by gautami tripathy
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May 2, 2006

chain of being-----Poetry

October 02, 2007 12:12 PM EDT
views: 29 | rating: 9.1/10 (10 votes) | comments: 14

ubiquitous pip of that apple
shaken to the core
righted itself

tiny in size
ever so gifted
it knew what was expected of it

voyage from earth to fruition
had been arduous
so very tiring

no way it had
deterred him from
his pre-ordained chain of being

it awaited yet again for its turn
to be germinated into
excursion of life

holing into soil
half woken up dreams
culminated into a tree of stature

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  © gautami tripathy

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Comments: 14

J W. Oct 2, 2007, 12:14pm EDT
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Paul M. Oct 2, 2007, 12:20pm EDT
Nice.
Charity M. Oct 2, 2007, 1:02pm EDT
((( Very good indeed )))
Dena A. Oct 2, 2007, 1:13pm EDT
wow .. thats awesome! : )
Heidianna "Coriander" T. Oct 2, 2007, 2:13pm EDT
Beautiful! I love the imagery!
Debby D. Oct 2, 2007, 4:00pm EDT
Very nice. Esoteric.
Christopher Cole Oct 2, 2007, 4:51pm EDT
wow. very intricate an tight. nicely done!
Pepsie J. Oct 2, 2007, 6:22pm EDT
Just fine, I love it!
Alison H. Oct 2, 2007, 6:54pm EDT
Very nice indeed, though you might want to work with the verbs.....it might be stronger in present tense?
The circle of life! A refreshing look at it, Gautami.
gautami tripathy Oct 3, 2007, 11:36am EDT
THanks! I do appreciate the comments!

Alison , I had tried writing this with present tense before posting but it did not work well for me.
Terry Collett Oct 3, 2007, 1:54pm EDT
Well written poem with a fine theme.
Granny Janny H. Oct 3, 2007, 8:33pm EDT
Patience, persistence, commitment, and discipline pay off
in this cycle of being. I like the green font and the simplicity of this lesson.
Margaret G. Oct 9, 2007, 8:28pm EDT
nice poem,well written.

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