by Kate Keeley
Member since:
March 4, 2007

Walking Meditation (rictameter)

February 11, 2008 07:06 PM EST (Updated: February 14, 2008 12:54 PM EST)
views: 144 | rating: 10/10 (35 votes) | comments: 42

Walking

One foot forward

Eye to toe, toe to ground

Wind caresses sun touches cheek

Step stepping into the moment; breathe, breathe

Deer lifts its head, looks, rabbit runs

Crow flies into blue sky

Rocks skitter by

Walking

Into the door

Purple blossoms above

Blue eyes watching hands curled in lap

Sitting, silent, counting fingers broken

Breath stolen in between glances

Tomorrow she will go

Alone, outside

Walking
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Comments: 42

Vivian P. Feb 11, 2008, 7:07pm EST
beautiful
penni d. Feb 11, 2008, 7:16pm EST
hey, i have never seen a double rictameter, kate...Kudos!!!
P.W. Dowdy Feb 11, 2008, 7:22pm EST
Ah, Kate.

The "little girl" in you takes a moment to herself. Mine probably passed yours alone the way...

Such beauty everywhere. The "little girl" inside of each of us always sees and always embraces.
J R B. Feb 11, 2008, 7:37pm EST
How wonderful.
Nancy 67 Feb 11, 2008, 7:42pm EST
You are really very good at this, Kate. You painted a very visual picture for us.
Sandy F. Feb 11, 2008, 8:01pm EST
Incredibly beautiful. Thank you for helping me to remember the joy in a solitude walk alone with the beauty around. The joy in nature around us.
Kimberly Ripley Feb 11, 2008, 8:03pm EST
This is such a beautiful poem. Very well written!
Dimitri w. Feb 11, 2008, 8:33pm EST
amazing Kate The best I have read.
Gwen P. Feb 11, 2008, 8:44pm EST
Vivid! And such a good form/meter for the subject, too..
Darrell Y. Feb 11, 2008, 9:37pm EST
very nice!
Debbie L. Feb 11, 2008, 9:38pm EST
I often refer to walking as moving meditation and tell my clients if they want to find answers, walk. If they want more power in their intentions, walk, if they want to change the chemicals in the brain, walk!

"Step stepping into the moment; breathe, breathe"

.....so beautiful
Captain Ken Pothier Feb 11, 2008, 9:55pm EST
When you watch your toes you will run into doors!
*Holly *. Feb 11, 2008, 10:08pm EST
I really enjoyed this Kate!
Thanks for posting it
Doug M. Feb 11, 2008, 10:15pm EST
Kate,

Really beautiful and graceful and natural as breathing. Nicely measured and proportioned... like a round-trip.
Applause applause Kate...just beautiful.. loved the imagery...

Lovely picture to go with your poetry as well.
flit . Feb 11, 2008, 11:14pm EST
excellent :)
Charli Mills Feb 11, 2008, 11:27pm EST
The walk is so true to life , the rhythm of steps, breathing and nature, but then there is a transition to indoors, to inside the mind, the imagination. Very beautiful to read and contemplate.
lynn a. Feb 11, 2008, 11:28pm EST
Grippingly beautiful. You are a wonderful poetess.
Jim Ross Feb 11, 2008, 11:46pm EST
I love this double-diamond rictameter, Kate. It redoubles the bellows effect, and in your case, with the stream-of-consciousness presentation, it is particularly effective. Viscerally, the sights, sounds, and emotions encountered walking leave this reader totally immersed in the events. Great read. Walking Meditation is being featured in the Rictameter group. Congratulations!
Lora L. Feb 11, 2008, 11:51pm EST
Really wonderful Kate!
Kate Keeley Feb 11, 2008, 11:53pm EST
I just want you all to know that I read all your comments and appreciate your support and kind words. You make my heart sing.

Writer is the hardest job--as you know. It's the job I always never wanted to have. Or maybe never always wanted to have. How does that go? Whether here nor there, it's a tough calling. You know I know.

Thanks so much,

Kate
Cindy S. Feb 12, 2008, 12:05am EST
Beautiful, Kate........

"Wind caresses sun touches cheek
Step stepping into the moment"

How visually and sensually Powerful!
William Dotani Feb 12, 2008, 1:29am EST
The nature aspects are quite beautiful as you paint a vivid image of sights and even some sounds. The second part seems rather sad and hints at abuse and of the woman wanting to escape back into the nature she so loves.
Kate Keeley Feb 12, 2008, 1:57am EST
You are most astute, William. Nature can be brutal as well as beautiful.
Amanda C. Feb 12, 2008, 4:51pm EST
Ahhh, this makes me want to go outside right now... Thanks! Great poem
Mary Ann S. Feb 12, 2008, 6:12pm EST
Another great poem. Thanks.
Cheryl W. Feb 12, 2008, 10:52pm EST
Wonderful, Kate!
Anita R. Feb 13, 2008, 3:40pm EST
Incredible! Very nicely done, and so visual.
Mark Y. Feb 14, 2008, 12:34am EST
Escape is real. The need, telling.
Melinda ~choosing happiness~ S. Feb 14, 2008, 11:42am EST
Lovely words!
Quinn (aka Entwife) Blackburn Feb 15, 2008, 9:16am EST
Excellent!
Sergey S. Feb 15, 2008, 9:26pm EST
Beautiful poem!
necee t. Feb 16, 2008, 1:41pm EST
hi Kate... this was really great...
love the rictameter... cool...
David S. Feb 17, 2008, 5:12pm EST
So fun. So you write poetry too? Life is an adventure!
Linda K. Feb 18, 2008, 10:55am EST
I spent a long time admiring this poem. The more you read it, the more it reveals.
Jason Wilkins Feb 21, 2008, 7:45pm EST
I'm speechless...scratch that...I have to say, this was so overwhelmingly perfect. You touch my Buddhist sensitivities and my love for continuity of motion in mindfullness. The double diamond structure is perfectly fitting as I imagine it the rhythmic breathing of the poem itself. Execllent work. :-)

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