by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

Blushing Evening Sky

December 04, 2008 11:43 AM UTC
views: 0 | comments: 33

Expectations, wow, what a word
Make the case, adjectives to implore it
Perhaps an exploration or detour
With mindful themes, awaiting coloring
Storyline for scrap books, looking after
Change, stoking memories, the sun desires

Maternal, such gentle feeling applies
Not so sure about Amazon women
But, hey, I'm just a guy, with some hist'ry
Moons stage together, puzzle pieces fit
Maybe it's destiny, fate or a runabout
So many lines left out

Inventory, bore-bore-bore, I'm counting
The dawning sky still calls, moving on fast
A heartfelt smile, warms like a Sun's shining
Investigating feelings, with happiness
Friends and family joyful conversations
No need to be politically correct

Lexicon, tried and true soul with honors
You color each voice reaching to the sky
Bristle, brush blushing evening sky so red
Over land and vast oceans you've laid your head
And the Angelic choir knows sound glistening
In the magic of each and every well told tale
It's in the voice, not perfection, wind blown sail

Comments: 33

Sandy O. Dec 4, 2008, 11:45am UTC
It's been a while since I've read a poem with such grand associative leaping here on Gather. Very nice, William...just the right amount of wit coupled with nostaglic idealism.
Cheryl W. Dec 4, 2008, 11:51am UTC
Another wonderful write, William...:)
Lisa Frost Bailey Dec 4, 2008, 11:52am UTC
Wonderful, wit and nostaglia!! You pull off the seemingly impossible connections..lol
Kelly Kay Dec 4, 2008, 12:33pm UTC
William, I am an Amazon woman and a maternal mamma bear. The two can work ;)

great writing.
Svetlana Goryacheva Dec 4, 2008, 12:53pm UTC
As always, dear William, excellent! ;-) And, BTW, Amazon women could sometimes be surprisingly tender and loving... or grow up from the most unexpected creatures on this Earth. ;-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Kimberly Ripley Dec 4, 2008, 1:42pm UTC
Your words seem to dance magically on the page.

"Bristle, brush blushing evening sky so red
Over land and vast oceans you've laid your head
And the Angelic choir knows sound glistening
In the magic of each and every well told tale"
Trish A. Dec 4, 2008, 2:35pm UTC
William, what a blessing to open Gather to find this poem. There are many writing moments I like in this piece. Your final line, "It's in the voice, not perfection, wind blown sail" is a wonderful thought.
Peter Joseph Swanson Dec 4, 2008, 2:37pm UTC
Clever and wonderful and grand and COOL !!! The ending is a huge "AH YES !!!"
Elsie Duggan Dec 4, 2008, 2:40pm UTC
Wonderful poem William, makes me feel good, and that is so important,
Marge H. Dec 4, 2008, 3:00pm UTC
Word crafting at its finest!
Michelle W. Dec 4, 2008, 3:20pm UTC
I really enjoyed this, William! You always put together some wonderful images!!

Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !
Leah Christensen Dec 4, 2008, 3:23pm UTC
Thanks for posting this.
Samantha G. Dec 4, 2008, 4:02pm UTC
Lovely. Thank you. You have true talent.
A well told tale, Bill.
Rose Hill Dec 4, 2008, 5:21pm UTC
Thanks William, it made me feel good.

Friends and family joyful conversations
No need to be politically correct

yup, that's where it's at:)
Sue T. Dec 4, 2008, 6:18pm UTC
Love your feelgood writing, William. You weave so much into your poetry.
JOHN BECK Dec 4, 2008, 7:55pm UTC
I love the connection between the words and voices on one hand and the color in the evening sky on the other. Thanks again for reaching into our heads and beyond, William.
Linda T. Dec 5, 2008, 12:28am UTC
great one
Kushal Poddar Dec 5, 2008, 8:23am UTC
It is great, just great.
A train to Dreams>
Jennifer aka Jenn B. Dec 5, 2008, 9:38am UTC
Wonderful William

I watched with wonder as they sky transformed so quickly so many times..
Check out my new post on Breckenridge when you have time...I was able to capture the violet of the sky as the sun was threatening to rise , then the sun did and just caught the peaks...awe inspiring...
Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Dec 5, 2008, 2:47pm UTC
fabulous reflections and a master piece.
Nancy L. Dec 5, 2008, 6:04pm UTC
Your words have such a light touch. They seem to hop and skip as they zip across my mind.
Barbary C. Dec 6, 2008, 9:01am UTC
Hey, I bet even those biggy Amazons had to hold babies.

This poem is told with your usual flair, William. Keep on flairing.
Marianne M. Dec 6, 2008, 1:03pm UTC
You never cease to amaze me Bill ... I am astounded by the volume of poetry you write ... you must have words churning inside your head constantly! Blushing evening sky is marvelous!
William Dotani Dec 6, 2008, 3:04pm UTC
Marianne, I just love the English language.
Heather M. Dec 6, 2008, 9:13pm UTC
Another fine poem.
Kelly M. Dec 8, 2008, 12:47am UTC
Thanks for paying it forward to me!
Curt L. Dec 9, 2008, 12:12pm UTC
"Keep on flairing.", indeed! Wonderful William!
Tracy Fabre Dec 9, 2008, 10:32pm UTC
Maternal, such gentle feeling applies
Not so sure about Amazon women

LOL! No one is...
Wilma M. Jan 13, 2009, 12:21am UTC
We had a "blushing evening sky" here the other night, literally. After many days of gray skies or quick sunsets, I looked up to see fantastic colors spread across the sky.
Wilma M. Jan 13, 2009, 12:22am UTC
I agree with Marianne M. I'm amazed at how quickly you can turn out such excellent poetry. It's amazing that you get any sleep at all!
April H. Jan 23, 2009, 7:31pm UTC
A wonderful poem

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