Dark Rising in my Heart.

Job well done

very good!

I can feel the image enlarging within. The concern rolling all over. Dark Rising in My Heart.

Good stuff.

Thank you this is my first one Renee and Margaret that I have written just for Gather. I really enjoy writing I was just too clouded for a while there to write. I think I am clearing up. Renee Nice Hubby!

Thank you spencer! I like your reply I am taking time to reading it over and over to get the meaning. Were you adding to it? I like it!

Very good Leigh, I am sorry you are feeling this, if it is true, someone has hurt you badly, but there will be another good day tomorrow.

Thanks for sharing :)

Thank you Elsie but the end of the poem reflects my healing and then making it better by teaching. Now I have no clue how will I do this but it is what I felt.

Thank you Elsie Duggan!

Thank you Susan B for reading my poem.

I just edited it correctly. I left a whole line out! OMG! Ok it is done now. I was nervous..... To post it.

Good starting effort Leigh.

Good poem... :)

Thank you Ron&Buddy Thank you Cheryl B.

I enjoyed it, Leigh.

Leigh, this is an impressive first poem! Very nice. I'm only a wannabe poet, so I can only offer what the poem did for me, and not any meaningful critique. I like this because it took me through the tough times with you, but delivered hope in the end. Keep up the good work!

I know nothing about poetry , but I liked this one.

great job... ty for sharing

Nice poem you did wonderful

very good

Lovely poem - a really good read! Thank you for sharing.

very good!

Thanks for reading my first poem here on Gather,

Carol Lloyd,
Lawrence U,
Lora(better health for 2008) M.,
Shaunee C.,

I know nothing about poetry , but I liked this one.
Don (send the repugnicons home in Nov. ) S., lol I like this comment a a lot

Sandy Knauer- Thank you I will keep it up. I have written a poem this morning. Not sure when I will post it yet.

And Last but surely not least..
I enjoyed it, Leigh.
Lady Nalita California Wine Fine/Peachy Keen W.,

I went to bed early so i could not reply to all. Everyone else that commented i commented back. I have a full day today. Work, Then dance class for 5 year olds that I stuck my foot in mouth on and said I would volunteer for so I have to!!! lol It is actually fun. I am working on my book which will probably take another year or so. There is no ending because it is called the "Step Mother Diaries" and she is only 5! ok

Well good morning GATHER!








Leigh M.,

Leigh,
Sandy is not a wannabe, she is better than she thinks.

As that is your first poem it is very good, the only thing that struck me as needing change was that long last line. In a poem every detail is important, the subject, the language you use, the rhythm and even the appearance on the page. Think of it like a piece of music, whether its the local rock band or a symphony orchestra, if all the instruments mesh proplerly the whole becomes greater than the sum of the parts.

You could easily put a comma fater "me" and split the line.

Other than that very minor point, it is a good poem, you expressed a lot of deep emotion clearly and in a way that will let people identify it with moments in their own life. Well done.

I really like your poem Leigh! Keep them coming!

Very nice poem! I wish I could be as good as you!~

Ian, thank you for the encouraging word.

Leigh, if I am better than I think, it is because Ian (and others like him, though none as often as he) has spent years giving me the kind of advice that he offered to you on this thread. I hope you appreciate him half as much as I do.

ok what

Ok I just read Ian... Thank you.... Man this is what I wanted to read on this poem. Ok I know I felt uncomfortable with the last line.. I really did.. Ok I will try another one I felt in my soul. I hope Ian you realize I can not change this because it was me but it is 00000 damn I am wrong I asked for this I can change it, if I care, sandy K taught me to do better .... OMG I am struggling with this.....:) Thank you IAN.

Leigh, I like it....pain and mistrust seems to darken everything until the light breaks through the darkness.

"your mean works and unkind spirit was not too smart"

geez. do I know that one..

some people depend on being able to get away with ANY kind of duplicity and usage.

Thanks so much for posting this article to the 'I Love Myself' group!

Thank you Faith for reading!!! I love your group!!! This was my origianl poem to place here on gather now I have 4 more... lol I will be posting them this evening.

Doc,..Dr. of Curmudgeon; esq. Yeah Me too! I even see it on here a lot. I have people who only read the light stuff I place up to critisize but never come around when there petty brains cant comprehend. So that was to them.... They like to slame email people put up but no comment on poetry and things of this such.--Thanks for reading

Renda ~ With my comment, ---Thank you too lady I am gald you liked it!

Great article.. Loved it.

Thanks Merrin and Marsha.

Great Job!
If this is a "first" then I can't wait to see more!
:D

This was your first? Such emotion shown for a first poem. Listen to people like Sandy and Ian - their help is invaluable. Great job!
Marilyn

Lovely poem!