by Patricia F.
Member since:
May 7, 2006

Sweets

May 02, 2008 04:35 PM EDT (Updated: May 03, 2008 10:30 PM EDT)
views: 75 | rating: 10/10 (18 votes) | comments: 29
 

I had a dream.

You were barefoot,

Dancing with my Mom

In the kitchen.

In a red plaid shirt

And baggy jeans.

You smelled like pine trees

And soap

And air.

 

She looked up at you,

Like a girl

In love again.

Something she said

Made you laugh.

You threw your head back

And your cheeks creased

Into the widest smile.

And then you kissed

The top of her snowy head.

 

I woke up

Smiling.

Then heartbroken.

Remembering

What I almost forgot.

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Comments: 29

john W. May 2, 2008, 5:09pm EDT
I'm not a poetry type reader but that's damn good. Why are you using you instead of I and me? When I change that the dream is much closer to the heart.Again I don't do much poetry.
Cheryl W. May 2, 2008, 5:15pm EDT
Loved this one, Patricia!
john W. May 2, 2008, 5:20pm EDT
O I get it you had a dream about your mom and DAD, now it makes sense to me
Tara C. May 2, 2008, 5:36pm EDT
This is good
Very sweet, Pat! One of those memories that could have slipped away but you captured it nicely in your dream.
Patricia F. May 2, 2008, 6:29pm EDT
Actually, it's about my brother in law who died of brain cancer three months before my Mom died. It's written as "you" as a little love letter to him, even though he has passed away. I really dreamed of the two together. Really smelled the woods. He was an avid outdoorsman. And we called him Sweets.
The real beauty of it is that it doesn't matter who it is about... it rings true no matter who it was.
Kimberly Ripley May 2, 2008, 11:15pm EDT
Sometimes those dreams are so real, they really bring us back in time. It hurts to wake up! Beautiful poem!
Toni V. May 3, 2008, 12:13am EDT
Very nice poem.
Haim Kadman May 3, 2008, 12:19pm EDT
What a lovely dream and a beautiful poem. Thank you Patricia.
Mariana T. May 4, 2008, 3:16am EDT
Patricia, this was very touching and beautifully written. Thank you. Salud.
Vicky Duggins May 4, 2008, 5:26am EDT
Very nice. I understand perfectly, especially

<center>I woke up

Smiling.

Then heartbroken.

Remembering

What I almost forgot.

</center>
Vicky Duggins May 4, 2008, 5:26am EDT
well, poop
Patricia F. May 4, 2008, 11:58am EDT
Thanks to everyone for reading!

Now, Vicky....huh?
Alison H. May 4, 2008, 9:12pm EDT
Is it an "anniversary" of one of their deaths? They may be trying to tell you that they are okay.

I got a similar one of my dad, exactly one month after he passed. I dreamt I saw him at a "family reunion" with two other relatives who had passed. They all looked younger and healthy, as I remember them from when I was a child.
Alison H. May 4, 2008, 9:13pm EDT
Good poem!
David S. May 10, 2008, 11:13am EDT
What a fantastic treat to get a poem from you, Pat! This is so intimate and personal like your other writings, but perhaps amplified because of the poetic form. The background information was enlightening--but ultimately the poem stands by itself and conjures lots of emotions and thoughts in me already.
Patricia F. May 10, 2008, 3:37pm EDT
Thanks, all for all of your lovely comments!
Pepsie J. May 12, 2008, 4:55pm EDT
Beautiful. It evokes a great deal of imagery. Thank you
René Allen May 13, 2008, 8:42am EDT
Patricia ~ This is BEAUTIFUL!

Blessings ~
Rene
dianne j. May 13, 2008, 9:41pm EDT
How lovely Patricia. It reminded me of a dream I had about my mother, that she was well again and walking. My heart was broken when I awakened to realize it was only a dream. But for just a few minutes, I got to see my real mother again.
Glome . . . May 13, 2008, 11:19pm EDT
Oh Patricia ... Wonderful!!!! The poem itself was SO enjoyable and then 2 surprises in the end. One happy, one sad. What a roller coaster ride. Thank you so much.
Mariana T. May 20, 2008, 2:26am EDT
PATRICIA - I MISS YOU! SALUD.
Patricia F. May 20, 2008, 6:25am EDT
Hi Mariana
I am still here.Life has just been very crazy, lately!
Jennifer N. May 26, 2008, 8:09pm EDT
This is touching and sad. Beautifully written.
Christopher Cole Jun 1, 2008, 9:39pm EDT
I loved it! Beautifully done!
David V. Jun 1, 2008, 10:14pm EDT
Very touching and sweet.
Also a very nice tribute to your brotherinlaw.
Thank you for sharing
Elizabeth Madrigal Jun 11, 2008, 1:44pm EDT
This is so tragically dear, so touching and filled with the sadness and wisdom one gains when accepting life on its terms. Yet we can still dream and remember... Lovely, Patricia F.

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