by Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom'
Member since:
April 25, 2007

It was me...Fall colors

September 19, 2008 08:08 PM EDT (Updated: September 19, 2008 08:12 PM EDT)
views: 129 | rating: 10/10 (29 votes) | comments: 43
 

I was dynamic and vibrant in those days

with warm tones of burgundy.

So many of us fallen off tonight,

Why this sun hardly shines nowadays?

Who's going to go next is unpredictable

Why we must fall, is still a myth

What happen to us when we are fallen?

I'm trembling, thinking it's unchangeable

a moist wind blew, cold and hostile

my voice broke off, I remember

I was covered with splendid morning dews

winter had come and I'm in exile.

 

 
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Comments: 43

KC Klein Sep 19, 2008, 8:14pm EDT
I find the superimposed leaves distracting from the theme of the image.

The poem is mournful and well-written
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Sep 19, 2008, 8:15pm EDT
I agree with Karl on this one, Bhawana. The image is so beautiful all by itself and the poem is well-written.
donna h. Sep 19, 2008, 8:15pm EDT
vey nice
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Sep 19, 2008, 8:22pm EDT
thanks, Karl...While making this photo I was thinking of aging and the fear of passing with the greatest fear of ultimately ending up alone, in exile of winter....somewhere I tried to create a harmony between the image and the poem.

thanks, Justme,donna
David W. Sep 19, 2008, 8:30pm EDT
Love this Buzzy, but very sad.
Nana to Seven Cutiepies Sep 19, 2008, 8:33pm EDT
So sad Bhawana, I think it relates to aging very well.
Amanda C. Sep 19, 2008, 8:40pm EDT
Yes, beautiful and sad...I like the emotions the image projects. And it's very timely, considering we are coming into autumn and then winter...
Marsha S. Sep 19, 2008, 8:49pm EDT
nicely written but sad
Larry H. Sep 19, 2008, 8:58pm EDT
thanks for sharing your poem
Marge H. Sep 19, 2008, 9:01pm EDT
Beautiful well chosen words.
very lovly~
Cheryl W. Sep 19, 2008, 9:39pm EDT
This is beautiful, Bhawana. I love fall, and can't wait for those leaves to start turning...:)
Miz Lynn aka/BooBoo Sep 19, 2008, 10:08pm EDT
Absolutely wonderful Bhawana...
Carolion Grailbear Sep 19, 2008, 10:35pm EDT
I really liked the image, Buzzy - I liked thinking about a bride / God-initiate as a leaf about to fall.
Marianne R. Sep 19, 2008, 10:44pm EDT
Very nice
Kushal Poddar Sep 19, 2008, 11:01pm EDT
The poem is very good. It has a soft voice.
April H. Sep 20, 2008, 12:12am EDT
Beautiful but sad. AndI understand why you choose the fall leaves as they are near the end of there life.
Sherrie H. Sep 20, 2008, 12:52am EDT
This is just beautiful, Bhawana! You have such a poet's soul.
Kushal Poddar Sep 20, 2008, 1:34am EDT
Dearest of all,
Here is fall, loneliness and Pompeii for zoom it
Ash~:
Kathryn E. Sep 20, 2008, 1:43am EDT
Definitely the soul of a poet, Bhawana. Looks like Elizabeth Taylor, the eyes.

Never fear passing or being alone. Neither exists, really.

Your article is Featured in the Triple Name Club.
~Lady Neeetah of California~Obama #44 W. Sep 20, 2008, 1:46am EDT
I like the contrast, Bhawana. Then again, I also LOVE Autumn, Autumn colours, and the Black and White contrasts are perfect to me.
t b. Sep 20, 2008, 1:56am EDT
Lovely poetry Bhawana.

Instead of fearing, enjoy what you have now....
necee t. Sep 20, 2008, 2:03am EDT
this is very beautiful... i love your work... Blessings always...
Amanda "middle of nowhere" C. Sep 20, 2008, 11:16am EDT
What a beautiful poem. And I see the leaves representing the transformation. This hit a particular note with me as in the last few days I have been struggling with the aging of my dad.

Blessings to you, dear.
Netty B. Sep 20, 2008, 4:43pm EDT
Beautiful! and the picture too!
Chana M. Sep 20, 2008, 5:44pm EDT
Bhawana, it seems to be a fall day. Thank you. I wrote one about fall today too. I can relate so much to what you have written. It is the eternal progression with man's (and women's) eternal need to question. Beautifully written with so much meaning. Thank you for sharing this @ Art - Any Medium!
Kay M. Sep 20, 2008, 6:10pm EDT
This is a very moving poem Bhawana and the photo complements it beautifully.
William Dotani Sep 20, 2008, 7:40pm EDT
Beautiful photograph. I loved the beautiful rhythm of the first 6 lines, but then the verses seemed more strained to make a point rather than to transition towards the finality of Winter.
Sorry, but I must be honest.
Linda G. Sep 20, 2008, 8:17pm EDT
oh, the chill is in tehiar and your poem rings true
Tina Coruth Sep 20, 2008, 8:18pm EDT
Very touching poem, Bhawana.
Lisa Frost Sep 21, 2008, 2:55am EDT
that is great Bhawana! You have so many talents.
elizabeth e. Sep 21, 2008, 9:25am EDT
Beauty is just skin deep and like a fallen yellow leaf, turns brown. Sad...but that is the way of the world.
lynn a. Sep 21, 2008, 2:12pm EDT
Love the poem. It is sad, and exile might be worse than death. But you put words to feelings that anyone can feel. Very good.
Connie C. Sep 21, 2008, 8:32pm EDT
That was wonderful. I felt like I was a leaf holding for dear life
Tanya P. Sep 22, 2008, 12:32am EDT
Love your perspective.
John F Walter Sep 22, 2008, 12:11pm EDT
Great image first of all to accompany this moving elegiac poem.

I can feel the loss of your mother so keen in your spirit. And the sense of being far from home. I know both these feelings so well, having lost a father and brother and again living thousands of miles from my birthplace, since I could not find a job in Los Angeles (I would have tried to get in touch with you if I had been able to stay.) This poem is delicate, and breaks off in just the right place, like your voice.....

Sorry I´ve been away so long.
Phyllis R. Sep 22, 2008, 3:19pm EDT
Very nice B, -- love the poem and I think the picture is great too....you did a great job!
Jim Ross Sep 22, 2008, 5:48pm EDT
The viewpoint of the leaf is delectable, Bhawana. There's an almost stoic sadness to its coming exile. Kudos!
Alison Pearce Sep 22, 2008, 6:54pm EDT
Fantastic Bhawana!!
Sheila Deeth Sep 22, 2008, 8:41pm EDT
Beautiful poem Bhawana. Truly lovely.
Karen E. Sep 23, 2008, 11:43am EDT
It is a powerful message of beauty and fearsome change. I love the writing and especially love the images.
Blossom K. Sep 23, 2008, 1:13pm EDT
Amazing poem...so poignant and so REAL...loved it.

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