It's time to focus on self
Deep inside there's beauty such wealth
You're still in there, I know you are
A little bit buried, but not gone too far Get on the good life path
The other roads chosen never do seem to last
(CHORUS)
You're buried inside of you
Come on out show us the view
Smothered in drama and pain
Bottoms are ceilings over again
How many can you fall thru
What needs to be done has come due
Stop Being Deep inside of you
Give yourself that chance
You're swinging in the most desperate of dance
You are so tender, loving inside
Make a stand capture your pride Do what is needed to do
So much depends on you
(CHORUS)
How much more can you take
You deserve so much, make the break
The loves you lost will return
First you have to earn
Start with the best YOU can be
It's amazing what happens when you shake yourself free
(CHORUS)
There's no place left to stay
Your actions turned many away
It may take work change is not easy
The reward is your life, loving and pleasing
Believe, be humble, have faith
Protect yourself learn what's safe
Bring your self outside of you
Do what you know you need to do
Don't be so deep inside of you
copyright 2008 kurreytunes
WE LOVE YOU LISSA!
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Comments: 4
This piece has such great potential. You've written this piece very well, but honestly, it needs a little work with grammar and such. It starts in the title:
"Your Deep Inside of You"
Didn't you mean to use the word "You're" and not "Your" here? There are several other areas that need help in its structure. I'm sure if you go back over it, you'll see what I'm talking about.
Other than structure and grammar issues; it's a wonderful piece.
I'm originally from Kentucky; was born in Ft Campbell in the southern part of the state and raised ('til I was 5) in Erlanger/Florence in the nothern-most part, across the river from Cincy. Howdy homeboy!
and find writing space in the mountains......I'm origionally from Philly and then NYC so I guess you could say I'm a homie and not a true home boy LOL...Thanks for the grammer advice yes...obvious errors.....Take Care Paul