by ELLEN B.
Member since:
May 29, 2007

Good-By My Lover-100 Word Stories-Challenge-Week 28

August 20, 2008 08:14 AM UTC (Updated: August 20, 2008 08:16 AM UTC)
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Tiny, perfect body, shapley thin shoulders held up golden hued gown. Hair midnight black, short, feathery, blowing in the morning sunrise. She begged her to stay. Their favorite tape in the CD player, James Blunt, hauntingly filled morning silence. As she walked away, Julia knew, their time was over. For Julia, truest of loves, for her, only an experience, the pain returned.

Julia was caught. A brutal affair, a lesbian experience, new knowledge of herself, also brutal, this leaving.

The sun now full up. And her heart, it was walking. She cried, one tear, hot, painful.
It was over then.



Inspired by 100 Word Challenge Prompt

Comments: 25

Sakuragirl S. Aug 20, 2008, 10:18am UTC
Love between two women can be truly wonderful. Not necessarily lesbianism, "just" love...

Nice bitter-sweet post, Ellen.
Sir Winton Charles Hopper III Aug 20, 2008, 11:46am UTC
very interesting plot... good write...
ELLEN B. Aug 20, 2008, 12:08pm UTC
Thanks guys. I appreciate your comments, and you are so right Glory. I also agree with Judy. The pain of loss comes out as confusing as the loss is to you, alien, not right, and I did search for something in my brain, (boy, that was a job:) that was a little different. Ellen B
Haim Kadman Aug 20, 2008, 2:11pm UTC
Nothing is more important than love, and you convey that message beautifully with just a few words - an amazing drama Ellen, I love in particular the way you use the surroundings, the time of day, the sun and the descriptions of your figures, and all that within a hundred words, chapeau Ellen.
Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Aug 20, 2008, 2:31pm UTC
touching and powerful
Sheila Deeth Aug 20, 2008, 4:35pm UTC
Powerful tale. I love the phrase "her heart, it was walking."
Marge H. Aug 20, 2008, 5:37pm UTC
Unreturned love is always painful. A sad and powerful drabble. Very well written.
Bob C. Aug 20, 2008, 10:21pm UTC
Good story Ellen! Interesting twist and shows love in a different light!
Alison Pearce Aug 20, 2008, 11:22pm UTC
Fabulous drabble Ellen!
penni d. Aug 21, 2008, 9:44am UTC
aww...bittersweet, Ellen....poor person! :)
Sheila Deeth Aug 21, 2008, 12:52pm UTC
Rereading for votes. Powerful writing.
Jan S. Aug 21, 2008, 11:42pm UTC
Very well written. Such a sad story!
William Dotani Aug 22, 2008, 9:28am UTC
I agree with all of the above.
Heather M. Aug 22, 2008, 10:08am UTC
Well written, Ellen.
Kay M Aug 22, 2008, 9:57pm UTC
Well done Ellen
Tanya P. Aug 22, 2008, 10:13pm UTC
You've portrayed a lot of emotion through your perspective here, Ellen. Strong drabble!
Wanda H. Aug 22, 2008, 10:58pm UTC
So sad to see love spurned, it hurts so much. Great drabble.
lynn a. Aug 23, 2008, 1:20pm UTC
The pain of lost love is brutal now matter how it is experienced. Excellent drabble in showing this point.
Otelia S. Aug 25, 2008, 8:47pm UTC
I guess you've heard that this is a beautiful piece.
I also agree with Gory S

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