by Wanda H.
Member since:
November 20, 2006

Dreamy - 100 WORD STORIES WEEK 24 - CHALLENGE

July 20, 2008 03:57 PM UTC (Updated: July 25, 2008 12:47 AM UTC)
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I stand here, cheek against the door jamb as I watch you walk away from me. You said you'd be gone three days. It was business, you said. You didn't say anything about Deborah or the lease on the townhouse. I keep my face looking dreamy, fresh and satiated, from our love making.

You turn and wave. I raise my hand. Finally, you drive away. After a time, I go inside, shut the door and pour myself a drink. The brakes will fail on the sharp, steep turn above the cliff leading to the sea. You won't survive the crash.

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This story is a Drabble, 100 words, no more, no less, in response to a photo prompt, shown here. If you like this story you might like some of my other writings. You can find them at http://aries18.gather.com/. If you like to write in response to a weekly challenge, please join our group at http://drabble.gather.com/ We have a great group owner, Reena, who makes this so much fun! We would love to have you join us.

Comments: 47

Anne W. Jul 20, 2008, 4:18pm UTC
Well written!
Anne W. Jul 20, 2008, 4:18pm UTC
Thank you for posting to Point Whore! Wishing everyone many, many points!
Bethany C. Jul 20, 2008, 6:22pm UTC
Chill me to the bone! Loved it! Kind of scared me, but I loved it, anyway!
Dan H. Jul 20, 2008, 7:03pm UTC
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Kasey Klein Jul 21, 2008, 3:18am UTC
tight, interesting
Kay M Jul 21, 2008, 7:32pm UTC
Yikes! A great murderous tale Wanda.
Chas Andrews Jul 22, 2008, 4:54pm UTC
wow.
Rhetta Akamatsu Jul 22, 2008, 4:56pm UTC
Excellent!
ELLEN B. Jul 22, 2008, 4:57pm UTC
Good one! Our prompt gal had that look. I went kinda the way you did also. This was a fun one, and boy are the gals bad in some of these. How naughty!!! SMILE! You did a great job. Ellen B
Sharon P. Jul 22, 2008, 4:57pm UTC
Very good.
amy s. Jul 22, 2008, 4:57pm UTC
interesting turn of events
Sharon B. Jul 22, 2008, 5:01pm UTC
great job
Renda B. Jul 22, 2008, 5:08pm UTC
Very well written.
Teri V. Jul 22, 2008, 5:26pm UTC
very well written. :)
blaine d. Jul 22, 2008, 5:30pm UTC
very nicely done!
Jennifer S. Jul 22, 2008, 6:27pm UTC
Well written! Very Nice 10+++++
Amanda "middle of nowhere" C. Jul 22, 2008, 7:53pm UTC
This is great. I've been tempted to join this group, but I'm awfully wordy. 100 words isn't very much.
Sandi S. Jul 22, 2008, 7:58pm UTC
Intense! The story twists just like the road the brakes will fail on. This is very clever.
Ruthe M. Jul 22, 2008, 9:30pm UTC
Excellent! He thought the dreamy look was about his abilities! Ha! Nothing like a woman scorned!
Angela A. Jul 22, 2008, 10:13pm UTC
Very powerful writing. I thought it would go one way, but, it went the opposite.
Love it!
Carl Lee Jul 22, 2008, 10:14pm UTC
Thank you for using Gather Broadcast, where there is an open line of communication for all and you’re more than a connection.
Wanda H. Jul 22, 2008, 10:26pm UTC
Amanda, me too, very wordy. But it is getting easier each week. Give it a try. I just write it out and then start trimming and slashing until I get it to the right word count. It has really helped me become a better editor.

Thanks all for your kind comments.
penni d. Jul 22, 2008, 10:26pm UTC
ooooh, wanda...dark, very dark,lol...loved it!
Rae M. Jul 22, 2008, 10:27pm UTC
I love it!!
Kerrell Goolsby Jul 22, 2008, 11:32pm UTC
He must not have been very nice to you!
Shirl T. Jul 22, 2008, 11:48pm UTC
very nice
Kimber F. Jul 22, 2008, 11:52pm UTC
Great story. Well done with only 100 words. Thanks for sharing and peace.
Jan S. Jul 23, 2008, 12:57am UTC
Woo-hoo! Awesome story with a whip crack change! I was feeling so sorry for her and WHAM! She's got it all under control. I really like this story.
Donna Hammett-Tooker Jul 23, 2008, 8:02am UTC
Looks like he won't have the chance to make that mistake again or to make up for the indescretion - you have been jury, judge and executioner. Good job, Wanda.
Thomas Washington Jul 23, 2008, 12:02pm UTC
kudos.

(i hear your closet; its door is creaking open...)
Sandre M. Jul 23, 2008, 12:11pm UTC
Wanda,

Great! Succinct but full. Nice job.
Rosa See Ya Jul 23, 2008, 1:58pm UTC
Ah, the darker side of romance. This is very well written Wanda. I keep wanting to getting involved in these essays, but my mind is somewhere else right now.
Wanda H. Jul 23, 2008, 10:17pm UTC
LOL, thomas, trust you to mention that closet. I thought of that closet when I posted this. I might have to take a look closer into that crack in the door.
Lisa Frost Bailey Jul 24, 2008, 3:42am UTC
Remind me to stay on your good side Wanda! Great job!
Tanya P. Jul 24, 2008, 9:27pm UTC
Wanda, I missed this story. I didn't see it at the 100 Word Stories group. Still, now that I've found it (not through the group....I don't see it in the group lists you've posted to), I wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed the writing. Dark. Nice take on the challenge.
Elsie Duggan Jul 25, 2008, 12:43am UTC
Wow , Wanda, don't get angry with me, lol, great story and good take on the prompt. there is no fury worse than a woman scorned, he should have known. lol, be a good boy.
Peter Joseph Swanson Jul 25, 2008, 11:26am UTC
Fabulous.
Austin Cushing Jul 25, 2008, 12:22pm UTC
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Wanda H. Jul 25, 2008, 5:58pm UTC
Tanya, somehow I missed sending it to the group! I have tried to fix that but Reena is out of town so it might not make it to the competition.

Elsie, I don't believe anyone could be mad at you, for sure, not me. Luv ya hon, way to much to get mad. Oh and I never get mad anymore, there is no percentage in anger. ;o)

Peter, thank you! If anyone knows fabulous it is you darlin'.
Dan H. Jul 25, 2008, 8:03pm UTC
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Tanya P. Jul 25, 2008, 8:14pm UTC
Whew. It wasn't just me then. I was feeling plenty guilty. LOL
Heather M. Jul 25, 2008, 9:33pm UTC
Very nice and dark.
Shelbia C. Jul 27, 2008, 1:55am UTC
Shocking ending. I liked it.
Lisa C. Nov 11, 2008, 9:55pm UTC
Thanks for sharing! I just got home from vacation and I'm trying to catch up but I wanted to stop by and Pay it Forward!

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