I like to write poetry by letting the words fall on to the page. I have no interest in formal styles. However, this poem has been written in a particular style known as a 'pantoum'. I must say I do like playing around with this style.
Moving On
He knows he's nearly there
I heard him whisper sadly
As he heads for the coast
To live dreams by the sea
I heard him whisper sadly
He's travelling again
To live dreams by the sea
With or without me
He's travelling again
On a brand new track
With or without me
His life squashed in a box
On a brand new track
Thoughts tumbling in despair
His life squashed in a box
‘Fragile - handle with care'
Thoughts tumbling in despair
As he heads for the coast
‘Fragile - handle with care'
He knows he's nearly there
rate
email
print
link to this page
Comments: 4
But your poem is effective. It can be sung or chanted or recited aloud.
Very good.