Chatsworth High School, in Durban, is where many prominent Indian citizens had been educated during its great past.
In the year of this story, the Grade 12 class included three scholars. At first their paths did not cross and they wandered around different parts of the playground. However, in their final year they came to know each other. As their friendship developed they all seemed to realise instinctively that their lives and their destinies would become interwoven quite dramatically.
Every now and then Rakesh and Haya would meet on the playground and they would then usually exchange a few friendly words like "hi", "what are you doing?" and so on.
Once, while they were talking, Haya saw Jason swing from branch to branch of a tree. He did not use two hands like the other youths did. He was able to do his swings first with one hand and then with the other. Sometimes he hung upside down with his legs hooked over a branch.
"Rakesh, look. Who's that strange boy over there? He's almost as agile as a monkey."
"Oh, him! That's Jason. He's a great guy. He can do anything. He's, in fact, even more agile than any monkey."
"Well then, let him be that wonderful. He seems to keep to himself all the time. Our paths will probably never cross."
Little did she and Rakesh realise that that same unusual youth would one day play major roles in both of their lives. Neither did she realise that from that moment on, she would meet Jason over and over again and that she would begin to see him in a more glowing light each time.
It was the Grade 12 farewell dance and Haya had been enjoying herself. She had laughed, joked and teased and been micheviously teased by her class mates. For a moment she forgot the sadness that she had previously been feeling because they were now in the final days at the school and were about to go separate ways.
She had been invited by various youths to dance but had, unfortunately, come to the conclusion that the school had not, during that particular year, produced many great dancers and so she declined most invitations and was content to sit at her table chatting with her friends.
On the way back from the cool drink stand, she found someone blocking her path. She looked up... into a pair of amazingly penetrating eyes. She never forgot that first experience of the power of that gaze nor the colour of the eyes...a luminous grey.
"Hello Haya. You're alone. That's so unusual. Why don't you dance with me?"
Overcome by surprise, she barely managed to nod her head. She watched as he put her cool drink down on a nearby table and then perhaps a little too eagerly she stepped forward into his arms and was promptly swept away onto the dance floor.
For the first time in her life, she realised what dancing was really about. It had nothing to do with the feet. In fact, she thought, that if you kept on thinking about your feet, you probably weren't really dancing, were you?
She realised that night that dancing could become a metaphysical experience. As she danced, it embraced her, filled her with sublime joy and then left her breathless. When the music stopped, she recovered her composure just enough to hear his words.
"Thank you, Haya. I enjoyed that. My name is Jason, by the way."
She was momentarily uncertain of herself and blurted a few words that came to her head.
"So you are not just a monkey boy... Oh! I'm so sorry. Forget that I said that. I wasn't thinking!"
"It's OK, Haya. I know what you mean. Sometimes when I'm out on the cliffs, I feel like a monkey. In fact, I've watched them closely and learned much from them about climbing." He was laughing as he spoke.
"OK, Jason. Thank you for the dance."
She felt a tinge of disappointment as he turned around quickly and walked lithely away.
As she looked at his departing back she had a strange thought. "Papa would love that guy."
The three scholars, Haya, Rakesh and Jason were all accepted for further studies at the University of Natal in Durban. Each followed a different academic path. They chose study plans that most suited to their vision of the future. Each had their own dream.
Rakesh was the communicator. He was the glue that held the three together. He had become very attached to Haya and Jason and made sure that he knew what was happening in each one's life. Whenever they got together, it was inevitably Rakesh who had arranged it.
He, of course, knew that Haya was continuing with her flying lessons over weekends. She had convinced her father that she was a naturally gifted and even brilliant learner pilot. Her father, who had met many trainees before, knew that his daughter had an exceptional talent.
That she would obtain her normal pilot's licence was perhaps a forgone conclusion. The examiner privately told her father that, with further training, she may soon be good enough to fly more advanced aircraft.
He, Rakesh, whenever he could, would visit his mother's farm. He went there at least on one weekend per month and also during all vacations. He assisted his mother with certain difficult tasks. He held many discussions with the foremen and explained their tasks to them. He also made sure that all parts and spares needed were ordered on time.
