by Richard Melendez
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June 28, 2006

A DUET IN A GARDEN PLACE

April 15, 2008 05:59 AM EDT
views: 139 | rating: 10/10 (32 votes) | comments: 39
 
A DUET IN A GARDEN PLACE

The stem, the leaf, the head of rose
Does it crave what gentle lover's kisses bring?
Can it feel the handle of my fingertips?
May I roam throughout as I do my lover's parts?
Can I be the sun when high noon warmth begins,
Have use of limbs like rays of magic yellow sun?
She would caress, breathe me in, as a flower would

Oh, here she is!
She who comes to gather me, her tenderness in tow
A blown breath of lavender has me swimming in her whims
Breath and kiss come rising to bring foreplay to the face
In slips the aroma, the pure purplish of her petal
Watery caresses will turn my face up to blossom
I bow to her faithful way to sway and fawn my face
 



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Comments: 39

John F Walter Apr 15, 2008, 6:18am EDT
You pair the rose and the beloved in a stunning way here in this unrhymed sonnet, Richard, and the singing poem that emerges comes from the sensuous qualities of touch and taste and smell of both. The alliteration that structures in place of rhyme is supremely appealing in its twining of the flower and lover--¨to bring foreplay to the face¨, ¨the pure purplish of her petal.¨and your mastery over the melody of the language is here throughout is unquestionable. I saw these images, smelled and tasted and touched in the garden under the sun!
~*Jackie Ferrari*~ Apr 15, 2008, 8:25am EDT
Ohh Richard!
I swear....you do it every time.
I can feel the breath~rising.
It is simply delicious!!!!!


dark purple rose
~*Jackie Ferrari*~ Apr 15, 2008, 8:27am EDT
♥ May I roam throughout as I do my lover's parts? ♥




*wink*
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Apr 15, 2008, 8:37am EDT
Richard,

You were right, this one really gets to me! There are multiple themes here that I love-- the wondering about the consciousness of plants, the use of flowers as a metaphor for young women, and the sensuality of breathing in a flower's frangrance as a symbol of love-making.

I have the acute feeling of being in a garden on a warm summer's day.
Richard Melendez Apr 15, 2008, 8:40am EDT
John... thank you for the insightful flow of your commentary. To my ear, your words of commentary leap like poetry. You are always so generous with your help and your time.

Jackie... a purple rose!!!... now you've turned my blood purple and pulsing. Thanks for the lovely thoughts.
Apryl Just Apryl Apr 15, 2008, 8:44am EDT
Richard,
as always, simply beautiful!!
penni d. Apr 15, 2008, 8:45am EDT
you have blended the best of love AND a rose in this delightful ode, Richard...:)
Richard Melendez Apr 15, 2008, 8:53am EDT
Ann... thank you for dipping into my words and coming away with this feeling of a garden on a summer's day. You have a wonderful sense for poetry and breathing the life it contains.

April... as always your words often move my heart.

