by Lawrence U.

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January 10, 2007

Eye of the Beholder

February 09, 2008 07:46 PM EST (Updated: February 21, 2008 06:36 PM EST)

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the secret
river of love flows
ever so gently
under the watchful
eye of the beholder

cherry blossom...
weaving the wreath
of desire
with the first taste
of the nectar

the rise
of the fecund moon
foretold...
the image of the spring
flower drunk with love

your red lips
speak softly of "us" as
i explore
the mystic fruit of your
essence with lustful eyes

a brush with
the intense passion of your
ways sublime...
spirited away by the sacred
poetry of desire

you turn up
the heat with your
magic touch
just like the frisky suns
of the summer past

finally, you lift
the veil and whisper love
(ever so tenderly)...
clearing the path to inner peace
with a spoonful of dreams

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Comments: 61

Debby O. Feb 9, 2008, 7:51pm EST

Wow! Excellent Lawrence!

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♥kyra D. Feb 9, 2008, 7:52pm EST

Beautiful and very passionate. Love this one Lawrence.

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Cheryl W. Feb 9, 2008, 7:56pm EST

Wow, this is beautiful. I LOVE the phrase "flower drunk with love".

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Sue M. Feb 9, 2008, 7:57pm EST

Beautiful poem, Lawrence!

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vickey w Feb 9, 2008, 8:08pm EST

Beautiful, this is very good.

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flit . Feb 9, 2008, 8:10pm EST

well done

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sheila ~the hapless housewife~ j. Feb 9, 2008, 8:12pm EST

This is so beautiful!

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Sandra T. Feb 9, 2008, 8:22pm EST

Beautiful!

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Sandy F. Feb 9, 2008, 8:43pm EST

this is a beautiful poem (boy is that an original comment, huh?) I see a small flaw. I hope you don't mind the respectful critique. The verbs in the entire poem are in present tense until "lifted" in the final stanza. Perhaps it's only a typo, but it is jarring.
Such a small flaw amongst such perfection of feeling.

Thank you for sharing

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Curt L. Feb 9, 2008, 9:58pm EST

Dang!~ That's hot, Lawrence! Love it! Thank you! Need to go cool off now... A 10 for you!

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Alison Pearce Feb 9, 2008, 10:13pm EST

Stunningly beautiful Lawrence

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Binaya G. Feb 9, 2008, 11:03pm EST

love surges... alright!

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Nancy S. Feb 9, 2008, 11:41pm EST

This was exceptional Lawrence.

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*Holly *. Feb 10, 2008, 12:59am EST

Loved it!
Great job!

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Quinn (aka Entwife) Blackburn Feb 10, 2008, 3:11am EST

..
U

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Emma L. Feb 10, 2008, 4:38am EST

Wonderful!

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Jean, just the teensiest bit odd, F. Feb 10, 2008, 8:20am EST

Such stunning imagery, Lawrence! Bravo!

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Elaine B. Feb 10, 2008, 4:59pm EST

Wonderful poem!

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Angie O. Feb 11, 2008, 12:11am EST

Great. beautiful poem

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William Dotani Feb 12, 2008, 1:57am EST

This poem starts off as being only sensual in nature, but in the last two stanza you let the reader know this is not just a sexual tryst, but that of a deep romantic feeling for your partner. 'A spoonful of dreams.' What a beautiful thoughtful image. Absolutely stunning in giving this poem such depth of true romance.

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 12, 2008, 2:44am EST

a brush with
the intense passion of your
ways sublime...
spirited away by the sacred
poetry of desire what gorgeous lines...

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elizabeth e. Feb 12, 2008, 5:44am EST

A brushwork of sublime love you have painted here today.

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Barbara B. Feb 12, 2008, 3:39pm EST

Now I know what I have missed out on during
my lifetime Lawrence. Oh my!!

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Ellie !. Feb 12, 2008, 11:41pm EST

you must have someone in mind with such intensity

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 13, 2008, 7:36pm EST

Disclose your inspiration Lawrence...:)

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Curt L. Feb 14, 2008, 2:45pm EST

Gotta say it again...AWESOME!

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Audrey F. Feb 14, 2008, 11:37pm EST

I am awed by the beauty of this poem, Lawrence. It is written with such exquisite images and palpable sensuality. An outstanding piece, my friend.

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Bonnie S. Feb 15, 2008, 8:36pm EST

Beautiful poem, Lawrence.

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Bethany C. Feb 17, 2008, 3:46am EST

It is rare to find a poem which describes true love so eloquently.
Poetry, even my own, so often reaches for that perfection, but falls short.
This one didn't.

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Ellie !. Feb 17, 2008, 6:44pm EST

poetry is something difficult to write, I think...you do it well

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Karolyn Q. Feb 17, 2008, 10:01pm EST

This was a wonderful poem.

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Ellie !. Feb 19, 2008, 11:46pm EST

the sunshine was wonderful! You are coming into fall...and us into spring!

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Ellie !. Feb 19, 2008, 11:47pm EST

rain is back, tho...and i guess that's good because, that's what makes the crocus grow!

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Jerri H. Feb 20, 2008, 10:00am EST

Mmmmm beautiful Lawrence

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 21, 2008, 6:30pm EST

Hi Lawrence,
how are you...Spring is near and we are just waiting for your another poem..

Thanks for your yummy comments ...you are the king...:)

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Nyota *Star* Feb 21, 2008, 9:27pm EST

beautiful and sensuous

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Ellie !. Feb 21, 2008, 9:39pm EST

you poets are finally rubbing off on me!

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necee t. Feb 23, 2008, 1:16am EST

ooh hot hot .... beautiful...
lots of emotion... love it...

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 23, 2008, 3:58am EST

Thanks Lawrence...
HAPPY WEEKEND...

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Jerri H. Feb 27, 2008, 7:23pm EST

Your poetry make me feel like I can see the art appear on the canvas~

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Jerri H. Feb 27, 2008, 7:30pm EST

You can nearly feel the emotion that goes into a painting

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Lisa J Feb 27, 2008, 10:51pm EST

This is sensual, beautiful. It reminded me of the love of the Song of Songs...

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M & M. Feb 28, 2008, 7:36pm EST

Wow, that is just beautiful Lawrence. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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Ellie !. Feb 28, 2008, 10:30pm EST

okay...you need to write some because yours are way better than mine!

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Ellie !. Feb 28, 2008, 10:30pm EST

poems are hard because they are feelings....

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Ellie !. Feb 28, 2008, 10:30pm EST

Hope you are having a good week...I was disappointed this morning when I realized it was not Friday...dang!

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Feb 28, 2008, 10:31pm EST

HAAPY WEEKEND FROM ME TO YOU

:)

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t b. Feb 28, 2008, 11:15pm EST

This is SO very nice :)

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Tina Coruth Feb 29, 2008, 12:37pm EST

This is beautifully written!!

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Curt L. Feb 29, 2008, 11:24pm EST

Such a wonderful work!

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Curt L. Mar 21, 2008, 1:38pm EDT

Wishing you a wonderful Easter weekend, Lawrence!

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Sammie B. Mar 29, 2008, 12:36pm EDT

Gorgeous, and so passionately filled with emotion. Great work!

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Ann M. (Site Scryer) Apr 29, 2008, 7:38pm EDT

This seems to be a love poem to The Creator, who looks down upon the rivers, the cherry blossoms, and the moon. But this is a very passionate creator, sort of like the Greek and Roman Gods.

This poem reminds me of St. John of the Cross's poem Dark Night of the Soul. Your poem is sort of the bright companion to his dark poem, but both of you have a secret rendezvous with your creator/lover.

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