by Lawrence U.
Member since:
January 10, 2007

Dreamtime Lover

April 05, 2008 09:12 PM EDT
views: 108 | rating: 10/10 (40 votes) | comments: 43

the dreamtime
lover in her element ...
orchids in full bloom

the sound
of your beautiful eyelashes
fluttering...
as passion fills the air
under the yellow moon

joyful vision...
a subtle love omen over
the rainbow

you nourish my
soul with your secret nectar
the elixir of life foretold

you capture
the moment of creation
as we melt
into each other; celebrating
the eternal oneness of being

you transform
the battered earth into delicious
chocolate with attitude

now, the enchanting
night of wonder unfolds...
the symphony of seduction

we walk
along the blissful lane
drunk with love


 

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Comments: 43

sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j. Apr 5, 2008, 9:15pm EDT
That's beautiful!
"the symphony of seduction"- that line is seduction in itself!
Lina :-p Apr 5, 2008, 9:20pm EDT
How sweet and descriptive!
Ellie !. Apr 5, 2008, 9:23pm EDT
I agree that "the symphony of seduction" was a wonderful line...and then, I had to smile at the thought of you walking hand-in-hand weaving as you walked, drunk with love
Vivian P. Apr 5, 2008, 9:36pm EDT
lovely poem
Ann M. (Site Scryer) Apr 5, 2008, 9:53pm EDT
Lawrence, I'm still not sure exactly who or what you are in love with, but the images are lovely nevertheless.

This reminds me of the movie "The Scent of Green Papaya"-- it's full of lush, erotic images of nature.
Stefania H. Apr 5, 2008, 10:10pm EDT
very sensual...
Barbara B. Apr 5, 2008, 10:36pm EDT
Very Lovely Poem!!
Shirl T. Apr 5, 2008, 11:17pm EDT
so very nice
vickey w Apr 5, 2008, 11:46pm EDT
So beautiful and thoughtful
Audrey F. Apr 6, 2008, 12:04am EDT
Lawrence, a most sensual poem that brought me great pleasure, smiles and
laugh out loud laughter over my favorite verse:


"you transform
the battered earth into delicious
chocolate with attitude"
Alison Pearce Apr 6, 2008, 12:18am EDT
Beautiful as always!
lynn a. Apr 6, 2008, 12:42am EDT
This is a very beautiful and sensual poem. I'm going to have to look into more of your writings. This was actually elegant. Bravo.
Patty H. Apr 6, 2008, 12:46am EDT
What a beautiful poem, thank you for sharing.
Curt L. Apr 6, 2008, 12:02pm EDT
Sublime, my friend! So sensual! Wonderful appeals to the senses; hearing, sight, taste and touch! Thank you so much, Lawrence!
Trudy P. Apr 6, 2008, 12:52pm EDT
What a beautiful poem, I absolutely love these lines.
"you capture
the moment of creation
as we melt
into each other; celebrating
the eternal oneness of being"
Nyota *Star* Apr 6, 2008, 4:40pm EDT
Love it!
elizabeth e. Apr 6, 2008, 5:15pm EDT
Oh my, you certainly are drunk in love tonight but with the morrow, will it be the same?
Charli Mills Apr 6, 2008, 6:20pm EDT
Beautiful, seductive poem!
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Apr 7, 2008, 12:31pm EDT
Sensual and delicous.You talent is tremendous.you capture
the moment of creation
as we melt
into each other; celebrating
the eternal oneness of being

 you are an all time-romance writer blending with the nature elegantly. This leaves me indeep thoughts.

My yummy #10
M & M. Apr 7, 2008, 8:39pm EDT
You are very talented. This is so beautiful.
Sherrie H. Apr 8, 2008, 10:02am EDT
Very sensual images. Very well-written! Thanks!
Marie J. R. Apr 8, 2008, 5:40pm EDT
This is very well done,,, Thank you,,,
Jean, just the teensiest bit odd, F. Apr 9, 2008, 6:04pm EDT
Gorgeous, Lawrence... As usual... :o)

(Sorry it's taken me so long to comment on your article but, I've been offline for almost a week now due to problems with my IP and am just now going through all of my contacts' articles... jean)
Jennifer N. Apr 9, 2008, 8:06pm EDT
Very well written!
Minakshi w. Apr 10, 2008, 4:25am EDT
Lawrence, with orchids and chocolates and divine eternity, this poem is a real treat!
Very pretty. Well worded with such beauty.
Frog Catcher Apr 16, 2008, 9:50pm EDT
Oh, now this is passionate! And also sweetly done! :-)
William Dotani Apr 24, 2008, 1:07am EDT
'the sound
of your beautiful eyelashes
fluttering...'

What great verse. The surreal nature of imagined sounds and sights throughout this poem gives one a feeling of flights into fantasy. This beautifully describes passion and your last line sums up this feeling quite well.
Abby N. May 8, 2008, 8:25pm EDT
You are a very good writer! 10! I really enjoyed this!
t b. May 15, 2008, 3:43am EDT
Your poetry is delightful.
I wish I could take it to my bed with me, I have not been sleeping well, my dreams are haunting me.
I really need to come read you more often, I find you so soothing.....t
Jill~Sexy Back~ V. May 15, 2008, 3:49am EDT
this is very beautifully written
wonder words of bliss
Jerri H. May 29, 2008, 10:19pm EDT
Your works Lawrence, are always so sumptuous~
Tina Coruth May 31, 2008, 10:31pm EDT
Wow!
Ashley P. Jun 19, 2008, 8:13pm EDT
natural and sensual. oh- to walk down the blissful lane in life- drunk on love- sounds like a great place to be.
Marsha S. Jun 28, 2008, 10:37pm EDT
aaahhh...to be drunk with love.....
Rita j. Oct 14, 2008, 9:15pm EDT
Your so deep
Fran S. Oct 18, 2008, 6:13pm EDT
absolutely beautiful, thought provoking, vivid words
Beverly P. Oct 26, 2008, 1:15am EDT
I know it's an older poem... but I owed you a reciprocated comment.... I'm glad I did! Loved this!
Deborah R. Nov 4, 2008, 4:36pm EST
Wow!! enough said.
.* Sandi * Nov 4, 2008, 7:01pm EST
Wonderfully done! Lawrence!
Pay it forward group
Donna S. Nov 4, 2008, 7:02pm EST
Great words!
the immersion in your lovely poem is like honey~

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