Among the things that I do is play the clarinet. Not that you would pay to hear me. No, that's not how it is. I play for myself. The sound of my instrument is very important to me and I'd like to tell you why.
When I first began to play I nearly gave up. I soon regarded the reed piece with complete disaffection. I felt that the squeaks and squawks, always at the most inappropriate times, were affronts to my budding musical taste. These maverick noises always came between me and my love of those beautiful wind sounds that I had heard played by others. Clarinet playing, at its best, had a profound affect on me because it struck an ancient chord deep within me
Fortunately, someone told me about a musician known as Solly. He was the key item on the must haves at any Jewish wedding. In fact, no ceremony was complete without Solly and his rampant clarinet.
What brought us together was the gift of knowing how and why a clarinet reed went maverick. With his uncanny knowledge, he was able to completely coax me into a new state of mind. Yes, he did say "o vey, your lips and o vey, the shape of your mouth?" but it was something that he did to my state of mind that swung the scales.
There came the time when I could pick my instrument and just sail up and down the scales. It was an incredible feeling. My life became a joy and I looked forward to each new day and its practice sessions.
Soon, Solly began taking me with him to Jewish weddings. Oh my. I can to this day, recall every detail of my first visit.
OK, a Jewish wedding is a little exotic. There are customs that are faithfully followed. I accepted them was able to become absorbed in them. But there was a moment when I was totally taken aback. I was shocked but at the same time filled with a total exhilaration.
It happened on that first occasion when Solly ceremoniously stormed into the hall, like a one man carnival. His clarinet calls went up and down ancient, perhaps Babylonian, scales and I was transported into the world dancing, longing, laughing and even forbidden joy. Well, that's what I felt.
And his dancing? I'd never seen anything like that. He stepped and turned all around the wide open space. He waved his clarinet around as if it was a magic gift from God and he was showering everyone in the room with heart beat pulses of exuberant joy. He waved it from wall to wall, then addressed the floor and, at times, raised it to the ceiling. His glissandos took you with them to heights that nine to five people never thought about.
I left that wedding exhausted but I knew...I really knew...that for a moment, I had been truly alive.
I met Solly in a bar one night. It happened after I had already been to three weddings with him. I couldn't wait to have a conversation with him away from all the glitter and the ceremony. We had a couple of beers and then we began to talk.
There were matters relevant to the wedding that I had to discuss with him
"Solly, there at the wedding. Was that really you? I mean the unadulterated you?"
"So who should it be? Who else could I be but me?"
"So that is how you play? I mean the real you?"
"Did you think that I played like someone else? Like whom should I play then?"
"Look Solly. I'm trying to tell you something. You were wild. You showered the room with joy. Even I felt like dancing. I no longer cared. I just felt in anther world."
"So you think that you got a little happy? So you got a little lift?"
"Yes. I thought of tents. Veils. Dancing. I thought of Biblical times. Don't know how to explain it."
Solly stared at me for along time before he nodded his head. He put his hand on my shoulder and spoke to me with a soft glow in his eyes.
He passed me my beer and then took his glass and held it towards me.
"My dear boy. I think that you're ready to hear this. You know the story but not like I'll tell it to you now. Long ago there was a man called David. He even became a king
He did many bad things but God forgave him. You will ask why and so I'll tell you why. Because he sang and he danced and he composed to please God.
We say that God loves it when we're happy in His name. Not sadly happy. Not all stiff and formal but joyfully happy."
"And that's how you play at weddings?"
"Yes, my dear boy. And that's how you must play. Even when you are sad or happy or in love you must play as if you want to thank God for all that He has given to you ...and to us all."
"So music must flow from a sense of celebration of God's love?"
He looked into my eyes, as he poked his index finger into my chest.
"And it must come from there, my boy. Right from there."
"I can do that, Solly."
"Now listen to your Uncle Solly. No music is worth a damn unless it comes from there. Never mind whether you're happy or in deepest sorrow.
A year or two passed and Solly and I parted. I was transferred to another city but he was never far from me. In fact, I got into the habit of sitting on a bench in a park on every Saturday afternoon and playing softly. I often thought about how he would answer my questions with questions of his own.
It was my custom to go to a nearby park every Sunday morning. In a secluded corner was a bench that I had begun to regard as my own. Feeling alive after my brisk half hour walk there, I would play softly to myself. Sometimes I would leap up and sway and turn while playing the songs that I had learned at the weddings. Then I would sit down with a broad smile. "Solly, that was for you."
