by Mary Z.
Member since:
April 26, 2007

Relationship for Poetry Please #24 prompt disc

March 05, 2008 11:48 AM UTC (Updated: March 05, 2008 03:41 PM UTC)
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                                                 Relationship

 

                                                    Hovers:

                                               Returns to me:

                                      The frisbie scares the dog.

                                    It won't catch the flying object

                               Because it will never come near enough.

                                   Some say this mimics the way you

                                         Watch over me like an

                                                Alien craft

                                                   Hovers.

                                          

Comments: 13

Anita R. Mar 5, 2008, 1:06pm UTC
Wow, Mary this is great! Every word was obviously chosen and placed with care, I really liked this!
Jim Ross Mar 5, 2008, 5:24pm UTC
Wonderful Rictameter, Mary, of a controlling relationship. Good read.
Sheila Deeth Mar 6, 2008, 4:16pm UTC
Oh, very neat! Loved it!
Tracey W. Mar 6, 2008, 11:21pm UTC
Very intense. Well done rictameter; I like the way you also turned it into a shape poem. Good job.
Kathy W. Mar 7, 2008, 9:47pm UTC
Good form. Good shape. Excellent words that mean something more that what they are themselves. I love good synergy in a poem or a regular write.
The care with which each word was chosen always escapes me, but you do this so well. This is great. Write on.
Blessed be,
Wilka
Angie O. Mar 8, 2008, 8:38pm UTC
Very good Mary.
lynn a. Mar 9, 2008, 5:55pm UTC
How unique. It caught me unsuspecting as to how it would play itself out. Very good. I can really feel that sense of hovering.
Lyn Owen Mar 10, 2008, 6:34pm UTC
Oh this is really nice.
Jill~Sexy Back~ V. Apr 8, 2008, 2:43am UTC
very nice poem....thanks for sharing
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debra g. Apr 8, 2008, 12:55pm UTC
very nice!
Patti M. Apr 10, 2008, 2:28pm UTC
Mary this was masterful. I loved the shape and form of the poem. You even had a deeper meaning hidden if we cared to look.

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