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A Quiet Need--100 Word Stories Week 5--Challenge

March 10, 2008 09:13 PM EDT (Updated: March 16, 2008 11:41 AM EDT)

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I stared at the green tux.

"Isn't it divine?" Natalie smiled.

My bride-to-be had picked a tuxedo that matched my future mother-in-law's bedroom carpet. I imagined starting married life as a leprechaun. The guys would be laughing till death do us part.

Upside: Natalie's beautiful, fun, unpredictable.

Downside: She's colorblind.

I gauged the situation. Switch the tux? Tell the truth? Suggest we elope? All precarious.

"I thought you wanted white," I said after a long pause.

"Grey is so elegant." Natalie said.

"You choose," I said and kissed her painted-purple lips. "I love you."

Color me love blind, but...I do.

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Comments: 93

Bonnie L. Mar 10, 2008, 8:51pm EDT

What a sweet and well-written story Kate!

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flit . Mar 10, 2008, 9:25pm EDT

this is so cute!

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Vicky Duggins Mar 10, 2008, 9:40pm EDT

That's very cute and made me think of that TV show where she had hippy parents and he was very straight.

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René Allen Mar 10, 2008, 9:49pm EDT

Kate ~ It is what comes out of your pen when you write that pulls my interest toward awaiting what will come next from you! I love it! A true Literary Creative. Beautifully written Kate.

Blessings ~
Rene

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Lou Anne L. Mar 10, 2008, 9:57pm EDT

exellent...and a great story to help us look at the world through different eyes when we might judge....

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Alison H. Mar 10, 2008, 10:34pm EDT

Great story! I loved this.

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Sherwood M. Mar 10, 2008, 10:52pm EDT

Kate:

What a charming example of true love...now, do you happen to know where I could buy that green tux?

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penni d. Mar 10, 2008, 10:54pm EDT

true love and a sense of humor in 100 words...very good, kate...:)

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Kate Keeley Mar 10, 2008, 11:07pm EDT

Green, red, blue, and pink tuxedos available at The Costume Shop. I hope they don't mind I played with their image...

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Holli G. Mar 10, 2008, 11:21pm EDT

very cute Kate! as always you are the best

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dianne j. Mar 10, 2008, 11:27pm EDT

Great job Kate — as usual. You really pack an entire story into very few words. But you also make it so entertaining. This story had me grinning era-to-ear by the end!

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dianne j. Mar 10, 2008, 11:28pm EDT

BTW, I love the line "The guys would be laughing till death do us part."

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Jim Ross Mar 10, 2008, 11:32pm EDT

Marvelous tale of bliss, Kate; continuing evidence that bizarre is beautiful and love cares more about sweet smiles and happiness than anything else. I look forward to the wedding sequel: will Natalie find out from a guest the truth of the tux? What fate awaits the hero when Natalie discovers all? Truly fine, compressed fiction; and it is a great read!

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*Holly *. Mar 10, 2008, 11:36pm EDT

Very cute!

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Susan B. Mar 10, 2008, 11:37pm EDT

I'm green with envy! :)

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lynn a. Mar 11, 2008, 12:18am EDT

Wow, he must be really, really love blind. It is a fun story, and oh, so cute. Good one, Kate. I don't know how you could possibly not win with this one.

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Baiden F. Mar 11, 2008, 1:34am EDT

this is smart . I like this story.

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Susan Budig Mar 11, 2008, 2:05am EDT

Nice chuckle to end my evening and maybe encourage green dreams. ?

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Marge H. Mar 11, 2008, 9:42am EDT

Now that's true love! LOL At least tell me that it was a St. Patty's Day wedding so everyone would think it was planned that way.

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KC Klein Mar 11, 2008, 10:08am EDT

Thanks for posting this to Short Story and More!

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Lyn Owen Mar 11, 2008, 11:36am EDT

Great story. I love the green tux

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William Dotani Mar 11, 2008, 12:00pm EDT

A bit of a tragic comedy with a gentle touch. The last line was simply sweet and a perfect touch.

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Parul S. Mar 11, 2008, 12:08pm EDT

wonderful story and better when told like this...it is awesome....and how so lovely a couple they make...I just love the last line...

color me love blind ...but i do....wow wow wow

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Tracey W. Mar 11, 2008, 12:40pm EDT

Wonderful! It took me a minute to realize she really was colorblind. Too funny. What an excellent job you've done of telling a rich and , forgive me, colorful, story with such restrictions. Even so, there is nothing chopped or stilted about this piece. Bravo!

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Marianne M. Mar 11, 2008, 1:48pm EDT

Fun and light-hearted drabble, Kate, proving love IS [color] blind!

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 11, 2008, 3:04pm EDT

Hilarious and what a sensational approach. I love your story plot,.

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Sheila Deeth Mar 11, 2008, 3:36pm EDT

Wow! This was so great! Real people. Real story. Real fun. And just 100 words. Stunning!

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Kay M. Mar 11, 2008, 3:44pm EDT

Very cute and funny drabble

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Granny Janny H. Mar 11, 2008, 10:29pm EDT

Pure genius, Kate.

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Mary Beth Magee Mar 11, 2008, 10:32pm EDT

Fun story, Kate, with a sweet story line. I thoroughly enjoyed this little "emerald" of a story - and just in time for St. Patrick's Day, too!

