Can No Longer Recognize

Lost in a crowd, my posturing and laughter hides the pain of loneliness that plagues, darkens and twist my soul into something I can no longer recognize. The voices pound and assault my senses; it takes all my strength not to explode and drive them all away as someone would a swarm of annoying flies or mosquitoes.

I take a sip from my half empty glass of wine, savoring the warmth of the elixir that will aid me in washing your memory away, if only for the night. I look around the room, searching for the woman who will be my queen of the moment. Her name is soon forgotten, as is the man I used to be. I have become someone I can longer recognize.

(Just a quick write. Just let my thoughts flow.)

Comments: 14

Carol Lloyd Apr 18, 2008, 4:18pm EDT

thanks for this article

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Peter Joseph Swanson Apr 18, 2008, 5:29pm EDT

cool

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Nathan Schauer Apr 18, 2008, 5:42pm EDT

As a stream of consciousness piece - the fragmentation of thought works to create a solid character. Its flash fiction and by having a tangible character emerge it is a nice feat of writing.

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Alison Pearce Apr 18, 2008, 6:11pm EDT

Wonderful prose!

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CC Miranda the artrat (or am i?) Apr 18, 2008, 6:33pm EDT

ooo juan. you need to do more quick prose. good stuff.

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Pat McDowell Apr 19, 2008, 1:13pm EDT

I like it, self recognition and self acceptance are two different things. I dont much like either, but if your thinking it, write it.

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Lilith Dorsey Apr 19, 2008, 4:57pm EDT

Really intense.

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Apr 20, 2008, 11:58am EDT

This is deep and engrossing. A wonderful way of expression.

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Ruth Luce Apr 21, 2008, 5:07pm EDT

Very nice and so easily conveys the feelings therein, bravo!

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Charity M. Apr 22, 2008, 10:05am EDT

((( That's putting the BOLD...out there...Being yourself...is an honesty...not accepted by all. But, you know what...accepting one's self is the start to reaching all you want to be... :o) )))

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