by Sakuragirl S.
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July 11, 2008

Called off - 100 Word Stories Week 28 - Non-Challenge

August 19, 2008 07:17 AM EDT
views: 46 | rating: 10/10 (11 votes) | comments: 20

The weeded steps drew me in like idiot flies to the burning candles. I had to see.

He was there. Definitely not helping her put on the bride's maid dress.

She mumbled.

He nearly shouted in self defense.

“It’s nothing like what it seems, Lisa! This doesn’t have to affect our arrangement!”

“It sure doesn’t affect yours. My father will happily donate the majority of shares to whichever daughter makes sure his grandchildren’s last name will be Winchester.”

I had to turn away and bow my head. Too great the joy. I wouldn’t have to “try to love him” anymore.
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Comments: 20

KC Klein Aug 19, 2008, 9:17am EDT
interesting read
t b. Aug 19, 2008, 12:15pm EDT
So many facets to life....
Marge H. Aug 19, 2008, 12:55pm EDT
Interesting turn of events. I'd like to see this developed into a longer story.
Mmmmmmmm...interesting saga...
Sakuragirl S. Aug 19, 2008, 2:20pm EDT
This one's also on my develop-it-into-a-longer-story list. Just where do I buy at least an extra hour for the day? :)

Thanks everyone for stopping by.
Alison Pearce Aug 19, 2008, 6:41pm EDT
Very interesting drabble!
Winton Charles Hopper III Aug 19, 2008, 7:22pm EDT
Intriguing indeed!
penni d. Aug 20, 2008, 11:19am EDT
Awesome!
Sakuragirl S. Aug 20, 2008, 1:16pm EDT
More of this to come. I like it myself way too much to abandon it :)

Thank you all for your feedback.
sheila h. Aug 20, 2008, 1:51pm EDT
that was an great twisty turn..let the fools have each other!
good stuff..
Sakuragirl S. Aug 20, 2008, 2:36pm EDT
They sure deserve each other, Sheila :)

Thanks for reading me!
Sheila Deeth Aug 20, 2008, 11:36pm EDT
Oh, neat. Fascinating twist.
Heather ~of the Whippets~ M. Aug 21, 2008, 1:41am EDT
Good story, Glory. It will be interesting to see a longer version.
Wanda H. Aug 21, 2008, 1:49am EDT
Hmm, intriguing read here and with your challenge short too. Leaves us all wanting more.
Sheila Deeth Aug 21, 2008, 12:49pm EDT
Rereading these in the right order this time. Neat tale in this short piece.
Sakuragirl S. Aug 21, 2008, 1:10pm EDT
Thank you all guys.

Since the audience requires it, I guess I'd better start working on the longer versions, both for this and the other drabble :)
Pat M. Aug 22, 2008, 5:18am EDT
Loved it Glory.
Sakuragirl S. Aug 22, 2008, 5:24am EDT
Glad you did, Pat :)
Tanya P. Aug 22, 2008, 10:48pm EDT
I love that ending!!! Fabulous.
lynn a. Aug 23, 2008, 1:25pm EDT
Wow. You put a whole lot into so few words for sure in this one. And so believable. Better to go into something eyes wide open than not.

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