by David S.

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January 14, 2008

Vision

March 04, 2008 10:37 AM EST

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Vision

I see you crying
in a dark and empty hallway.
Salt tears spill from your sad eyes
and vanish on your cheek.

This puzzles me.
You're always so happy.
Maybe you also don't know what causes these tears.

I understand that sometimes they just come.

Tags: cry, sadness, tears, sad, crying, happiness, love

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Comments: 18

vijay kumar Mar 4, 2008, 10:46am EST

'sometimes they just come.'... Moods you cannot predict. Times that cannot be defined...
Beautiful, David.

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Charity M. Mar 4, 2008, 11:22am EST

((( Crying...never fun )))

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Mar 4, 2008, 11:40am EST

This is beautifully expressed and My fav line This puzzles me
which left me thinking more about your expressions...seems you love to write realities

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Sarah Honenberger Mar 4, 2008, 11:55am EST

I don't think it's finished. Reader is left with too many questions. Proviso: I am not a poet, just a poetry lover.

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Marilyn M. Mar 4, 2008, 12:09pm EST

Says so much, David. Sometimes they do just come.

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Ruthe M. Mar 4, 2008, 12:43pm EST

What beauiful insight. And yes, sometimes they just do! I had my moment last evening. Afterwards, I felt refreshed.

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Leslie "Missy" T. Mar 4, 2008, 12:52pm EST

Wow!! I can relate to this so much!!

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Holli G. Mar 4, 2008, 2:21pm EST

beautiful! Good job david

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Lydia (part of the solution) Shelley Mar 4, 2008, 3:18pm EST

This could easily be titled "To my Menopausal Wife" LOL

Good job.
: )

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Patricia F. Mar 4, 2008, 4:46pm EST

David...I agree with Lydia!

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David S. Mar 4, 2008, 5:01pm EST

Menopausal wife? I'm sure this will apply in a few years, then!

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Sheila Deeth Mar 4, 2008, 6:46pm EST

Neat. Very familiar

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Terry D Mar 4, 2008, 6:47pm EST

Beautiful David...
:)

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Digital Diva S. Mar 5, 2008, 10:58am EST

Isn't there always a reason? - Thanks for posting this to Best Original Photos, Art and Writing for 2008.

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Linda K. Mar 5, 2008, 11:22am EST

As a father and teacher, your willingness to contemplate this is ... tender and beautiful.

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Rose T. Mar 8, 2008, 8:53pm EST

Yep can come in buckets! :~)

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John Michael Elritz G. May 1, 2009, 3:30am EDT

I cry only with reason...
nice poem

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Terry Collett May 20, 2009, 3:48am EDT

Simply said yet deeply meant.

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