by Tracey W.
Member since:
April 21, 2007

Not This - 100 WORD STORIES WEEK 8- CHALLENGE

March 30, 2008 09:05 PM EDT (Updated: March 30, 2008 09:07 PM EDT)
views: 106 | rating: 10/10 (28 votes) | comments: 39
 

Angela sat alone at the kitchen table and took her new medication.  The doctor said it would help stabilize her moods.  She thought back over the last twenty four hours and prayed he was right.

"Oh, Marco, I'm so glad you're home baby, we need to talk.  I know you don't really understand what's been happening with me, but if you'll let me try to explain -

Marco threw a single sheet of paper onto the table in disgust.  

- what?  What's this?  It read, "EMERGENCY CUSTODY ORDER".  Angela fell into uncontrollable sobs as Marco took their children and left.

©TSW 2008

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Comments: 39

Kristina B. Mar 30, 2008, 9:15pm EDT
Wow! That was a great piece Tracey... I am familiar with the lines of pharmaceuticals that are suppose to control our moodicals.... I hope it wasn't autobio... hats off to you!
Tracey W. Mar 30, 2008, 9:42pm EDT
Thanks! No, not personal. My ex barely helps as it is.
Marianne M. Mar 30, 2008, 10:20pm EDT
Very compelling story, Tracey. Poor Angela! How horrible to lose her children. An excellent drabble!
Jimmie (Hey! Let's Gather!) Harris Mar 30, 2008, 10:21pm EDT
I love this one! There are some events in life that defy drug effects!
Alison Pearce Mar 31, 2008, 12:08am EDT
Powerful drabble Tracey
Charli Mills Mar 31, 2008, 12:29am EDT
Devastating! Well developed drabble and hits us square in the heart.
Miz Lynn aka/BooBoo Mar 31, 2008, 12:58am EDT
What's happened to the promise of "in sickness and in health" nowadays? Although sad, this is GREAT drabble!
Jim Ross Mar 31, 2008, 2:00am EDT
Good job, Tracey. Sad and troubled. Very well written drabble.
Kay M. Mar 31, 2008, 12:00pm EDT
Well done Tracey
Parul S. Mar 31, 2008, 3:13pm EDT
Very well written...and you very well show the anguish that led to the sobs...very powerful writing
Elsie Duggan Mar 31, 2008, 4:31pm EDT
Great drabble Tracey. sad when this kind of thing happens, but it does, glad it is not you
June B. Mar 31, 2008, 4:39pm EDT
Oh poor Angela. Well written.
Tracey W. Mar 31, 2008, 4:49pm EDT
Thank you all very much! I really just thought about what would destroy me and built the story around it. I'm blessed to never have faced such a thing. I know of so many who have, men and women. It truly is devastating.

Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement- they mean so much.
Austin Cushing Mar 31, 2008, 6:50pm EDT
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Marge H. Mar 31, 2008, 11:01pm EDT
Another excellent drabble. I'm so glad that it has not happened to you but it is so well written and believable that I thought it had.
Stephanie B. Apr 1, 2008, 3:29pm EDT
I've seen this from the other side. It's just as tragic.
Ann R. Apr 2, 2008, 12:39am EDT
Many facets to this short scene. Well done Tracey.
Tanya P. Apr 2, 2008, 1:25am EDT
This would be heart-wrenching to face. Definitely 'sob' worthy! Great drabble.
penni d. Apr 2, 2008, 12:11pm EDT
I have seen it from both sides, tracey..... you got it down pat!! :)
Lynn R. Apr 2, 2008, 2:33pm EDT
OMG I did not see that coming at all. Tracey this was excellent.
Sheila Deeth Apr 2, 2008, 3:33pm EDT
Wow. So painful. And so well written.
Susan B. Apr 2, 2008, 4:20pm EDT
Superbly penned Tracey! Absolutely every word is potent with meaning and emotion :)
Tara T. Apr 3, 2008, 4:04am EDT
Every word a direct hit! A sad but excellent drabble Tracey!
Amanda C. Apr 3, 2008, 11:17am EDT
Geez! He is terrible
Lucky Stars Apr 3, 2008, 12:15pm EDT
Oh no.......! Great drabble, Traci but how sad and tragic. Just as she is trying to get her life in order the rug is pulled out from under her. Nothing could break a mother's heart more than losing her children in any way.
lynn a. Apr 3, 2008, 3:05pm EDT
Very real. I am so glad you stated you didn't actually go through this. I know people do. So many people will be helped when the drug companies finally get these medicines more suitable.
Jonathan S. Apr 3, 2008, 6:58pm EDT
A good picture of what can happen when one partner in a relationship either can't or doesn't want to understand what's happening to the other...
Jennine D. Apr 3, 2008, 8:24pm EDT
Sad when she is finally getting help she loses her family, I can see his point of view though as well.
Kate Keeley Apr 3, 2008, 10:08pm EDT
What tragedy. And I can't help wondering what she'd been up to the last 24 hours...
Wanda H. Apr 4, 2008, 2:29am EDT
a well-written drabble, caught me up emotionally from the first word.
Becky Powell Apr 4, 2008, 10:49am EDT
How awful! I love the way he flings the paper down on the table. It highlights how unexpected it was. Nicely done!
sharon SugarMomma is a wise woman, Apr 4, 2008, 11:46am EDT
Very good drabble. Poor woman.
Lisa J Apr 4, 2008, 11:57pm EDT
So much in so few words. Good drabble.
Doyle ( IS SOOO 7 for 7 soon... ) C. Apr 5, 2008, 12:00am EDT
Yep! That would do it. Nicely done!

Regards,
Doyle I <~~~~~
Ruthe M. Apr 5, 2008, 12:47am EDT
Excellent, Tracey!

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