Penni... you delight me too with your generous comment.
*Holly *. Apr 15, 2008, 9:06am EDT
So beautiful!
t b. Apr 15, 2008, 9:38am EDT
Once again I enjoyed reading you Richard.
Heather W. Apr 15, 2008, 9:48am EDT
Lovely and beautiful
Priscilla P. Apr 15, 2008, 11:05am EDT
How beautifully sensuous
Granny Janny H. Apr 15, 2008, 11:10am EDT
There is no answer to this
but Yes!
Love on so many levels
of sensuality
Is painted here
in honeyed hues
Christine P. Apr 15, 2008, 11:18am EDT
A wonderfully written poem with so much emotion!
Kathryn E. Apr 15, 2008, 11:24am EDT
Absolutely delightful!
Andrea Grenadier Apr 15, 2008, 11:27am EDT
Richard, this is so lovely. And it almost cracks a tiny space in my bitterness, to hope for better things! I love the grace of it, too.
Charity M. Apr 15, 2008, 11:37am EDT
((( A sense of heaven..a pass~lovely )))
vijay kumar Apr 15, 2008, 11:46am EDT
So beautiful, this poem captures my imagination. The rose and the beauty....I can feel each of your word, rich in its sensuous fragrance. You have made a lovely picture, graceful and sweet.
Jennifer Kirkpatrick Apr 15, 2008, 11:57am EDT
Beautiful, Richard. Vivid!
lynn a. Apr 15, 2008, 12:01pm EDT
Beautiful, just simply beautiful.
Kristina B. Apr 15, 2008, 12:08pm EDT
I love flowers Richard. I have many rose bushes in my yard and right now they are all in full bloom... so beautiful. Sometimes in the middle of the comings and goings of my day, I will stop and admire them, gently touch their velvet petals and breathe in their heavenly fragrance. I don't always cut them, but sometimes I do, along with some lavender that blooms out there as well. Have you ever noticed that the flowers in the market do not smell as sweet, I wonder why that is? Maybe it's a reminder that there are some things in life that can't be mass produced... like a poets heart and the mysteries hidden deep inside.

I can see the dance, the gentle way she embraces the bloom held gently to her cheek and the faraway places she lets her mind wander to in the midst of an otherwise chaotic day..... Thanks for the vision. Have a wonderful afternoon!

Kristina
Diana Raabe Apr 15, 2008, 12:58pm EDT
The rose and the sun make a lovely duet. JFW referred to this as a sonnet and I think that's accurate...a sonnet is 14 lines, right?
Elsie Duggan Apr 15, 2008, 1:30pm EDT
A beautiful poem Richard, brings back memories of flowers and other things of youth, I love it.
Beryl Singleton Bissell Apr 15, 2008, 1:54pm EDT
Oh my! This is so tender, so exquisite the images, that a shiver ran up my spine as I read it.
Edward Nudelman Apr 15, 2008, 5:13pm EDT
Richard! A beautifully crafted love poem. The flow is really seamless and I love the looks of the poem (important), with sparing punctuation; tells me you worked hard on the syntax. But what gentle, sweet and delicious affair of the heart!
Wanda H. Apr 15, 2008, 11:45pm EDT
The use of a rose as a metaphor for a lover's form, is beautiful and sensuous. Flowers are such a universal symbol of womanhood and the rose, of course, has come to symbolize a beautiful mature woman. Your heart is in your work.
Jan S. Apr 16, 2008, 3:43pm EDT
I can feel the softness of the rose petals and the love in your words.
Karolyn Q. Apr 17, 2008, 11:00am EDT
This was so beautiful. I love it.
F. Jeanette c. Apr 18, 2008, 5:33pm EDT
Bravo, Bravo. Everyone has said it all.

10 4 u
Heather Baldwin Apr 22, 2008, 11:50pm EDT
This is a beautiful poem, Richard. Nice job!
amanda wallin May 17, 2008, 8:43am EDT
Hey honey! Delectable and beautifully written poem. I love how you refer to the tips of beauty that feel and the stern that moves. What a treat for the senses.
Richard, just one word: superb!
Esther IS Flesh and Blood S. May 21, 2008, 5:42am EDT
Absolutely wonderful!

The symbolism was keen and the words soft with all of the beauty of the human form.
elizabeth e. Jun 4, 2008, 5:42am EDT
Such lyrical images
caressed my mind
as I read your
words this morn.
flit . Jun 4, 2008, 8:01am EDT
beautifully crafted - thanks to Magi for the link
William Dotani Jun 6, 2008, 2:09am EDT
I felt like your first stanza was an introduction filled with the observations of nature to be metaphoric in describing the sensuality of your wife. The second stanza is pure romance told in the hue of the sublime.
Sheila Deeth Jun 9, 2008, 11:55pm EDT
Lovely. I came via Magi too and loved this.

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