by Marianne M.
Member since:
February 15, 2006

Morning (rictameter)

January 12, 2008 10:58 AM EST
views: 62 | comments: 36

Morning

 

Morning . . .

Mauve and purple 

and bands of pale yellow

weave through bare December branches.

The sun hangs low, an old gold pocket watch.

Rises higher as I tiptoe

to make creamy oatmeal

and strong coffee.

Morning . . .

 

 

Copyright 2008 Marianne McNamara

 

 

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Comments: 36

Jim Ross Jan 12, 2008, 12:18pm EST
Beautiful, soulful reflection, of morning, Marianne. They don't get better than this one depicted by your scented, tasty rictameter. Morning is now featured in the Rictameter Group.
Marianne M. Jan 12, 2008, 12:21pm EST
I am honored, Jim. Thank you!
Joan O. Jan 12, 2008, 1:03pm EST
Good one Marianne. Reminds me of my work mornings when I usually have creamy oatmeal and coffee.
Marianne M. Jan 12, 2008, 1:14pm EST
Thanks, Joan! And maybe just a sprinkle of brown sugar ...
Trudy P. Jan 12, 2008, 1:21pm EST
Good morning Marianne! I can picture that in my mind!!!!!
Marianne M. Jan 12, 2008, 1:26pm EST
Hi Trudy and thanks for your nice words!
Kimber L. Jan 12, 2008, 6:20pm EST
This is a very good one!
Marianne M. Jan 12, 2008, 6:40pm EST
Thank you for your thoughtful comment, Cindy!
Marianne M. Jan 12, 2008, 6:41pm EST
Thanks, Kimber!
Umar, Abu Nurain Jan 12, 2008, 8:13pm EST
Marianne: I love the image of the sun as a gold pocket watch... that is brilliant. Such a restful beautiful morning. Thank you!
Marianne M. Jan 12, 2008, 8:15pm EST
Thanks, Marianne! You are always so generous with your praise and kind words. You really inspire me to keep going.
Marianne M. Jan 12, 2008, 8:17pm EST
Umar!
I am truly honored by your compliment! Thank you.
NIce. Well written to the form, and is very visual. Just for those of you who are wondering what a rictameter is:
# line 1 - 2 syllables - same as line 9
# line 2 - 4 syllables
# line 3 - 6 syllables
# line 4 - 8 syllables
# line 5 - 10 syllables
# line 6 - 8 syllables
# line 7 - 6 syllables
# line 8 - 4 syllables
# line 9 - 2 syllables - same as line 1
Marianne M. Jan 13, 2008, 11:39am EST
Thanks for the good reminder about form, Katherine! It's a new poetic form for a lot of people on Gather, including ME!
William Dotani Jan 13, 2008, 11:56am EST
Nice imagery.
Marianne M. Jan 13, 2008, 12:08pm EST
Thanks, William!
Marianne M. Jan 13, 2008, 12:14pm EST
And I appreciate your sweet comment, Rose! I enjoy the challenge of writing rictameters. Many thanks to Jim Ross for getting it all started!
dianne j. Jan 13, 2008, 12:38pm EST
Marianne, you paint a wonderfully vivid picture with your words.
Marianne M. Jan 13, 2008, 7:25pm EST
Thanks for commenting, Dianne!
Rita j. Jan 14, 2008, 9:32am EST
Very nice, you set a great mood
Marianne M. Jan 14, 2008, 9:56am EST
Rita, my friend!
Thanks for your kind words!
Michelle P. Jan 15, 2008, 1:39pm EST
very nice! I like it!
Marianne M. Jan 15, 2008, 4:13pm EST
Nice of you to comment, Michelle!
Mariana T. Jan 16, 2008, 11:00pm EST
Yes, I've seen those very colors before! Nice imagery - thanks Marianne M. Salud
Marianne M. Jan 16, 2008, 11:06pm EST
Mariana! How sweet of you to comment!!
Cristina S. Jan 17, 2008, 1:39am EST
This is beautiful Marianne - pale - gold - creamy - strong - love your adjectives!
Marianne M. Jan 18, 2008, 7:35pm EST
Cristina,
I really appreciate your generous comment.
William Dotani Jan 19, 2008, 8:30am EST
To make morning really beautiful, you need to watch Mr. Ed.

Mr. Ed
Marianne M. Jan 19, 2008, 10:15am EST
Ah yes, Mr. Ed! A brilliant actor. Loved his voice. Had so much resonance ... Don't make 'em like that anymore!
DragonSoul !. Jan 21, 2008, 1:48am EST
I believe we saw the same sunrise (as we are both apparently in Minnesota) and you capture it very well. Many a brisk Minnesota morn start out like this. Great imagery.
Marianne M. Jan 21, 2008, 11:12am EST
Thanks, DS! It's definitely brisk out there today (4 degrees).
Robert - just a simple man - B. Jan 21, 2008, 7:27pm EST
Marianne, you did an excellent rictameter. Did you let me know and I missed it? Or did you just forget to let me know?

Doesn't matter. It's wonderful.
Jason Wilkins Feb 5, 2008, 3:45pm EST
That was beautiful. :)
Granny Janny H. Apr 13, 2008, 2:09pm EDT
pure sensual treat!
Virginia M. Mar 25, 2009, 9:48am EDT
This is a beautiful poem! Absolutely wonderful!! Though I'm reading at a late date, good poetry is always right on time. Thank you for getting my morning off to a nice start:)

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