Better

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Lisa J Feb 29, 2008, 9:28pm EST

Wow... I have felt that way.

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Randall C. Feb 29, 2008, 9:31pm EST

Nice,-- Gretchen

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Ruthe M. Feb 29, 2008, 9:55pm EST

Very true words. Lovely, Gretchen.

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Lainie - Just Lainie Feb 29, 2008, 9:56pm EST

As long as you believe in yourself, this will become true.

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Alison H. Feb 29, 2008, 10:00pm EST

Good one! I agree with Lainie. Just keep believing and pretending until it's true.

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Jim Ross Feb 29, 2008, 10:58pm EST

Beautiful, Gretchen! Better is being featured in the Cinquain Group. Thank you for a marvelous trilogy of cinquains.

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Gretchen Lee Bourquin Feb 29, 2008, 11:01pm EST

Thanks everyone!

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Kristina B. Mar 1, 2008, 11:23am EST

I get up every morning telling myself I will have a great day, I will do more, be more and expect less from the needy people around me, some little and some not so little. 5 days out of 7 I prove myself a liar by lunchtime. You like Maya Angelou? Here is a verse from her poem "Still I Rise." I thought it was apropros.....

"Just like moons and like suns,
With the certainty of tides,
Just like hopes springing high,
Still I'll rise."

Have a super weekend

Kristina

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Gretchen Lee Bourquin Mar 1, 2008, 11:31am EST

I like her words, as long as they stay on paper. can't listen to her read

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Connie H. Mar 1, 2008, 1:36pm EST

Borrowing strength from someone at some point, is something I believe most everyone has to do at some time throughout their life. I loved this poem, good job!

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Marie J. R. Mar 1, 2008, 3:35pm EST

your strength is guiding you,,, even when you feel it isn't,,, you do know, " who you are,"
the only ones that give up don't know who they are,,, Bless you my dear,,,

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June B. Mar 1, 2008, 5:41pm EST

Wow, Gretchen, this is beautiful. I hide sometimes too.

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Nathan Schauer Mar 1, 2008, 7:47pm EST

The idea of the the strength of the word, its honesty keeping us upright - is well, just plain brilliant. The poem works well, both as a bit of reality but like Wallace Steven's work it reminds us of the importance of simple things. Right speech - a simple thing - until contemplated and attempted.
But, as much as I admire the poem, I would disagree with the idea that narrator is flawed - the narrator like the rest of us clings to ideas about self - ones that conflict with the truth.

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Deb J. Mar 1, 2008, 9:09pm EST

Good job Gretchen!

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Kimberly Ripley Mar 1, 2008, 10:17pm EST

I really like this, Gretchen. Strength will come!

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Terry M. Mar 2, 2008, 12:47am EST

I love non_structued non-rhyming poetry.

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AiLing K. Mar 2, 2008, 1:23am EST

Simply beautiful! I have felt that way too...

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Ann R. Mar 4, 2008, 12:18pm EST

Wonderful words fit into the perfect shape for rising and falling. Very nice.

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zale orcid Mar 4, 2008, 12:20pm EST

beautiful gretchen

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John F Walter Mar 18, 2008, 5:44am EDT

I agree with Nathan Schauer on this one, about how the simplicity of the poem in its declarative stance zeroes in on the importance of essentials.

I disagree with him insofar as I think poems are meant to serve as true barometers of poets´true states of being, which we readers identify with--there is no ¨Brechtian alienation effect¨in a poem.

Right now I don´t feel strong enough to stand up to my wife, I don´t feel well enough to drink my cup of coffee....I´ll I feel okay about is reading this poem, and saying, she feels like I do.

And Gretchen, you express it so well.

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