sheila Deeth Dec 17, 2008, 8:52pm EST
Very neat. Beautiful flow and lovely choice of words.
Sue T. Dec 17, 2008, 10:24pm EST
Thank you for your support everyone. It means a lot to me.
Teresa T. Jan 3, 2009, 12:40am EST

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Beautifully curved into a moment of words gliding across the stage of a life dancer's life

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