There was, however, one thing on the farm that he refused to do. He had never flown one of the two crop dusters. They had been on the farm when his father had bought the farm many years ago. He did, however, look after these special aircraft meticulously. He painted them in glorious colours and even named them Krishna and Radha.
Rakesh never ceased to be fascinated by Jason. It was as if Jason had the devil may care and adventurous lifestyle that he would have loved to share. Because of his great love of the outdoors, it was of no surprise to Rakesh when Jason joined a team of adventure athletes. Every second weekend they undertook outdoor trials that were physically very strenuous.
They had, for example, already completed a course of twelve parachute jumps and were, at that moment, learning about the finer points of hang gliding.
Their exploits had become known in certain official military circles and they had recently received an invitation to join a special branch of the defence force. It was the defining moment when his life took a dramatic turn..
Soon afterwards, Jason was persuaded to join a military Special Services Unit on a full-time basis once he graduated. This meant that he would do intense counter-insurgency training for a six month period after graduating.
In this period, he would be taught the theory and practise of mountaineering, hang gliding, mountain motorcycling, hand-to-hand combat, emergency procedures behind enemy lines and first aid. He would also become familiar of the latest military aids, such as night-time binoculars, vision enhancing goggles, communication aids, hand weapons, stun grenades and flares.
Because of this action, his life changed dramatically. What had been care free fun before
was now part of strict military routines. Somehow he knew that he was about to discover what dangerous living really was.
One day Raj, while at home between two of his inter continental flights, knocked on his daughter's bedroom door. She joyfully answered: "Is that you, Papa?"
"Yes, my angel. May I come in?"
"Of course, Papa! Come in. What's up?"
"Have you ever thought about why I so often call you ‘angel'? If you don't know then I'll have to tell you. You see you are not only an angel in my eyes but also you fly like one... and that brings me to why I'm here now."
"Oh my. What is on your mind, Papa?"
"I saw how easily you passed your pilot's licence test. That led me to think about your career very deeply. Because of all this and some enquiries that I've made, there is now something that I should discuss with you as soon as possible."
Haya raised her eyebrows and she looked excited but obviously mystified.
"That sounds great but waaht's it all about? Come on, Papa, don't hold back. Tell me what it is."
"No, sweetie. Not here. The atmosphere must be just right. I want us to be among the eagles when we do it. They will play a role in my story. Now this is my plan."
"I have booked a chalet for us in the Oribi Gorge for this weekend. Come, let you and I go there and be among those beautiful birds. Once there, we'll talk about my proposal."
"OK, Papa. You're obviously in one of your very dramatic moods. This is like a scene from a movie. OK Papa, I'll let you have your moment. In fact, it sounds very exciting. Let's do it."
After that conversation, Haya could not help thinking about the strange proposal that her father had in mind. In the end, she gave up. Her father had been far too mysterious. His proposal had to be one totally out of the ordinary.
That night, she sat up in her bed paging through her favourite book: a collection of poems by Kabir, Rumi and Mirabai. She smiled when she found a line of poetry to be of particular interest: "High on the Mountain where the Wind blows Free".
She read the poem again and again. "What can this possibly mean? Is there a message for me hidden in there somewhere?" Without finding an answer, she finally closed the book and settled back on her pillow... and soon fell asleep.
On the following Friday afternoon, Raj and his daughter drove down to the southern part of Natal and then, when near Margate, turned westwards to the huge Oribi Gorge
that had very fortunately been left untouched by the ravishing of modern society. This gorge was still the home of many indigenous birds and the main breeding ground for many of the eagles in the Southern Hemisphere.
After arriving at the edge of the gorge, just about where the road leading down to the valley below began, Raj began to look for the sign for a particular camping site that had a number of attractive chalets. When he saw the " Eagle's Nest" board, he smiled and said "there we are angel". They immediately turned off the main tourist road onto a local path. Soon they arrived at the weekend retreat that he had specially selected.