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Human, Katherine, seeker of intergalactic life, inhabitant of Earth Mar 11, 2008, 11:06pm EDT

What a divine story...gave me a good laugh and lightened my mood.

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Ann R. Mar 11, 2008, 11:22pm EDT

What a colorful future is in store for them. (or him anyway) Sweet story.

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sheila h. Mar 12, 2008, 2:32am EDT

very funny..and so true!
i have a friend who's husband was color blind but it was never diagnosed until he painted a room chartreuse believing it was powder blue...
well done,Kate

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Alison Pearce Mar 12, 2008, 3:06am EDT

Great drabble!

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Tara T. Mar 12, 2008, 4:02am EDT

Wonderfully funny and charming! i love it! thanks, i needed a chuckle!

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Apryl Just Apryl Mar 12, 2008, 12:50pm EDT

Oh Kate- I loved this!!

Fun, Romantic, true love and colored blind, LOVE IT!!!!

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Jimmie (Hey! Let's Gather!) Harris Mar 12, 2008, 2:11pm EDT

I started smiling at the first words and was laughing out loud by the end. I loved it!

BTW ~ My Dad was colorblind... my mother was very gracious and kind, and he often wore greens, golds and browns that didn't match, but which all seemed to him to be the same shade of kakhi! Hahahaha!

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Toni V. Mar 12, 2008, 5:28pm EDT

Wow! This is a great story!

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Marie L. Mar 12, 2008, 7:42pm EDT

What a wonderful story -- I love it! And so nicely written in those 100 words.

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Terry M. Mar 12, 2008, 8:41pm EDT

A very touching short-short.

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Ruthe M. Mar 12, 2008, 11:49pm EDT

Talk about love being blind! This was quite endearing. I can only imagine what their life will entail.

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Mary (diet dr pepper junkie) T. Mar 13, 2008, 8:16am EDT

Kate, this was so cute!! I am still chuckling about it. In my relationship it's my husband who is colorblind, though he isn't this bad. Great drabble!

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June B. Mar 13, 2008, 8:38am EDT

Kate this is adorable. Thank you for giving me a little chuckle. I have a friend like that too.

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Doyle ( IS SOOO 7 for 7 soon... ) C. Mar 13, 2008, 10:24am EDT

VERY cute. :)

Regards,
Doyle I <~~~~~

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Lucky Stars Mar 13, 2008, 11:29am EDT

Awww......... how sweet!

Love is blind - color blind. ;-)

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Elsie Duggan Mar 13, 2008, 1:13pm EDT

This is a very cute and humorous story, and who cares what the colors are as you say, love is blind anyway, great drabble

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Tanya P. Mar 13, 2008, 6:43pm EDT

"Color me love blind...", now that phrase IS divine! I love the strange twists your mind takes, I can relate so well. I love this story.

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Lynn Doiron Mar 13, 2008, 8:06pm EDT

humor, love, wit, clever, quick, succinct, real, genuine, the right stuff -- both in the man and the writer who made him.

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Jo C. Mar 14, 2008, 3:01am EDT

Excellent, simply excellent. Wit, creativity, the whole package. I actually wanted to know even more about the couple.

P.S. Thanks for adding your take on that typo article (:

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Danielle P. Mar 14, 2008, 4:33pm EDT

That was awesome.

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Barbra L. Mar 14, 2008, 6:13pm EDT

Great story! These lines alone set the stage for a win:

" I imagined starting married life as a leprechaun. The guys would be laughing till death do us part."

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Mary Z. Mar 14, 2008, 7:35pm EDT

Not only guys laughing but you blend in with your mother-in-law's carpet! Witty and charming tale, Kate. Brava!!

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Autumn Farrington Mar 14, 2008, 7:37pm EDT

Very well-done, Kate!

Entertaining dialogue interwoven with humorous content. Can't beat that combination! :)

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Beth H. Mar 14, 2008, 8:45pm EDT

Kate, this is marvelous and I'm still smiling. I love your approach to the challenge. Humorous and sweet at the same time.

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Lisa J Mar 15, 2008, 12:35am EDT

Kate - the tender ending... made this absolutely perfect. I loved this.

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Marianne M. Mar 16, 2008, 9:13am EDT

Congratulations for winning first place ... BRAVO!

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David V. Mar 16, 2008, 10:17am EDT

Great drabble kate! I love it and I wish I had had a green tux for my wedding although
maybe not quite so green. Lol

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David V. Mar 16, 2008, 10:19am EDT

I forgot the congratulations I was so caught up in my reaction.

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Amanda C. Mar 16, 2008, 10:25am EDT

Ha, ha! You did a terrific job Kate! Congrats on first place

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Becky Powell Mar 16, 2008, 10:47am EDT

Congratulations on first place! You did a great job of filling out these characters with minimal words. I like the way you used the abbreviated language as part of the green tux guy's personality.

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Mary Z. Mar 16, 2008, 10:54am EDT

Still laugh when I read this! Congratulations on your well-deserved win, Kate!

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Kate Keeley Mar 16, 2008, 11:32am EDT

You are all so kind. Thank you for your wonderful comments. I look forward to seeing what everyone comes up with for Reena's week six challenge on super powers. She keeps raising the bar!

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