by Virginia M.
Member since:
August 31, 2006

When Love Concedes

May 09, 2008 12:25 AM EDT
views: 71 | rating: 10/10 (15 votes) | comments: 15

Embers die

And cast about

Upon the wind of Winters' breath

Summers' passion long forgotten

Extinguished raging fire

 

Yet hopes remain

Beyond the flame

Bringing back a flash

 

Your eyes

Your lips

Your face

Memories refrain

 

Torturous repetition

That hangs

Upon the cusp

To fall in line

As nature

 

And the fates negotiate

Dishing up the seasons

Of love

 

With life

And death

The hurt endures

Till eyes are closed

And embers die at last

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Comments: 15

David P. May 9, 2008, 1:08am EDT
You do a beautiful job with this. Your subject, a universal and painful human experience. Very mysterious how this love can appear and recede with little say so on the part of the poor soul experiencing it. The back and forth you create with the conceding, the hoping and the letting go is so true and so sad.
Carol Lloyd May 9, 2008, 3:11am EDT
that is lovely ty Virginia
sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j. May 9, 2008, 5:47am EDT
Beautiful!
Cheryl W. May 9, 2008, 12:53pm EDT
This is very beautiful, Virginia.
Susan B. May 9, 2008, 3:16pm EDT
exceptionally beautiful Virginia :)
Barbra L. May 9, 2008, 9:56pm EDT
Virginia,

You've done a wonderful job of expressing how reluctance knits itself to hope, regarding the anguish of concession. This is a very lovely write, my friend.
Tony P. May 13, 2008, 8:40pm EDT
That's lovely
Patti M. Aug 26, 2008, 6:52am EDT
You have done a masterful job of weaving the emotions throughthis piece. It was a great read.
Patti M. Aug 26, 2008, 6:53am EDT
Thank you for the lovely comment on my post ALove story. I am truly blessed.
Sheila Deeth Sep 9, 2008, 8:55pm EDT
Beautifully crafted poem.
Lewis (taking over Gather) K. Dec 30, 2008, 12:27am EST
Wonderful writing. I love the connection between the seasons of nature and love.
William Dotani Jan 7, 2009, 11:04am EST
Life is ever fleeting as the embers. I love how you airily discuss feelings through metaphor of the seasons. You interlace the bad, or sorrow, with the good, or feelings of love. Quite delightful to read.
Anna D. Jan 29, 2009, 1:35pm EST
Very lovely and deep piece.
Anna del C.
Author of "The Silent Warrior Trilogy"
http://www.annadelc.com
Svetlana Goryacheva Feb 13, 2009, 9:28am EST
Lovely one, dear Virginia! ;-)

Blessings and best wishes - S.
Elsie Duggan Mar 11, 2009, 12:10am EDT
Very beautiful Virginia, so nice to see you again, I have missed you too, wish we still had those groups, need inspirations, I think we have all had the feelings you describe, very sad, bu t lovely.

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