by William Dotani
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October 27, 2006

Tinsel

December 19, 2007 02:55 PM EST (Updated: December 19, 2007 02:57 PM EST)
views: 117 | rating: 9.8/10 (38 votes) | comments: 65

Tinsel the sound in sparkling eyes

Thinking of the reindeer ride

From the North Pole a Ho Ho Ho

As Santa climbs aboard and checks his roll

Are these little children good or bad

Oh I have no wish to make them sad

A very sweet brother and sister I see

Now where did I put their delivery

 

The mother looks at her children with a smile

And closes the book, remembers miles

Then softly, 'Santa won't stop if you're awake'

She tucks the youngest in, who says, 'Mama wait'

'Have I really been so bad?' 'No my angel, no.'

 

A peck on her cheek, a peck on her brother's forehead

The presents all sorted under the tree

And the lights glisten; ornaments play

Twirling her favorites round and round

Lost in the sounds of tinsel

 

 

 

 

 

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Comments: 65

*LORA* M. Dec 19, 2007, 3:05pm EST
like it 10
Fred Hose Dec 19, 2007, 3:06pm EST
That's a very touching poem...totally suitable for the season.

I see a loving mother seeing decorations that she knows so well..and dreaming of happy times gone by.

Beautiful, Bill
William Dotani Dec 19, 2007, 3:07pm EST
Fred, I deeply appreciate your sentiment.
Donald M. Dec 19, 2007, 3:08pm EST
Now that could be a childrens story. It was so very good William. The kind of writing I enjoy the most.
Heather W. Dec 19, 2007, 3:29pm EST
That was beautiful
William Dotani Dec 19, 2007, 3:36pm EST
Thank you Donald, Norma, Paint & Heather.
William Dotani Dec 19, 2007, 3:36pm EST
Oops, Thank you Lora.
Elaine B. Dec 19, 2007, 3:43pm EST
LOL!
William Dotani Dec 19, 2007, 3:54pm EST
Ozzie & Harriet, Elaine.
Ann J. Dec 19, 2007, 4:18pm EST
Very nice,William....Reminds me of my childhood.
Wonderful Christmasy poem, enjoyed very much.
William Dotani Dec 19, 2007, 4:24pm EST
Ann, Actually it was. You heard of The Truman Story?
Cristina S. Dec 19, 2007, 4:26pm EST
William, this feels all warm and fuzzy - this time of year I'm a sucker for that! Thank you!
Kathryn E. Dec 19, 2007, 4:58pm EST
Hi William,

This lovely poem is now a Feature in Wednesday Writing Essentials.
Very nice, Bill!
Donna Hammett-Tooker Dec 19, 2007, 6:23pm EST
Nothing wrong with sentimentality and old-timey mushy - I love a chance to remember the good old days.
Marge H. Dec 19, 2007, 8:21pm EST
A very charming Christmas poem.
elizabeth e. Dec 19, 2007, 9:24pm EST
I had to laugh when I saw "Tinsel"....although I wanted to name Zach Infamy, my sister Fran from the time she knew I was going to deliver in December called him Tinsel...and to this day she refers to him as this.

Wonderful little poem.
Wilma M. Dec 19, 2007, 10:35pm EST
This makes me think of my grandkids. My 4 year old grandson is very concerned with all the details of Santa's journey. When does he leave? What if I'm still awake - does he go away and come back later? What if he brings something I didn't want?

It's a magical time for little people!
Pepsie J. Dec 19, 2007, 10:58pm EST
Do you remember that feeling of excitement on Christmas eve? It was so hard to fall asleep. Your wonderful poem brings sweet memories, thanks William. I needed it. It's been a long hectic week. My mom has been in the ICU for 3 days. We just had a blizzard and another is on it's way . we will have a white Christmas for sure. Anyways happy thoughts from me for a change...
Donald M. Dec 19, 2007, 11:09pm EST
Wishing you a jolly happy night.
Elsie Duggan Dec 20, 2007, 12:43am EST
Featured William, that is wonderful, I think this is one of the nicest Christmas poems I have seen, especially for the little children to hear, it reminds me of when my kids were little, what wonderful times they were, and there always was tinsel, lovely William, lovely
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Dec 20, 2007, 1:28am EST
She tucks the youngest in, who says, 'Mama wait'
'Have I really been so bad?' 'No my angel, no.'

God has given special heart to Moms...and your Mom is really wonderful...Moms are winners everywhere....so this is for your Mom..Congrats!!!


