Music at Dusk

Birds in silhouette on the black bars of the wires

Perch like notes

Against the soft blue page of sky--

Fat brown doves for whole notes,

Sprightly sparrows in a row of eighths,

Solemn king birds play the halfs

And long-tailed grackles are the quarter notes.

The glittery plastic wand in a tiny hand

Is just right for conducting the symphony

Of gravel under stroller wheels

Waving grass, bobbing palm leaves and

Early bats eager for the first mosquitoes.

The clouds are crowding in from the east

Tips rosy with the last western kiss.

The thin slice of moon above

Looks almost ready to open its silver eye.

I somehow hear the bird score

Inside myself

Like a deaf composer.

I think it's a waltz

Because my heart is beating 3/4 time.

Janna O'Donnell

Comments: 36

Sandra T. Oct 19, 2007, 11:32pm EDT

This is absolutely stupendous!!! The imagery is wonderful. I love "I somehow hear the bird score - Inside myself - Like a deaf composer." Truly awesome poem! Great great job!

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Tonia, who hugs trees G. Oct 19, 2007, 11:35pm EDT

Ahh, the symphony of nature - just lovely.

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Pat M. Oct 19, 2007, 11:41pm EDT

Perfectly put together Janna. I've always been a fan of the extremities of the day, from the damp promise of morning to the cooling respite of evening. This has captured the latter well.

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Debbie G. Oct 19, 2007, 11:48pm EDT

Completely delightful!

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Lawrence U. Oct 20, 2007, 12:09am EDT

Awesome! I love the beautiful imagery.

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JoAnne D. Oct 20, 2007, 12:44am EDT

Nice piece and photo too.

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Diana S. Oct 20, 2007, 2:10am EDT

I love how you added the simplicity of the photo to the complexity of your words...

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Marianne R. Oct 20, 2007, 5:54am EDT

Very nicely written.

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Deb D. Oct 20, 2007, 9:53am EDT

Wonderful!!

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Alison H. Oct 20, 2007, 11:23am EDT

Very nice!

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:23pm EDT

Thank you, Sandra. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:25pm EDT

Thank you, Tonia. It's a lovely thing to be able to take a walk alone with my little one and enjoy it. Her chatter seems to blend in nicely.

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:25pm EDT

Thank you, Pat.

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:25pm EDT

Thank you, Debbie.

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:25pm EDT

I'm glad you enjoyed it, Lawrence.

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:26pm EDT

Thank you, JoAnne. I took the photo a few months ago but it went so well I decided to put them together.

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:29pm EDT

Thanks, Diana. I'm glad you liked them both.

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:30pm EDT

Thank you, Marianne.

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:30pm EDT

Thank you, Deb.

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Janna O'Donnell Oct 20, 2007, 12:30pm EDT

Thanks, Alison.

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j - Frugal Mom - r. Oct 20, 2007, 4:29pm EDT

Janna, this is so wonderful, and the writing works so well with the photo.

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