When Love Can't Echo

Is this your poem that is a result of reading other's poems? My favorite line is the last one.

"For love can't echo without a cause".

I wish I could write as well as you. But since I can't, I'll just keep reading yours.

I think you wrote beautifully in spite of your concerns. You don't have to necessarily experience it to be able to imagine what it feels like. Excellent job.

That is a very good poem William, with a lot of feeling expressed.

We will never jest and walk away.

Sad,

William. But very nicely written.

"I may seem without direction
Or just parlay each subtle cue
For with meekness I've been asking
And often begging more from you"

This was my favorite part. Great poem.

There is feeling conveyed by this, William, in a number of intriguing lines, but I begin to be confused with the capitalization of "Christening," making me think it might be a religious reference, but I'm not sure if that has a place here. Then I get a feeling of precision out of "When I speak of that forsaken/It's just melody I can't hold," but also enough confusion that I can't quite seem to recover from it, all the way through that last line, which is startling but beyond me.

I am fully aware that this could be nothing more than my coming at the wrong time in the wrong awareness, and that my comments could be highly subjective, so please discard them if they provide no useful feedback to you. Feel free to straighten me out if you see it necessary!

Love never echoed with my ex of 8 years! I like this!

"For Love Can't Echo Without A Cause"
This really reached out to my heart!!!
Great poem dear friend loved it.
Just Me
Barbie

William thank you so much for all those
comments on articles and pictures.

Gerry, I debated whether or not to capitalize Christening, but decided to do so because most of the stories and poems I've read speak quite strongly of their Christian beliefs. As far the other point, I wanted to show the confusion a person feels when they aren't sure a relationship is worth saving. I greatly appreciate your comments.

I especially love the last line.

I enjoyed it. Thank you.

You have captured, a great deal of emotions in your, poem. Much like I try in my own poetry, but only better. The fifth verse i feel i can best relate too, and thus is my favorite. Thank you for sharing!

This poem once again shows your great talent William, The title itself is beautiful, but the whole poem is wonderful and best of all, I understand it . Well done William,

William, I am without words.

Love It!

William, the four words, 'When Love Can't Echo,' compose one of the best titles I've ever read in poetry or prose. Your poem goes forth calling for understanding and compassion between mankind. Indeed, a fine poem!

You spoke of things everlasting
Yet now with jest just walk away

How cruel but these lines reverberate for me - laugh and walk away - this is what my ex did to me but blamed me for the whole mess way back when!

A fine poem, wistfully spelled out line by painful line.

Interesting comment thread you have unleased.

Thanks for being accepting of my viewpoint, William, and for the explanation, which makes sense. As you can see, most people were able to interpret what you meant to convey and be quite content to leave it at that.

Hi Bill I salute the multiplcation of your talents.
This touching heart felt poem shows that you are a writing master.
More power to your pen. Salut.

Gerry, There's a place for high brow poems, but too often such poems are not easily understood by even those talented in the arts. I don't wish to deride such poetry, but some of the praise seems rather superficial, or as Holden C would say, 'Phony'.
I consciously write for the masses and when I say masses it is an honorary term without inclusively being for one set group. I want the person reading to understand the words, to identify with the verse and to feel the verse. I don't care if it's a person who hasn't read a book in 20 years, or a person who is a technical engineer, my poem is about emotions common to everyone through personal experience or through knowledge of a friend or relative that has had the experience in my poem's theme. I want my poems to be easy to read, so I'm consistent in my use of prepositions and conjunctions as a transitional bridge to help unify the thoughts and the theme. I prefer rhyme and could care less about the criticism I've received saying it's out of fashion, old hat, or childishly singsong. I used to let such criticism bother me, but finally realized these critics offered no alternatives and they only wanted to tear me down because I did not fit in their idealized world. That any person can enjoy and feel my poem is my reward. I deeply appreciate honest well thought out critiques that you, Tom Curl, Fred Hose and others have blessed me with. I listen, think and learn. I am still learning the art of writing poems, but I'm going to write the best I can and pray to God to guide my hand, so that I may bring the masses, which I love, something meaningful to enrich their lives or something they can enjoy. I have some talent, but inside I am a common man and proud of it.

Came back to read this and the comments again. Sounds like it touches everyone who reads it. That is talent and success.

This is good William.

Lovely poem William. Speaks very powerfully to me. "I am not a plan forgotten." Ouch.

I have to echo Sheila, the line "I am not a plan forgotten" is poignant and powerful. The entire poem is strong, but those last two lines have a punch that lingers.

William, we songwriter-poets have to stick together. Rhyme is a powerful tool, whether it be currrently out of vogue or not. Thanks for your use of it and your support of others who do the same.

This is an amazing experimentation into the dark depths of your soul. Fascinating metaphor of stage and putting on a facade while what lies beyond is unreciprocated, excruciating love. I'm both proud and extremely impressed by this piece and would love to feature it in Certified Souls...

"For love can't echo without a cause".

I hope so, too... Bravo, dear William! :-)

Blessings & best wishes, now and always - S.

Such praise humbles me.

When Love Can't Echo
said it all William...

You are very good...with last lines, especially!

Z'

The title caught my eye and the read enthralled me. Excellent and poignant write, William.