Starbursts Spark from wave crests To charm a loving pair Who clasp hands at the liner's rail And regale as her ring becomes as one With nature's dancing nighttime heart And glimpse their dazzling life By myriad Starbursts
ahhhhhh...Love!!!.......I don't think I ever had any fireworks explode, because of love, but, it does seem the stars shine much brighter(smiles)....This is very nicely written, and I enjoyed it greatly!
Jim! A lovely image; I see a young couple on their honeymoon, beginning their new life together, looking forward to a "dazzling" future! Sweet memories ...
I'm glad I could help, John. Thank you for the compliment. Don't worry, I feel a cerebral one on the way--hopefully that will dovetail nicely, too. :-)
We will try to fill the petal bowl daily at Rictameter, Mariana, so that you may delight in the ever-changing arrays of color. Thank you for the compliment.
No, I think I like this one best. I might try rictameter, one day...LOL...but it bears some thought. When I first started writing haiku, I had to really think and count - then it came easily. Is it the same with rictameter I wonder?
Yes, it is, Maggie--identical; the idea pulses from the first word(s) and expands toward the big, ten syllable line, where the idea begins its downward synthesis to the poem's altered meaning of the first word(s). For example:
Diamonds And women gleam When ensembled for night And reflected by candlelight Across a table contracted by eyes That sparkle behind golden flames With the murmur of love That passes through Diamonds
Originally published as Romantic Trappings, in 2006. Regardless, as with your haiku, Maggie, HAVE FUN with it.
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Comments: 21
Starburst candies can give you the same jolt!
Great, Virginia. Thank you.
Thank you, Fran.
Thank you, Linda.
My pleasure, Elizabeth. I hope you enjoy it.
Salud.
We will try to fill the petal bowl daily at Rictameter, Mariana, so that you may delight in the ever-changing arrays of color. Thank you for the compliment.
Thank you, Larry.
I might try rictameter, one day...LOL...but it bears some thought.
When I first started writing haiku, I had to really think and count -
then it came easily. Is it the same with rictameter I wonder?
Diamonds
And women gleam
When ensembled for night
And reflected by candlelight
Across a table contracted by eyes
That sparkle behind golden flames
With the murmur of love
That passes through
Diamonds
Originally published as Romantic Trappings, in 2006. Regardless, as with your haiku, Maggie, HAVE FUN with it.