July's Haiku # 2

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Dan H. Jul 15, 2008, 2:12pm EDT

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Alison H. Jul 15, 2008, 2:40pm EDT

Full of life!

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Bethany C. Jul 15, 2008, 3:02pm EDT

This one made me smile imagining it.

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David W. Jul 15, 2008, 4:25pm EDT

I enjoy poetry and haikus that do not aim for obscurity. You paint with words.

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Donald Hawley Jul 15, 2008, 4:26pm EDT

Good... but "oh shoot."

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Michelle W. Jul 16, 2008, 8:17am EDT

Great Image!

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John Doyle Jul 26, 2008, 1:44pm EDT

Try to work with fewer adjectives. The best Aka classic haiku are like a black and white photo. Please don't take offense

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poetrandy R. Jul 26, 2008, 2:18pm EDT

Thanks for the pointer, John -- I believe the art of oriental poetry is a "CRAFT," thus it might take years and a lot of practice to even think of becoming a "Master." I'm still working on that, of course. I keep trying!

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July's Haiku # 2

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