by Marianne M.
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February 15, 2006

The Woods (rictameter)

January 04, 2008 04:20 PM EST
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The following is my first attempt at writing a rictameter. I had never heard of this poetry form until recently. I found it fun and challenging.  


The Woods

 

The woods

sleep in winter.

No sad remembering.

Now I have reached my own ending,

my life shadowed by ancient memories,

the sharply pointed edges smooth.

This last instant remains,

a brief gray dream--

the woods.

 

Copyright 2008 Marianne McNamara

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Comments: 15

*LORA* M. Jan 4, 2008, 4:42pm EST
nice
Trudy P. Jan 4, 2008, 9:34pm EST
Very nice Marianne!
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P C. Jan 4, 2008, 9:51pm EST
Very haunting. Great poem.
Jim Ross Jan 4, 2008, 10:22pm EST
Beautiful rictameter, Marianne. Replete with the fullness of time, seen in the restful light of the forest.
David C. Jan 5, 2008, 7:46am EST
powerful imagery, I'm reminded of Frost's "Stopping by the Woods..."
John L. Jan 6, 2008, 10:17am EST
nicely eerie trip through the woods of metaphor
Marianne M. Jan 6, 2008, 12:41pm EST
David,
Thank you for the great compliment! Robert Frost is one of my favorite poets and "Stopping By Woods" is one of my favorite poems.
Marianne M. Jan 6, 2008, 12:49pm EST
John,
You're right, it is a nicely eerie trip through the woods of metaphor. I love that! Thanks for a GREAT comment.
Rita j. Jan 7, 2008, 5:52pm EST
very nice
Marianne M. Jan 7, 2008, 7:06pm EST
It seems I can always count on you, Rita. Thank you!
necee t. Jan 7, 2008, 8:03pm EST
another wonderful rictameter by Marianne... great reading...

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Marianne M. Jan 7, 2008, 8:30pm EST
Thanks, Necee. Kind of you to say so.
William Dotani Jan 8, 2008, 2:52am EST
I like the metaphor. The line, 'the sharply pointed edges smooth.' had a lot of possible visualizations. There was a bit too much personal finality in your verse, since it's obvious you are still alive and kicking.
Marianne M. Jan 8, 2008, 9:06am EST
Yes, William, I am still kicking! Please forgive me, just a smidgeon of poetic license ...

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