by Sue D.
Member since:
December 16, 2006

in your pocket

January 02, 2008 01:20 AM EST (Updated: January 02, 2008 01:32 AM EST)
views: 97 | rating: 10/10 (38 votes) | comments: 46

 

I sit on on the banks waiting

storms rage and pull me down

tumbling and turning downstream

to unknown waters

and rest on the bottom of a pool

submerged

dreaming of calm

hoping to be found

Sunshine awaits me

skipping across waters

dancing and playing along the way

joyful

I rest on the banks

open to the warming sun

storm worn edges

grounded

smooth and polished

in your pocket

to rub your worries away

 

 

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Comments: 46

Corina Carrasco Jan 2, 2008, 1:27am EST
This is nice, Sue. It has its own inner pacing that moves it quickly when it should and slows the reader at the right time, too. Nicely done.
Sue D. Jan 2, 2008, 1:30am EST
I am thinking I should edit it and work on it some Corina. It came pretty much straight off the hip. Hmmm. sometimes that is good. Thanks.
Ellie !. Jan 2, 2008, 1:30am EST
Sue, you obviously run deep. I have appreciated your poems...and you!
Back to work I go tomorrow...grrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
Sue D. Jan 2, 2008, 1:39am EST
I have to go back to work tomorrow too! I feel exactly the same way, but I had to work on Monday. I appreciate you too.
Mary K. Jan 2, 2008, 2:05am EST
Good poem. Thanks for sharing!
Shannon W Jan 2, 2008, 2:12am EST
This is beautiful Sue... You have a lot of talent. I like it this way but if you edit it I'd like to read that too. :)
Lovely poem Sue. Well done.

there's plenty of storm water running here at the moment. It hasn't stopped for days and they say there's worse to come. ugh!
Great poem job well done. Thanks for sharing.
Very nice!
John L. Jan 2, 2008, 9:53am EST
very nicely done. Intrigued by title as it doesn't unfold until the last line.
lynn a. Jan 2, 2008, 10:53am EST
I too am appreciative of the thoughts and the flow to match them. Very good. Happy New Year.
Jared G. Jan 2, 2008, 11:35am EST
Nice -- very nice!!
Vicky Duggins Jan 2, 2008, 12:25pm EST
You get a ten from me.
Jaime R. Jan 2, 2008, 2:58pm EST
Wow, really liked that one!
Kay M. Jan 2, 2008, 3:14pm EST
Very nice!!!
Ellie !. Jan 2, 2008, 11:32pm EST
I came back and re-read this. I like it. It is uplifting.
I am not good with poetry...too logical, too scientific.
BUT, I LOVE THIS ONE!
Ellie !. Jan 2, 2008, 11:33pm EST
Hope all is going well for you.
Swimming With The Tide O. Jan 3, 2008, 1:13am EST
This is wonderful! I have a worry stone that my husband carried while he was in Bosnia and Iraq. I've carried it since his third tour in Iraq.
Teresa W. Jan 3, 2008, 4:12am EST
This is great Sue! I don't think it needs any changes at all!!
Wilma M. Jan 3, 2008, 8:55am EST
It sounds really good to me the way it is.

I love the flowing words and the images they create.
Sheila Deeth Jan 3, 2008, 1:00pm EST
Nice image; storm creating peace; and waiting. Liked it.
carmel m. Jan 4, 2008, 10:25am EST
Great flow to this poem.
Worry Stones are good things to have!
Toni V. Jan 4, 2008, 6:38pm EST
Great poem Sue!
Jo C. Jan 4, 2008, 9:35pm EST
Very nice resolution to this poem, not expected or foreseen, adding to the interest :)
I love the lines here! Great poem!
Dreaming of calm waters & warm sun myself!
Angella *ThePilatesLounge.com* H. Jan 5, 2008, 12:05pm EST
You have a gift for poetry- Nice poem! Hope you have great 2008-
Curt L. Jan 5, 2008, 1:22pm EST
This is gorgeous, Sue! What a talent/gift you possess! 100+
Mariana T. Jan 5, 2008, 1:46pm EST
Dear Sue - I love this poem - beautiful visuals - simple and to the point, yet deep - I appreciate the read. Salud.
Ellie !. Jan 5, 2008, 2:59pm EST
you are good at expressing in poetry...how is life going...is it possible to be busier after the holidays!
queen.susan . Jan 5, 2008, 3:51pm EST
I loved reading
this one!
Great writing job.
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Ruth Luce Jan 5, 2008, 11:13pm EST
That is good Sue!! Have a great many of those myself, some made, some found, some gifts, shiny ones, sparkly ones, round ones, odd ones, all much loved!
Ellie !. Jan 6, 2008, 1:37am EST
ruth is right...a gift
Bob C. Jan 6, 2008, 4:00am EST
Very nice Sue, great sentiments expressed! Thank you for sharing! I am glad that I came across it on this sleepless night!
Samantha V. Jan 6, 2008, 4:59am EST
Most awesome! :) :HUGS:
paula h. Jan 7, 2008, 3:47am EST
very nice
Risa G. Jan 8, 2008, 9:27pm EST
very pretty imagery. Good job.
Elsie Duggan Jan 9, 2008, 2:31pm EST
I particularly love this poem Sue, it has a lot of meaning to me, I carry with me all the time in my purse a smooth round stone my daughter gave me, it is my rubbing stone, when I am in need to feel her near or just for comfort, how wonderfully they are made, and you describe that so well here.
denise e Jan 10, 2008, 10:50pm EST
very nice. Thanks for sharing.
Cameron B. Jan 19, 2008, 7:45pm EST
Thank you for the lovely poem. I enjoyed it very much.
Jodie P. Jan 26, 2008, 3:05pm EST
that was nice, I like it!

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