You Don't Need Approval (Pls Crit)

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Svetlana Goryacheva Apr 17, 2008, 8:31am EDT

Bravo, dear Fred! ;-) How we usually put it - this says it all.

Hugs & blessings - S.

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Fred Hose Apr 17, 2008, 8:34am EDT

Hello Sveta dear

There you are. Big welcome. Of course. Let's bust those chains asunder.
Big hug big blessings.....F

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Kristina B. Apr 17, 2008, 11:05am EDT

Oh Wow Fred, I can't tell you how much I love this. I can't describe how it makes me feel. "A slave forever"... I am so tired of being a slave, how ironic that I've had the key to my chains all these years....

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Cristina S. Apr 17, 2008, 2:14pm EDT

That's right Fred! "Die Gedanken sind frei!"
No more chains - stand for none and take off the old ones!
I love it, you have said it so well!!

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lynn a. Apr 18, 2008, 9:30am EDT

Fred, I can't critique. All I can do is tell you this poem speaks to me. The message is a superb one that I take to heart.

I saw your post on Elsie's article this morning and came quickly to see what you had written. Your article and poem about the Symbolists had so affected me and also opened up a new world for me, that I just had to come see what else you had done. And Fred, I think many of us are down in comments because we can't find each other easily. This lack of comments in no way speaks to the quality of your work. You are a cut above. Yes, a lot of us can write and put together some poetry and have fun and all, but you go beyond that. I hope you continue to publish ( when Gather functions for you again) in the future. And I hope I am here to see it.

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Marge H. Apr 18, 2008, 10:55am EDT

Wow, what a great uplifting and empowering message! It rings so true and yet, I never thought about the fact that I have the ability to remove those chains.

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Mariana T. Apr 18, 2008, 1:48pm EDT

************************* Fred********************* You are wonderful! Also, your words are like diamonds - how wonderful that you appreciate the sparkles - I know about souls soaring - that's where mine met yours my friend - up there dancing on a cloud! Have a blessed, bountiful day! Salud

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William Dotani Apr 18, 2008, 6:35pm EDT

This has a flowing beautiful melody that highlights the beautiful message. I love the provoking imagery in these lines, 'When all those chains that bind us
Are ripe for their removal.' The word ripe tells us it's time for a revolution against the injustices in this world. To say chains are ripe is a solid metaphor.

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William Dotani Apr 18, 2008, 6:38pm EDT

Another great thing about this verse is that it speaks to both society at large and to a solely personal level. Very inspiring words.

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Lisa J Apr 21, 2008, 7:49am EDT

Wow Fred. This was just excellent. It made me feel a little sad that I have allowed myself to become so mired in what others might say...

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lynn a. Apr 23, 2008, 2:07pm EDT

Just rereading. When I can actually get to a particular person's writing I am learning to immerse in it in every article, because it might be hard getting back. I no longer take being able to find someone for granted, so am spending time at a person's site to absorb it all. Beautiful work, Fred. Just beautiful.

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René Allen Apr 23, 2008, 11:19pm EDT

Literary and Poetic Genius that you are Fred. I agree. YOU don't need APPROVAL. What is that I hear in the spirit realm . . .
"APPROVAL GRANTED!!!" ~ THRICE OVER.

Blessings & MUCH LOVE,
Rene

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Linda K. Apr 24, 2008, 12:10am EDT

I love this.

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Wanda H. Apr 24, 2008, 4:00am EDT

I can't think of a single line or word I would change. The imagery was powerful. Chains ripe for removal is so much in just so few words. I am really in awe of the talent you poured into this work.

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