One morning, something woke me from my reverie. I looked up and saw a young woman.
She had dark hair hanging loosely down. Her cheeks had a high colour and her eyes were alive.
I stopped playing and raised my eyebrows just a little.
"So did you like what I was playing?"
"Why shouldn't I like it?"
"Well did it do something for you?"
"Why should it do something for me?"
"I mean, did you feel that it come from deep down?"
"Isn't that where music should come from?"
"Did it make you feel close to me?"
"Did you want me to feel close to you?"
"So how close did you feel?"
"How close did you want me to feel?"
I looked her up and down for a long time. She was unusual but attractive. She was more tropical desert than Sussex. More Mercouri than Grace Kelly. More Arabica than Pimms.
Then I smiled as I thought about her answering all my questions with questions of her own.
"You're not Jewish, are you?"
No matter how well I played, my clarinet never made a more happy sound than her laughter did, at that moment.


Comments: 44
And spiritual.
And beautiful.
And full of gentle humor.
And I love it!
Thank you!
(My daughter plays the clarinet...)
What experiences and adventures..
loved your story..colorful and vivid..
great timbre of emotion ..just like those great fluttering notes from that alto clarinet kicking off Gershwin's Rhapsody in Blue.
Great dialog, best I've seen you write. Nicely done.
You mentioned a few times that you like some of my writing. I beleive that my best writing comes from my dreams and that that is when and how God speaks to me.
The squeaks the squawks... yes, what a troublesome thing those reeds can be!
And what joy music can really be when it is a celebration of all of life, including death and sorrow, and the joys of beginnings. Music played from the soul resonates to a listener, and for a moment the edges fall away, and they truly know.
As for the clarinet playing...that was the choice of both Will and Zach; Aaron chose the flute. Lots of music was heard around this house in former times. Now it's just me playing the piano.
I perosnally love. Clarinet and it's sound. A lovely story here with ceremonial happiness. Your portrait of the girl makes her more gorgeous.A happy plot with vibrant scenes. You gave the best shot in your story.
However, I found the following sentence rather convoluted and in need of an edit.
'The fact that it would squeak and squawk at the most inappropriate times had become between me and the love of those wind sounds that I had heard in many parts of the world played by artists that I felt shared my nostalgia and yearning for something that I had never known.'
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My only critique comes from how you changed the scene after, "God, do you hear my joy?" I thought there was a needed transition to lead us into this scene.
I'm so sorry that I'm replying so late.
I can't seem to get to my articles and I can' leave comments on peoples' articles and most of the time not even on my own.
Your praise came close to my heart and I'm so glad that your daughter is playing this great instrument.
Those were wonderfully inspiring words for me.
Don't worry about Solly. He's with you....right there in the centre of your heart.
Oh I know that great opening passage. I get a thrill everytime I hear it.
My pride and joy, is a re-mastered copy of Artie Shaw playing that superb and unforgetteble jazz classic...Clarinet a la King...from I took the title of this piece.
I'll treasure this comment of yours.
Like the music that I wrote about, your comment came straight from the heart.
I can see that you understood every nuance of what I wrote.
Thank you for your words
It's aways a pleasure to have you here for a visit, Bob.
Two sons playing clarinet. Those must be great memories. I love to hear about families playing together.
Once in the South, I was with a family that sang together. I can still remember the harmonies. They sent shivers through me.
Yeaah I'm working on my dialogue and my scene settings. Thanks for your guidance.
Keeps me on my toes.
I've changed those numbers as you suggested. You were right to mention them.
Atlast I'm able to contact you. I seem to be cut off from the world through something in this new advance.
I'm so glad that you're guiding Anmol so wisely. There's othing like playing music and dancing to give a child that exta dimension.
Hahaha.... that Indian wedding. You know me. That had to go in. It was something that I saw in real life and I still can't forget it.
I'm OK Reena but I'm swamped under work. I've never been so busy. I hate it when the opportunity to make money interferes with my writing.
I think about you so much and I'm so sorry to be cut off from you through these stupid technology glitches.
Suddenly today I can post again. I can't believe my luck.
How are you my dear friend.
Thank you for your great crits. They were crucial to the readability of my story.
I can see your teacher's eye spotting each misstep.
I've done all the changes and they've made a huge difference. Thanks again. If I manage to stay connected I'll come over to your page a little later. I think that I've missed a lot.