They checked in, unpacked and then went to their rooms to freshen up. Later in the evening, they met and went for a short exploratory walk to admire the sunset. Then they returned and enjoyed a delightful dinner together before retiring for an early night. All through the meal Raj had most frustratingly retained his air of mystery and frequently asked Haya to wait until the morning.
Haya woke up early the next morning just before sunrise. Something had stirred her. She felt an irresistible desire to dress and go outside without wasting another moment. Yes, there was an undeniable feeling of urgency.
"Am I somehow meant to do this?" she asked the mirror. She hurriedly donned her gold coloured track suit and then stepped outside. In front of her door was a footpath leading gently upwards towards a nearby mountain cliff. Her father was apparently not yet awake but she did not want to delay her walk any longer.
" Papa will understand. I just have to go up there. I feel this irresistible urge. I don't know why but I'm somehow being driven to do this."
After about an hour of fairly easy uphill walking, she eventually found herself at the top on a small plateau between several large boulders. She looked down over the edge of a cliff and saw that she was about 120 metres higher than the level of the plain below.
The Cape Eagles had already begun foraging for food supplies for their families. She admired their precise navigation skills and their uncanny ability to locate and exploit the thermal lift air currents, where these were available.
The views to all corners of the valley were magnificent especially while the cliff sides appeared to be gaudily painted by the morning sun. The whole picture was quite breathtakingly vibrant.
After a while, her attention was drawn to something unusual above her. When she had first spotted it, it had seemed to be fairly small. Then it had become progressively larger until it was eventually larger than an eagle. As she stared at it, she could see that, whatever it was, it could fly as well as any bird. It turned, dived and then rose on upward thermal currents as if it was the master of the forces of nature.


Comments: 40
"from that moment on, she would meet Jason over and over again and begin to see him in a more glowing light each time"
This line is one that really makes me curious.
Now I REALLY want to know how this continues!
Thanks Fred
The realization about dancing being a metaphysical experience is wonderful, I agree with Sheila.
If "bought the farm" was meant as a reference to his father dying, I passed over it, but think it's something I would do without. It's a little cheeky for this story, I think.
I like the set-up where Jason is about to discover what dangerous living is really about. That's a good hook, but I wonder, are flares really one of the "latest military aids?"
I'm not sure how people speak in India, but the dialog between Haya and Raj seems a little unrealistically formal. Perhaps because I am a Californian. I also got stuck for a moment wondering who Raj was until you explained. I might say who he is at the outset, but this is a small thing, as much style perhaps as anything.
I too enjoyed the part about reading the poets. I liked how she is so excited that she looks for hidden meaning in her poetry book that she's had since long before this mystery event.
I felt that the "sense of urgency" she felt to get outside right away felt a little contrived. Perhaps she could simply get dressed and race out due to her quite natural excitement about her father's proposal.
Good work, Fred - I am already waiting to see what happens next - and if I am right. :-)
Mystical dancing? Have you heard of the Sufi dancers, the whirling Derveshes? Their dance IS a mystical experience..
Reading messages in poetry. I really like the way this girl's mind works! Because, many times, clues about what is coming up next in our life do present themselves in similar ways..something you suddenly hear, see or read.
I like the thinking and loving father too. Taking his daughter to a place where there are eagles...an atmosphere of power, mystery...and time for discussion. What does he want to talk about?
Their conversation could be a little more curious on Haya's side. She did not question, offer any wonder or inquisitive raise of the brow at this strange suggestion.
The part about her wanting to go up to the cliff... I can vouch that such feelings do happen. I have had these urges to go to certain places..unexplained...there is often some connection that pulls a person.
I am most inclined to think that the creature flying there is Jason!! :) Krish revisited!
A couple of sentences seem too long and winding, maybe you could see if they can be written differently.
like: "She had laughed, joked and teased and been teased so much by her class mates that she, for a moment, had forgotten the sadness that she had previously been feeling because they were now in the final days at the school and were about to go separate ways." You can do away with she, for a moment, and replace it with
"for a moment she had forgotten that they would soon be parting ways. "
Just my humble opinion.
