by Rima S.
Member since:
January 21, 2007

River of thoughts

October 27, 2007 12:51 PM UTC (Updated: October 27, 2007 05:08 PM UTC)
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Flying over the river

It heard itself crying

It saw itself flying

Spreading its wings

Its dreams

And its beams

 

It came toward me

And whispered in my ear

Telling me “I am sorry”

Never thought it would look around

 

It flew away over the river

Spreading its wings

Its dreams

And its beams

 

I opened my eyes

And it reached my mind

It colored my thoughts

Blue, green and black

Nothing was left

Only my past

 

Then

 

It flew away over the oceans and seas

Spreading its wings

Its dreams

And its beams too

 

But

 

It didn’t know that I was tied up

Hanging upside down

I heard what it said

But couldn’t help out myself

I called it to come

Cause I was afraid

 

It flew away over me again

And whispered

‘It is too late to say sorry

cause I am falling apart

and remember

I am just your river of thoughts’

 

 

   

Comments: 50

Denise B. Oct 27, 2007, 12:56pm UTC
interesting and good
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 12:56pm UTC
Thanks Denise...
Dena Straughn Oct 27, 2007, 1:11pm UTC
neat poem, we do keep things tethered that we could release with a simple I am sotty.
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 1:15pm UTC
Thanks Dena and you are right about keeping things tethered that at anytime we would release it ..and it would fall apart..
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 1:38pm UTC
The poem is based on that picture.. it is about thoughts that would go around our minds and sometimes they need us and sometimes we need them..
Terry A. Oct 27, 2007, 1:41pm UTC
I really enjoyed your poem. Very emotional
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 2:51pm UTC
Thanks Terry..glad that you liked it..
Erica M. Oct 27, 2007, 3:24pm UTC
very nice
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 3:35pm UTC
Thanks Erica!!
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 3:43pm UTC
Thanks Reena..
Oh I am happy ;)
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 3:55pm UTC
Thanks Pheonix..thanks for passing by and glad that you liked it too..
Marie J. R. Oct 27, 2007, 4:19pm UTC
wonderful my friend,,, Thank you,
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 5:07pm UTC
oh thank you Marie..
j - Frugal Mom - r. Oct 27, 2007, 6:17pm UTC
Rima, I really loved your poem, it kept my attention all through, and it kept me wondering. The ending could not have been better.
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 6:40pm UTC
Thanks j.r...I am pleased to hear that..
allen b. Oct 27, 2007, 7:08pm UTC
interesting poem
Rima S. Oct 27, 2007, 7:11pm UTC
Thanks allen..
j - Frugal Mom - r. Oct 27, 2007, 8:50pm UTC
Congratulations, your article made it to the top five at Today's Top Photos and Articles

Come check out Today's Top Five Articles
Sue M. Oct 27, 2007, 9:13pm UTC
Very nice, Rima!
Sandra T. Oct 27, 2007, 10:00pm UTC
Congrats on being in the top five! Great poem!
Jennifer K. Oct 27, 2007, 10:45pm UTC
This is a wonderful piece of poetry, Rima. Lovely photograph, also!
Pepsie J. Oct 27, 2007, 11:25pm UTC
Just thoughts, but they are the strongest things in the universe. Thanks
Rima S. Oct 28, 2007, 12:57am UTC
Thanks everyone
I am so happy that you enjoyed reading it..
Jules who is loving life again Oct 28, 2007, 3:41am UTC
wonderful rima
Rima S. Oct 28, 2007, 7:56am UTC
Thank you Jules!!
Lisa Frost Bailey Oct 28, 2007, 9:51am UTC
wonderful poem Rima~
congrats on the top 5
Rima S. Oct 28, 2007, 10:37am UTC
Oh thank you so much Lisa..
John Harris Beck Oct 28, 2007, 1:36pm UTC
"Interesting and good," as the first comment says. Quite unexpected the way it developed and ends, a real gift that still may not be able to change one's situation. Thank you.
Rima S. Oct 28, 2007, 3:27pm UTC
Oh..thanks John..and you're welcome!!
Truly exceptional , thought provoking...I like. And Congratulations on being in the Top 5 on Todays Top Photos and Articles
Rima S. Oct 28, 2007, 4:56pm UTC
Thank you Katherine..that is kind from you ...
Rima S. Oct 29, 2007, 1:27pm UTC
Thank you Amy and Reena..
Bundy P Oct 30, 2007, 9:45am UTC
Congratulations on making top 5!
Rima S. Oct 30, 2007, 10:12am UTC
Oh thanks Bundy..so sweet of you to pass by and comment..
Cristina S. Oct 31, 2007, 5:40pm UTC
this is a strong poem - very beautiful!
Rima S. Oct 31, 2007, 8:22pm UTC
Thanks Cristina..:)
Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Nov 2, 2007, 2:24am UTC
BEAUTIFUL AND POWERFUL
Rima S. Nov 2, 2007, 2:55am UTC
Oh..I am glad that you passed by Bhawana..thanks!!
William M. Nov 2, 2007, 12:03pm UTC
Very good.
Rima S. Nov 2, 2007, 12:09pm UTC
Thank you, William.
Lola l. Nov 4, 2007, 5:40am UTC
beautiful
Rima S. Nov 4, 2007, 9:13am UTC
Thanks Lola..
lemzo n Dec 27, 2007, 9:02am UTC
you are very talented my friend
Rima S. Dec 27, 2007, 9:04am UTC
thanks lemzo...:)
glad that you liked it..

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