There's a rainbow waiting for all of us.
Solly told me that...hahaha.
like a moth, I flew into the light of your conversation with the lovely exotica...
I was there.
I still am.
Your powerful creativity does that for me - take me on journeys that dance.
Thank you - this was joyful! Salud
You are most welcome to my humble abode. Sit down....have a glass of red wine. Let's talk.
Please come again.
Thank you Shelbia
I'm glad that you came and enjoyed this piece. It's one of my favourites.
You are always so welcome. I know one thing. I know that you read what I write in the same spirit that I write.
Any time that I sit and talk with Solly or when he plays at a wedding, you are MOST welcome. Always.
Your articles and your comments are sheer upliftment for me. You always make me smile.
Bless you a thousand times. Salud
shared with all of us here on Gather !! I really did
appreciate this so much. Thank you Fred. *smiles*
Hugs n Love,
Barbie
And many other instruments too !!
Your comments are always worthy of a careful read.
I appreciate the fact that you came back and enjoyed this piece the second time around. I take that as a great compliment.
Go well.
I'm overjoyed that you loved this piece. It's one of my favourites too. May an author have a favourite? I don't know but this piece expresses a part of my psyche very well.
I'm sure that your grand daughter is a blessing to you all.
It's always a special pleasure to have your visit. Yes music does make the world go round...just like your yacht does. *smile*
Bon voyage.
Yes I'm glad to be connected with you. I've heard so many good things about you.
I appreciate your comments. I'm glad that you savored the flavor. The story was all about flavors.
Fred, here's a few remarks: I understand you about the clarinet. I envy and admire you that you've learned to play and play well! I feel the same way about the fiddle. But I haven't learned to really play it, yet. Like I said, I envy you your prowess.
This piece needs to be shortened. I read the first third, skipped to the ending, then realized I needed to read the middle in order to fully understand it. It's not that it was boring! No, not that, but simply a little long, sometimes it meandered. One part that can easily be excised is the explanation of Jewish people answering a question with a question. You make that point by example and therefore because you showed us, you don't need to also tell us.
Which brings me to another comment. Watch that you stick to the old adage of "show, don't tell". Review your piece and ask yourself, "Can I show what I mean by action rather than telling the reader by wordy adjectives?"
This piece shows huge potential. The subject is strong, your storytelling fluid, the characters are enamoring. Subjectively, Fred, I love the subject. The way you spoke of the clarinet resonated with the way I think of the violin.
Fred,
I may have been thinking along the same lines as Susan is in her comment above. I'm glad you've written the whole story out, but as I was reading it, I wondered how powerful a very short version of it would be, as well. Many of those questions can be shortened, and philosophically, some may be more powerful unanswered. You've got good voice and style and much to work with here -- and much work already done. Enjoyed reading, thank you.
First of all Susan. Welcome.
Secondly, I need your kind of positive commentary. Where will I go if I write in a vacuum. Yes there is a lot that I can leave out. That's the thing with my writing. I can usually cut one third of it out. Unfortunately one get's into a rut and needs a wake up call.
Your encouragement indicates that there is hope. *smile* I'll get to work on it right away. Tomorrow morning. I have the day off. Thank you.
Hi Kerry. Welcome to you too.
It's all very funny. I too like stories that are taut and kind of crispy. Or is it crunchy? I'm very glad that you enjoyed it as a story.
You and Susan have woken something in me...and that's good. Yes...and what Susan said ..show don't tell. Do you know what? I comments like these.
I'll work on it. Thank you.
Hi Susan andKerry.
Thank you again for your valuable comments. Hooray. I managed to cut 330 + words.
I left out words that were not vital. Perhaps I can do more over the weekend. OK I did "tell" rather than "show" here and there but I did felt justified in doing that because the story is told in the first person. Well, I hope that justifies it.
Thank you again. This exercise is part of what Gather is all about. Great.
Fred, it's good to hear you say This exercise is part of what Gather is all about.
That's my belief as well and to that end, my Wednesday column for Gather Writing Essential, beginning next week on June 3rd, will focus on feedback and constructive criticism, as well as other writing aspects. Over the next fews days, I need to outline a few months worth of columns, but as I move around on Gather and listen to what writers are saying, I'm seeing a need and want for helpful comments that go beyond encouragement, but that discuss the craft of writing.
Oh wow. This was truly delightful Fred. I loved following the journey and the ending was just perfect.