by William Dotani
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October 27, 2006

Autumnal Winds

November 11, 2008 05:25 PM EST
views: 107 | comments: 39

Bustling, feel the frenzy, hardy Autumnal breeze
Multi-colored lawns, patterns released, swirling leaves
Breathing deeply mystic charms, raked and swept away
Green turning brown, a thought from yesterday

White crystals, falling sky, shaken snow globe recalls
Air still and silent,. moonlight, corn stalks standing tall
Billowing clouds feel, the chimney's crackle and puff
And distance, of night silence, makes Winter act rough

Trimming tree, dress it up, windows tactful display
School bus light flashes, children home for holiday
Shopping, baking, days of exhaustion, sweet dreams smile
Good tiding finds estuary, traipsing each mile

Doubtless illusions, sparkling, electricity
Chilling strong Chinook winds, roaring out, let it be
Snowmen sing to bare trees, one leaf audience
Smiling eyes, warmth napping, blue sky shows eminence

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Comments: 39

Leah Christensen Nov 11, 2008, 5:29pm EST
Very well done.
Lisa Frost Nov 11, 2008, 5:33pm EST
wonderful imagery and writing.
Kelly M. Nov 11, 2008, 5:34pm EST
Love it!
Denise C. Nov 11, 2008, 6:03pm EST
Very vivid! Good job!
Anne B. Grote Nov 11, 2008, 6:03pm EST
a beautiful tribute to one of my favorite seasons. I love yor descriptions which evoke such internal imagery.
Marge H. Nov 11, 2008, 6:45pm EST
I love this time of year. i wouldn't miss winter though if I moved somewhere warm.
Marge H. Nov 11, 2008, 6:46pm EST
Beautiful writing!
Marianne M. Nov 11, 2008, 6:54pm EST
Beautiful images, Bill ... a celebration of the season!
Linda T. Nov 11, 2008, 6:58pm EST
beautiful work
Ladybounty ~. Nov 11, 2008, 7:06pm EST
Very nice Bill! I love this time of year.
Tanya P. Nov 11, 2008, 7:15pm EST
Strong and wonderful imagery. This is so perfect for my Fall/Wintertime; Time for Harvest and Snuggling Near the Fire group, so I (of course) featured it. ;^)
Kay M. Nov 11, 2008, 7:35pm EST
Lovely! And it seems meant for me today. I was outside this afternoon raking those leaves and feeling those autumnal winds.
debra g. Nov 11, 2008, 8:35pm EST
As always wonderful work!I tried to rake leaves yesterday and the wind blew them back so I gave up.
Elsie Duggan Nov 11, 2008, 9:25pm EST
Just beautiful William, you painted the season beautifully and I think you are looking forward to the Holidays, don't send the bad heavy snows though, keep them in Michigan,
Wonderful writing as usual.
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Nov 11, 2008, 10:02pm EST
I can see Autumn on your page,,It's like you don't have the camera to capture but you captured in your page,with your mighty pen.
BEautiful season's BEST
Donna C. Nov 11, 2008, 10:16pm EST
William-
This is just beautiful. I can see the colors of fall,
and the coming of winter.
Curt L. Nov 11, 2008, 11:47pm EST
"...like spirits before an enchanter fleeing..." Loved this William!
Deloris Wright Nov 11, 2008, 11:58pm EST
Very nice. The winters are so beautiful. But are so cold
Svetlana Goryacheva Nov 12, 2008, 12:52am EST
Just perfect! ;-) Loved it!

Blessings and best wishes - S.
lynn a. Nov 12, 2008, 1:02am EST
This one felt so good to read. I loved every single word in it. This is my kind of poem. Excellent.
Kathryn E. Nov 12, 2008, 1:05am EST
Notable in Gather Essentials: Writing, Wednesday
William Dotani Nov 12, 2008, 2:22am EST
Lynn, Your words make my heart smile.
I of course appreciate everyone who comments.
I humbly thank you Kathryn.
Dena Straughn Nov 12, 2008, 3:46am EST
Perfect seasonal highlights
Shirley ♡ ☮ M. Nov 12, 2008, 4:34am EST
Well done! Thanks for sharing.
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Nov 12, 2008, 9:30am EST
William,

I love the way you mix surreal elements into this structured poem.

If you'll send it to The Surreal Circus, I'd love to feature it.
Toni V. Nov 12, 2008, 2:34pm EST
Awesome, William.
necee t. Nov 12, 2008, 2:58pm EST
oh William, this is very wonderful... thank you for all your wonderful works...
Bless you and yours my friend...
Donald M. Nov 12, 2008, 4:40pm EST
It makes the change from Summer and then Autumn and Winter so smooth. Looking foreward to Christmas lights and festivities Snuggled up by the fireplace. Good poem.
Marie J. R. Nov 12, 2008, 5:06pm EST
warm holidays ahead,,, good write my dear William,,, one can feel this in the air and almost smell it,,, Bless you,,,
Angela A. Nov 12, 2008, 8:49pm EST
Such a beautiful poem! Autumn sure can be a thing of beauty.
Mariana T. Nov 12, 2008, 9:01pm EST
shaken snow globe recalls
Air still and silent,. moonlight, corn stalks standing tall
it doesn't get any better than that - wonderful writing, my friend and hope you keep these lovelies coming. Salud
Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Nov 12, 2008, 9:55pm EST
Beautiful images, although I'm not quite ready to be inside that snow globe just yet.
Pepsie J. Nov 13, 2008, 6:58am EST
I love Christmas and lightsand trees and snowflakes and Santa and angels and home made decorations and glitter and snowcapped decorations. Well you get the picture.

Your poem makes me smile too!
queen.susan . Nov 13, 2008, 3:25pm EST
really enjoyed your well-written poem!
Barbary Chaapel Nov 13, 2008, 7:53pm EST
William, this is a very nice poem to read aloud. I especially like this:

"Green turning brown, a thought from yesterday..."
Alison H. Nov 14, 2008, 1:01pm EST
Wonderful portrayal of autumn into winter, but why "doubtless illusions"?
William Dotani Nov 16, 2008, 9:51am EST
Alison, What you already have experienced often seems redundant.
Kelly M. Nov 16, 2008, 3:09pm EST
thanks for posting to one for me one for you!
Michelle W. Nov 24, 2008, 1:22am EST
Lovely images!
Thanks for posting in Journey Into Poetry !

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