by Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom'
Member since:
April 25, 2007

ELEmenTS

November 22, 2007 05:01 AM EST (Updated: November 22, 2007 05:14 AM EST)
views: 101 | rating: 9.8/10 (40 votes) | comments: 54

 

 

 

Locating fragments of girlhood for a collage of segments

Amusement of achievements with commend and blandishments

Elements of passion sent me an acknowledgement, revealment of requirements

Added seducement, allurement, enticement, inducement, ensnarement, excitement

Mental enfoldments of temperaments with murmuring endearments

Felt that the women had a peak psychic powers at commencement of womanhood

But men don't endure the monthly torment of menstruation

How different are men and women really, thinking about my wonderments

Like a fermented wine, women are caressed of the winsomeness of supermen

An Instrument of desire changed the dimensions of life

Now my assignments were different, accomplishments were bizarre

Sentiments rushed to my heart to buy the wedding supplements

Vehement desires lamented for some crazy experiments

 
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Comments: 54

Brenda (square peg in a round hole) H. Nov 22, 2007, 5:06am EST
Very good Bhawana.
Yvonne F. Nov 22, 2007, 5:34am EST
well done
Fred Hose Nov 22, 2007, 5:48am EST
Hahaha Bhawana
I feel in my heart that you had a of of fun doing this one.
I enjoyed how "like a fermented wine, women are caressed by the winsomeness of supermen."
I had to stop working for a while after I read that line. And that photo said it all.
Bhawana...you do this so so well.
Very good !! Well done Bhawana
amarpreet k. Nov 22, 2007, 6:31am EST
:-) :-) I loved it dearie ...
such girlie fun ... you know what I love men as much as I hate them ..but any day I am feminist ..:-) love being a women and enjoy every moment of it ..
amarpreet k. Nov 22, 2007, 6:31am EST
are you giving me ideas of sexy dress this new year ..
amarpreet k. Nov 22, 2007, 6:31am EST
but i have to get back in shape for that
amarpreet k. Nov 22, 2007, 6:31am EST
:-):-):-)
smiles and hugs for you
Chuck M. Nov 22, 2007, 7:06am EST
Neat! Well done!
Beryl Singleton Bissell Nov 22, 2007, 7:57am EST
Yikes. All those men! I love them, but ... I wonder if anything could be done with "women." Somehow I think not.
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I think you enjoyed doing this one. NO?
J W. Nov 22, 2007, 8:25am EST
Happy Thanksgiving
amarpreet k. Nov 22, 2007, 8:48am EST
Ernie ...I like the background you choose for your message :-)
gautami tripathy Nov 22, 2007, 8:54am EST
"winsomeness of supermen" did not gell with me.

Supermen- winsome?
Mary H. Nov 22, 2007, 9:39am EST
wow, this is great! Creative
Virginia M. Nov 22, 2007, 9:53am EST
Good job, Bhawana !:)
Larry H. Nov 22, 2007, 10:24am EST
Really neat thanks for sharing, tapped her on sholder, she wouldn't turn around.. ha ha ha ha
Sue * Nov 22, 2007, 10:28am EST
Good job! This was fun to read!
Ellie !. Nov 22, 2007, 10:42am EST
love your word play
Angie O. Nov 22, 2007, 11:41am EST
LOL Good job.
amarpreet k. Nov 22, 2007, 11:55am EST
Reena !! I loved your last comment ...
did we hear it somewhere " if you don't have something nice to say ...keep your mouth shut ."
Edward Nudelman Nov 22, 2007, 2:19pm EST
Excellent, Bhawana!
Elsie Duggan Nov 22, 2007, 5:35pm EST
This is very nice Bhawana, I am glad I am not competing this week, Happy Thanksgiving.
Alison Pearce Nov 22, 2007, 6:09pm EST
Great Play on words Bhawana!
Linda B. Nov 22, 2007, 6:38pm EST
mmmmm...... are you implying that woMEN have empowerMENt....... mmmmm....... thinking I like it....... ha ha ha
donna h. Nov 22, 2007, 7:21pm EST
Very good...Happy Thanksgiving
TK Rosevear Nov 22, 2007, 8:23pm EST
So, girls just want to have fun, but not enough MEN or time, eh?
Great PPOW!!
Happy Thanksgiving!!!
Mariana T. Nov 22, 2007, 8:34pm EST
Dear Bhawana - lovely as always and I certainly don't know how you figure out all those things from the word "men" but it all works! Salud.
Apryl Just Apryl Nov 22, 2007, 9:05pm EST
Very nice and so very creative!
Syed The Shah Nov 22, 2007, 9:10pm EST
Ooops, I am in the wrong place ladies talk show.
bye
Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Nov 22, 2007, 10:47pm EST
Thank you guys for enjoying this and Thanks Ernie...your images are really getting special and special..
Lawrence U. Nov 23, 2007, 12:14am EST
Awesome! Your lovely poetic voice is a pleasure to behold, Bhawana - a creative play on words. Happy Thanksgiving!
Chris H. Nov 23, 2007, 12:36am EST
great play on words
sheila h. Nov 23, 2007, 3:07am EST
From girlhood dreams to womanhood and its reality. What a ride!
All female all the time and we have to deal with it.
The complexities of being female.
You scared Shah away! The power of the pen wielded by a woman!LOL!
I love your writing,BBBB,well done!
Well done.
Susan B. Nov 23, 2007, 3:25pm EST
Wow! superbly said :)
Elsie Duggan Nov 23, 2007, 4:32pm EST
Congratulations on the most comments award Bhawana, and the secret word too,
Marge H. Nov 23, 2007, 4:41pm EST
Wonderfully written Bhawana. So clever.
Tracey W. Nov 23, 2007, 5:26pm EST
Bhawana, you definitely have a singular vision. Go girl.
A very enjoyable read. Two thumbs up.
Sheila Deeth Nov 23, 2007, 9:00pm EST
Loved your "fermented wine" line. Nice job. And a pleasantly different take on differences.
lynn a. Nov 24, 2007, 2:43am EST
You sure said a lot in this one. Very good. I don't know how you do this either.
lynn a. Nov 24, 2007, 3:06am EST
Congratulations on getting the most comments.
Lorri Goddard-Clark Nov 24, 2007, 5:38pm EST
intense and thought provoking. great job.
William Dotani Nov 25, 2007, 1:59am EST
The photo is rather sexy. You certainly describe women to the tee. I found you comments about men somewhat humorous. I concur with Fred's excellent comment.
gautami tripathy Nov 25, 2007, 3:33am EST
When we put up up a piece of our writings on any public forum that means we should be prepared for critiques too. It is not something light I pointed out. I think, we should leave it on Bhawana to reply instead of others doing it for her.

If we have the right to critique any great writer's works, do you suppose we are above it?


Amanpreet, it was not about being about nice or un-nice. How do you consider critiquing un-nice?
Jerri H. Nov 25, 2007, 11:25am EST
Great word play Bhawana :)
Parul S. Nov 26, 2007, 5:27pm EST
Vehement desires lamented for some crazy experiments

loved this last line...as much as the poem itself.....dearest your vocabulary has left me far behind to completely comprehend the true meaning of your lovely poem....

hats off to you

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