Revelation

Here's to truth

revealed.

I'll not deviate

my ways,

to relieve the crash

against your ribs.

The pounding heart

proves all.

You love me, and,

with intense expression-

I love you back.

Comments: 10

Virginia M. Nov 10, 2008, 11:06am UTC

Critique welcome.

Mzzz Sweets - Sandy (Why do I have to add a last name?) Nov 10, 2008, 11:12am UTC

I'm not a critique..But will say I love your poem.

Deb J. Nov 10, 2008, 11:40am UTC

I really like your poem! Good job.

sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j. Nov 10, 2008, 3:59pm UTC

Very well written!

Marilyn (PaintsOnSlate) S. Nov 10, 2008, 4:15pm UTC

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William M. Nov 14, 2008, 2:58pm UTC

I love it.

Sheila Deeth Nov 18, 2008, 7:12pm UTC

Neat. I like the unexpectedness of it.

Elsie Duggan Nov 21, 2008, 2:59am UTC

Beautiful Virginia, Hope you have love like this,

Linda B. Feb 5, 2009, 4:30pm UTC

To see love shown such as this is wonderful.

P. Francine Mathis Jun 24, 2009, 9:19pm UTC

I Liiiiiiiike,.....poignantly direct and passionate