(when I was pregnant and was looking for names ..I was sure that it's a boy .decided this name Vatsalya...Vatsalya is a Sanskrit Word which means...motherly love....)
samantha b. Dec 20, 2007, 2:05am EST
what a lovely Christmas poem
Sheila Deeth Dec 20, 2007, 2:16am EST
I love the image conjured by "the sound of tinsel." What a beautiful phrase.
sheila h. Dec 20, 2007, 3:13am EST
Simply Sweet!
You've captured the magic of loving familiesand Christmas...all in a hypnotic 'sound' of tinsel.
i am a tinsel freak..the traditional silver icicles not that fuzzy garland crap.
it so takes one back to those good early Christmases,and so do your words strung together in a pleasing row....like the popcorn we strung in those bygone days.
sheila h. Dec 20, 2007, 3:13am EST
BTW ,tinsel has its downside...when the cat eats it and it decorates kitty's back side
J W. Dec 20, 2007, 4:53am EST
good poem
Pepsie J. Dec 20, 2007, 6:12am EST
I had to come back and read this poem. Very nice. I'm smiling.
elizabeth e. Dec 20, 2007, 8:18am EST
May the tinsel in your life turn into GOLD, William.
William Dotani Dec 20, 2007, 9:17am EST
Thank you Kathryn. I am honored.
Marianne M. Dec 20, 2007, 10:18am EST
William! You've captured a lovely time in MY life, when our children were small. It was always so magical experiencing Christmas through their eyes. And those last exciting moments of waiting before Santa arrived. There will never be anything quite like it again. Love the line, "Lost in the sounds of tinsel." Wonderful! And Merry Christmas to you.
Paula Love Dec 20, 2007, 11:22am EST
awww, how I wish I could be a mother to young ones again. I'd do it much better.
Tom C. Dec 20, 2007, 12:51pm EST
Very lovely, William. I like the synaesthetic effect you get with the "sound" of tinsel, something we normally think of in terms of sparkle and vision. It's a grand metaphor for the season, and tied up nicely at the end. This is great.
Christopher Cole Dec 20, 2007, 4:13pm EST
Nice poem William. The simple joy of Christmas through a child's eyes, magic pure magic!
William M. Dec 20, 2007, 6:15pm EST
Very good.
debra g. Dec 20, 2007, 9:59pm EST
a great poem,I popped in to say thank you for reading my best friend article.
Wilma M. Dec 20, 2007, 11:39pm EST
I always like to come back and check out all the comments. I don't have the 'sound of tinsel' anymore on my tree. I could never get it arranged evenly so finally gave up trying a few years ago. Seems like everyone in the world could put it on beautifully except me. I must have flunked Tinsel 101.
Elsie Duggan Dec 21, 2007, 3:20am EST
I love when you write me poetry under my poetry William and it fits so nicely , thank you, goodnight, I am heading for dreamland, see you tomorrow.
William Dotani Dec 21, 2007, 4:43am EST
Sweet dreams Elsie. Only 7 llama are available for counting tonight.
Paula Love Dec 21, 2007, 1:28pm EST
William are you around today? No new poem or story is put up! Hope you are feeling well today, maybe you is out buying me a twismas present, some yellow polkie dotty non slip shoes???
Wilma M. Dec 21, 2007, 1:49pm EST
William, I'm sorry to hear you aren't feeling well today. Knowing how much you love a certain 4 letter word, I found a picture to cheer you up.
Sheila Deeth Dec 21, 2007, 1:58pm EST
Came back to read more comments. I think I failed tinsel 101 too Wilma! Last time I put it on the tree my husband had to take it off and do it again.
Sheila Deeth Dec 21, 2007, 1:58pm EST
Loved Sheila's comment!
Lisa M. Dec 21, 2007, 2:43pm EST
Congratulations - Your Poem has been featured in "The Poetry Review"
Elsie Duggan Dec 21, 2007, 11:40pm EST
Look another feature for your poem, that is sensational William, I hope you are feeling better, hate to hear that you are not well still. Darren has been out of work almost two weeks now, with somekind of flu thing, been to the Dr. twice he is now on vacation for 11 days so he might get enough rest to get better, have to keep reminding him he is almost 55, next month, I think of him as a kid, and you too, so be a good boy and get better, love you, Elsie
William Dotani Dec 22, 2007, 12:49am EST
Thank you Lisa, I'm humbled by a second time to be featured.
Maria G. Dec 22, 2007, 5:55am EST
So heart-warming Bill, just the warmth we need this season. :-)
John Harris Beck Dec 22, 2007, 11:37am EST
Great gentle Christmas poem, William. I like the "sound of tinsel" touch, since it's visual and, as I think of it, makes no sound for the ear. So you call up a sense transference. (Of course, your tinsel may do little clinkings?)
TK Rosevear Dec 22, 2007, 3:46pm EST
Beautifully felt and written William ;)

Merry Christmas!!!!
Elsie Duggan Dec 22, 2007, 6:08pm EST
Merry Christmas William, Take care of yourself and enjoy your wonderful family, get some rest, and relax, love, Elsie
Paula Love Dec 22, 2007, 7:52pm EST
thanks for the wishes for my birthday and the warmth you're sending my way also for a closer family. I so hope you are feeling better and hope that you also have a wonderful holiday season!
Deb J. Dec 22, 2007, 9:58pm EST
Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays to you too William!!! Hope you have a fun one!!
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Barbara B. Dec 23, 2007, 3:01am EST
Wlliam such a sweet poem dear man, reminded me
of my childhood and Momma telling us kids to be
quiet, get to sleep cause Santa won't stop if you're
all not asleep! I loved this William. *smiles*
Barbara B. Dec 23, 2007, 3:02am EST
Just letting you know that I posted part 13 on my series William.
John F Walter Dec 23, 2007, 4:51am EST
Just a wonderful poem for kids of all ages, William, with careful attention to the mother's loving attitude toward her children, eagerly awaiting Santa's visit. This one brought back memories of my own childhood, with my older sister and my four younger brothers huddled around like a miniature football team after Midnight mass, listening to Mom's pep talk about how Santa would be coming in a few hours. What joyful times those were! The excitement we all felt.
lynn a. Dec 24, 2007, 4:08am EST
Now this was sweet and sappy and I loved it just for those elements. I can hear the tinsel still, from childhood. I don't think my mother could imagine a Christmas tree decorated until it had the tinsel all over. What a wonderful memory. Thanks, William, this really touches the heart. Hope you are feeling better.
Otelia S. Dec 24, 2007, 9:49am EST
"WOW" of a poem
Merry Christmas & Happy New Year.
Trish A. Jan 2, 2008, 12:14am EST
William your last line is one that clings just like the tinsel on the tree. Excellent poem.

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