by Max Babi
Member since:
May 4, 2006

Fakir

August 31, 2008 03:29 PM EDT
views: 117 | comments: 17
An original poem in Gujarati with English transcreation:

Fakir chhoon, bhogio saathe naa pan phaave
rasik chhoon, jogio saathe naa pan phaave,
maya ne bhram na gunchvada maan,
amir chhoon, lobhio saathe naa pan phaave.

(c) Max Babi 07102008

Transcreation in English :

Am just a 'fakir', may not get along with dissolutes
Am just gourmant, may not get along with ascetics,
In the labyrinthine maze of maya and illusions,
Am affluent, may not get along with greedy ones.

(c) Max Babi 08312008.
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Comments: 17

Boris G. Aug 31, 2008, 6:44pm EDT
Max, this wonderful little gem is now featured in my group.
Alison H. Aug 31, 2008, 8:12pm EDT
You seem well-balanced! Nice poem
Duckie 1 Aug 31, 2008, 8:55pm EDT
You are not just anything, you are Everything, who may get along with all there is.
And was. And will be. Including me.



As always, I love your originality and depth, Max.
Kenneth B. Aug 31, 2008, 10:42pm EDT
Fascinating.
Sujata (funnily 'Suji' ) S. Sep 1, 2008, 12:07am EDT
Well that is indeed real depiction of 'Fakir'

The wonderfully liberated being

Thank you Kabir to mean Babi !!!
Stirling D. Sep 2, 2008, 6:04pm EDT
Oh, I love it. Such a middle way stance.
Cynthia Isis A. Sep 7, 2008, 6:52am EDT
Yes this is the piece I read that I like very much. In the labyrinthine maze of Maya and Illusions...love that line.

thank you for sharing this.

Bright Blessings,
Isis
PS. thanks for the friendship request.
Lawrence U. Sep 7, 2008, 9:17pm EDT
Wonderful piece - I like it. Thank you, Max!
Al Cramer Sep 8, 2008, 9:44pm EDT
Very nice! But we want to hear the companion piece: who woud the fakir get along with?
John F Walter Oct 15, 2008, 4:27pm EDT
Jeez, Max, this must be one of the only pieces I´ve missed of yours on Gather. I like the comparisons in the ´transcreation´, which hint at subtle distinctions within categories, and different motives for performing the same actions. Hence, one can be an integrated self--an affluent--as in the poem´s end without associating with the corrupt and the avaricious.
Your poem of values triggers many thoughts in my maya-bound head.
Max Babi Oct 19, 2008, 3:21pm EDT
Thanks a lot everybody, especially John F.Walte and Al Cramer.
Al, I will surely write a companion peace in one or two days.
Your challege shall be squarely met !
Cheerz!
Max
Linda M. Dec 1, 2008, 2:52am EST
I love the word, 'transcreation'... very nicely done!
Kelly Kay Jan 5, 2009, 3:26pm EST
Simplistic in its form, but it runs very deep.
NoName *. Mar 2, 2009, 1:33pm EST
happy krishna, Max.
NoName *. Mar 6, 2009, 3:26am EST
sorry max, I know u are a moslem and that my last remark was not only flippent but insulting. You are like a blast from the past, somehow you've managed to hang onto the traditions and values, and the application of knowledge to poetry that all of us were once familiar with. It is very comforting, and most of all, it is stableizing.

Asalem malakem [NOTE: spelling is phonetic]
Max Babi Mar 6, 2009, 3:56am EST
That's very sweet of you NoName.

On hundreds of occasions, I have proven my knowledge of Hindu mythology and religion far superior to my close friends, all Hindus who didn't know anything of Islam. Thus such an insult would not appear like an insult to me... hence I didn't respond. Your second post seems so humble, I had to respond !
Valeikum assalaam ! God be with you...

Max
Sandi S. Sep 8, 2009, 9:38am EDT
soothing and reflective... this was nice. Good work, my friend.

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