Winter Rips through my clothes, Chaps and reddens my cheeks, Sails crisp brown leaves capriciously; Her time to cool Earth's overheated crust After seasons of growing stuff; She shows us her duties, Blows us her name-- Winter
Thank you, William. I love working with rictameter when the core idea is defined by a two syllable word. It allows for a crisp entry and exit and an expansion and contraction of the idea.
Bundle up, Deb, and watch the storm from a cozy distance, if you can. Thank you for the compliment.
Very nice work, Jim. You incorporate your message into the form so smoothly. I especially like the sense of duty you ascribe to nature's wintry aspect, the responsibility that comes with the carefree joys while making making plain the purpose.
Great poem Jim, they always are. I'm ready for Spring too, only a couple of months to go here in Arkansas. By the end of February I can usually start setting my plants outside...
Thank you for featuring Winter, Marilyn; I'm honored. I hope you can bundle up and stay warm.
It's only two cold blinks of the calendar away, Lynn--but I don't think I'll stare at the clock too much! Just anticipate all the things I love about spring. Thank you for the compliment.
I can feel your pain in the description of the trip, Marianne. I can also hear and smell the diesel ferry engines and see the frosted window panes, dripping. I'm glad you liked the poem.
Great, Virginia. They're a lot of fun to write.
Thank you, Alison.
I'm glad you liked it Gordon. I probably do have enough, but I want to focus on a particular theme, so more are on the way.
Your feeling is bang-on as usual, Bhawana. There is so much to love when the wind howls and flying snow makes fillets against windows. Thank you for the compliment.
Thank you, John. In addition to what I've said, above, about rictameter, the form allows for no flab. A two syllable idea expands to a ten syllable turning point, then back to an altered state of the two syllable idea. They're fun to write.
You really got the sensory effects of winter across extraordinarily well here, Jim. I especially liked the 'c' and 'ch' alliteration that you use to structure the poem through sound and direct attention to the physical world.
Yes! This just what winter does. I love it. Had to google rictameter. Not a term I was familiar with. Very cool! I will try this poetry form myself. Thank you for introducing me to something new, Jim. I'm excited!
I like how this rips, chaps, sails, and then blows toward the end like putting out a match or candle flame. Nice movement in this I don't often find in richtameters. Enjoyed.
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Bundle up, Deb, and watch the storm from a cozy distance, if you can. Thank you for the compliment.
Wonderfully written and this featured on the group, Poets, New and Old
http://poetsnewandold.gather.com/
with thanks for putting it where I could find it easily! Brrr, I'm ready for spring.
Marilyn
Thank you for featuring Winter, Marilyn; I'm honored. I hope you can bundle up and stay warm.
It's only two cold blinks of the calendar away, Lynn--but I don't think I'll stare at the clock too much! Just anticipate all the things I love about spring. Thank you for the compliment.
I can feel your pain in the description of the trip, Marianne. I can also hear and smell the diesel ferry engines and see the frosted window panes, dripping. I'm glad you liked the poem.
Great, Virginia. They're a lot of fun to write.
Thank you, Alison.
I'm glad you liked it Gordon. I probably do have enough, but I want to focus on a particular theme, so more are on the way.
This is a fascinating poem and I feel romance here...winter seems perfect for you...Good job,,.,
I agree, Ed. Thank you for the compliment.
HAPPY NEW YEAR... blessings to you...
thanks for your nice comments...
Thank you, Terry. Much appreciated.