The story is engrossing!!
I've looked at your comments and I've had just done a heavy editing session. Thank you all.
If there are any more comments just let me have them. I love you thoughts.
Thank you again,
I'm going to respond to your comment first as you are up now and the the others are all still having their beauty sleep. Not that they need it. *grin*.
Of course I know the dancing Sufis and the whirling derveshes. I think I wrote a poem about them a month or two ago. I'm glad that you see this. Yes dancing can be a mystical experience. Why should it be just a shuffling of feet to a certain pattern?
I know that you understand this.
Yes, I think that many of the places that I've been to were done on the basis of some mysterious urge. It's funny (now that I come to think about it) whenever I've done that so spontaneously, I've never been disappointed.
Thank you for your ideas and your comments. They have really meant a lot to me.
Good Luck with the rest.
Happy Thanksgiving.
This is a gripping story of love , adventure and mystry ..of chasing dreams and fate playing role in crossing paths ...
I loved the way hara call Jason monkey boy ...and she finds her dad mysterious ...
The way she waits to dance with the perfect partner and the way she follow her instincts and give in to the urge to go uphill ....her character is interesting and full of life ..yert sensible and skilled ...
jason choosing militray as a career ...and participating in adventrous sports make him an Ideal here ...and if he can dance ..what else a girl needs ..( just a girls point of view )
a hint here and a lead there , keeps it interesting and make reader think and anticipate .... I am guessing that eagle to be Jason trying hand gliding ...
Good luck for the book .its wonderful Fred
happy thanks giving to you and your family ...
I'm replying to you early because America hasn't woken up yet.
I'm glad you liked the way that the story is building up. In the beginning it's difficult. One has so much to say and you don't want to overwhelm the reader. All the time you HAVE to keep his interest.
I hope that the little bits let out here and there will be enough to maintain your interest.
What's very important to me is that you have identified with the story. That's the greatest encouragement that I could get.
I'll post part 3 today or tomorrow. It's already written.
Happy thanksgiving to to you and yours. Bless you.
Thank you for your great interest.
All is well. All your questions have been answered in the next chapter now already up.
Happy Thanksgiving dear.
Thank you for coming to visit. If I made you homesick then my writing has achieved in gripping you. That's a big compliment.
The real love scenes will be far more dramatic. When life becomes more real and things don't out as dreams would.
Setbacks bring out what is the real truth, don't you think so?
Don't worry about anything...yet
The story begins on a very happy note. It's a period of discovery and everyones' career and destiny seems to fall into place.
I hope that you'll love the rest of the story.
I've found all those errors. BTW we say cold drink here in SA but I have to allow for the more prevalent version.
I've made all the changes and I hope that it now reads better, Thank you so much Sheila.
I hope that you've had a great holiday by the time that you read this.
I read your thoughts with great interest and I've done the necessary improvememts.
Hahaha you were right about the glider.
I really appreciate the effort made by you and Sheila. It's things like this that make Gather the great place that it is. Yesss.
Thank you for the happy smile on my face. You are so sweet. You came so many times just to make sure that i understood you happy flow of thoughts.
That was a delight for me to experience. Thank you dear friend.
PS I'm very happy that I rekindled some of your memories. Trips down memory lane are always happy.
Thanks for the encouragement and the Thansgiving wishes. Please accept mine for you and yours with all my heart.
Reena dear. When I say something warm and encouraging I do so because you deserve it. I can see the great writer in you. You have have a wonderful talent.
You go ahead and read in any mode that you like. If the story holds your attention then I'll feel very happy. I mean, wow, look at your stories. You set such a high standard.
I'm glad that you liked this chapter.
Thank you for your very complete comment. That was an amazing read for me. You have an amazing insight.
I'm going off to my other srticle first so that I can respond to your comments there. They too are very absorbing.
How are you Bill? Let me know please. I feel something amiss over the ether.
Ich bin neugierig was in der Zukunft passiern wird???