So Long - Dancing Fingers/#7/ Challenge &...

Words are weapons

Sharper than steel

That pierce thin armour

Spun from all I feel

You turned your back, walked away

My love for you was spurned

I can't stand the ice in your eyes

Your acceptance was all I yearned

So long I pretended

Nothing was wrong

So long I chose to be blind

Believing that I could be strong

But that was just a lie

I told myself as I cried

Just so that I could go on

Never thought you'd leave me behind

In your petty intrigues

Your dramas, your theatre of lies

So long I was a pawn

So long I was lost in false guise

So now this is goodbye

This is so long

I know that you'll think of me

When I am far gone

Comments: 19

maria (lurking in the shadows of the night) B. Nov 16, 2008, 6:47pm EST

Alison- You come up with the goods every time you write. Excellent!

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Elsie Duggan Nov 16, 2008, 6:47pm EST

Gosh Alison, this is very good, just hope none of it is real for you, and just a poem, know it is for a challenge, thanks for so many comments, I am trying to get around a bit today, not doing too well, people keep dropping in, and just had to do dinner for Billy, well, that's life, lol.

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Anmol D ♥ Nov 16, 2008, 7:19pm EST

Excellent!

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ELLEN B. Nov 16, 2008, 9:15pm EST

This is good, and I agree with Elsie, hope this is NOT going on for you sweetie. Ellen B

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lynn a. Nov 16, 2008, 9:52pm EST

When you finally get ready to say good bye you do it very, very well. Whew. I'd hate to be the person on the other end of this one. The betrayal is rampant. Excellent.

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Alison H. Nov 17, 2008, 12:10am EST

Beautiful, potent poem that could be a song.

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aratma d. Nov 17, 2008, 7:56am EST

Giving up is always a hard thing to do. This is a good description of how one feels when that point is reached.

Thank you for posting at Dancing Fingers

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Michelle W. Nov 18, 2008, 2:21pm EST

Great write!

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Sheila Deeth Nov 18, 2008, 7:25pm EST

Wow. Powerful poem Alison. Great emotion evoking great words.

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aratma d. Nov 19, 2008, 5:00am EST

Congratulations, Alison. I've enjoyed re-reading :)

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lynn a. Nov 19, 2008, 5:47am EST

Congratulations, Alison. It is an excellent poem.

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Sakuragirl S. Nov 19, 2008, 5:48am EST

Congratulations on your win, Alison.
This is really a good poem

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Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Nov 19, 2008, 10:32am EST

Well done, Alison. Congratulations.

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Sheila Deeth Nov 19, 2008, 12:08pm EST

Winning words too. Congratulations!

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sheila h. Nov 19, 2008, 9:10pm EST

so much emotion..so sad and yet there is beauty in the stark pain..the beauty of your phrases,Ali..
I am thinking of you ,my friend..
hugs
and big congrats..

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