by Fred Hose
Member since:
May 9, 2006

Please Don't Tell My Soul

September 25, 2007 10:49 AM UTC (Updated: September 25, 2007 11:16 AM UTC)
views: 0 | comments: 47

A Dedication in a Rather Poor Rumi Style

 

Last night I spoke
But had to ask my heart
Not to reply for a while.

Dear broken heart
Don't speak to me about loss
And not about your pain

Do you know
The divine light of the moon
That speaks to hearts?

Last night I fell
From a flight to the moon
To broken pain on earth.

A macabre madness came

And my red blood flowed
As you turned away.

Weren't you the star
That shone so bright for me
Measured days ago?

How did your voice
Change to that of Pharisees?
Please don't tell my soul.

Let my soul believe
That I travelled on a moonbeam
And met a spirit glow.

My heart wonders sadly
How did this light turn to gloom?
Softly asked while it sorrows.

Please don't tell my soul
All I have is my bag and path
And rows of joyful images.

Oh heart be kind
Aren't you the messenger of God?
Then please don't tell my soul.

 

 

Comments: 47

J W. Sep 25, 2007, 10:53am UTC
10
Svetlana Goryacheva Sep 25, 2007, 10:58am UTC
Only a little typo, dear Fred... the correct spelling is "Pharisees". Otherwise, it's just perfect, with the true Sufi overtones being heard! ;-))

Hugs and blessings - S.
Fred Hose Sep 25, 2007, 11:19am UTC
Thank you J. A 10 is most welcome.

Correction done dear Sveta. Much obliged. Your praise is just what I needed to hear on this sad day.

Hugs and blessings dear friend...Fred
gautami tripathy Sep 25, 2007, 11:31am UTC
Good to see you Fred! One great poem too.
Alison H. Sep 25, 2007, 11:36am UTC
This is just beautiful, Fred.
Otelia S. Sep 25, 2007, 11:45am UTC
Well written. I enjoyed it.
I know how you like those "10s so I have one for you!
Fred Hose Sep 25, 2007, 12:07pm UTC
Thank you Gautami. I'm glad that you enjoyed this poem.

Come Judi...send me that rainbow...I need it right now. Thank you thank you.
Apryl Just Apryl Sep 25, 2007, 12:07pm UTC
Fred, this is lovely and so heartfelt.
William Dotani Sep 25, 2007, 12:42pm UTC
I am amazed by the tightness of your theme throughout this very lyrical, yet very sad poem. Your metaphor fit each recurring emotion like a glove. Absolutely beautiful.
Fred Hose Sep 25, 2007, 1:34pm UTC
Thank you Alison. I glad that an example of Rumi's great timeless style has appealed to you.

Great Otelia. Oh i'm not looking for points but any appreciation is most welcome.
Fred Hose Sep 25, 2007, 1:39pm UTC
You're so kind Shruthi. You're a person that always really cares. It's perhaps the greatest compliment that I can pay you. I love Sufi poetry as it touches a chord.

Bless you Apryl. You always deep felt emotions. Thank you dear.
Payam Sudhakaran Sep 25, 2007, 2:48pm UTC
Fred, to be able to converse to onceself requires great amount of imagination.. let me call it imagination because it's the ability to see oneself.. Your poem is simply beautiful... yes, God lives in our hearts!
Fred Hose Sep 25, 2007, 3:40pm UTC
Not only are you a great writer Bill but you know the art of graceful critiquing. You saw so much that you lifted my morale by three feet...just like that. Thank you my friend.

That's what I wanted to achieve Reena. A lyrical poem. So a big thanks to you.

Yes Payam. You speak true words. One must be able to see oneself...as one really is. Yes Patam...God lives in our hearts. Thank you for your kind words.
Marge H. Sep 25, 2007, 3:55pm UTC
If I could talk to your soul, I would assure it that you are loved by so many that one person who does not see how special you are is inconsequential. Of course, your soul would still know that when you give your heart to someone and that someone doesn't return it, it is of great consequence.
Sheila Deeth Sep 25, 2007, 8:14pm UTC
This one's beautiful Fred. Describes the separation between mind heart and sould so well.
Priscilla P. Sep 25, 2007, 8:50pm UTC
OOOOOh I like..."That I travelled on a moonbeam
And met a spirit glow.

Dream on, dream on
*Carol ~Bronx Southern Belle Y. Sep 26, 2007, 2:09am UTC
Fred,
this is lovely. So sad and yet, alive with emotions.
MW Q. Sep 26, 2007, 2:26am UTC
Fred, pain is the crucible of spiritual growth , they say! If that be true, then this poem speaks the same language....
Fred Hose Sep 26, 2007, 3:34am UTC
Thank you Marge.
That one of the most beautiful comments that I've ever received.
Yes the soul knows everything. I can't hide antrhing from it. After all t's the captain of my ship.
Fred Hose Sep 26, 2007, 3:37am UTC
Thank you Sheila. I'm glad that you saw all that and liked it.

Hahaha Priscilla. OK I'll dream on if you enjoy phrases like that so much.
Fred Hose Sep 26, 2007, 3:41am UTC
Oi Marianne you say all those nice things to Bill. God bless him.
But thanks for the idea. I'll take a ride on a sunbeam today. Yes I will.
I'll ride up into the blue skies with a bottle of Black Champagne in my hand.
See you up there Bill.
Fred Hose Sep 26, 2007, 3:49am UTC
Thanks Carol. It's alive with real emotions. It's also alive with some new resolutions.
I need to make some changes. I'm not so comfortable with sadness.

Thank you Minnie...but I think that I've grown enough now. It's time that I danced again to my own music. I've given a lot. Till it hurts. Now I'll begin my life on my terms.
Ta da!!!
Neal Wass Sep 26, 2007, 8:23am UTC
Dear Fred, I am glad you are going to make some changes. Being comfortable with sadness is not a good long term choice. Maybe letting us share your saddness in this poem will help us lift the saddness from you. I will carry my part.
Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Sep 26, 2007, 11:27am UTC
Dear Fred...wonderful poem....many times we talk to ourselves and find an amazing relationship between heart and soul..seems that your heart is the friend who also listens to you ..
Great vivid images ....when a person is really really sad he can only plead his heart ..
Fred ..I am sure this is just a poem and you were not related to it recently..

Take care and thank you so much for your lovely sweet comments on my articles annd images


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Fred Hose Sep 26, 2007, 12:07pm UTC
Thank you dear friend Neal.
Already I feel better. You seem to have a magic touch. I felt the burden lighten. You cared and that helped. Thank you again.
Carol Roach Sep 26, 2007, 9:11pm UTC
I just love it and that I will say to your soul
amarpreet k. Sep 27, 2007, 9:03am UTC
Fred , its the toughest struggle , with your soul and heart ...
I have come to your page three times since y'day to read and re- read ...and could not comment as I could relate to the sadness...
I felt much more in this then I could ever write ..
great poem Fred
Elsie Duggan Sep 28, 2007, 4:26am UTC
This is very beatutiful Fred, and I am sorry to see you sad, it is not a nice feeling and I hope by time you read this , you will be feeling better, I love this poem, I think these kind of thoughts a lot, and they don't feel too good, but hang in there, it will get better, you have many friends here, and I hope you count me as one.
Paula Love Sep 28, 2007, 6:57am UTC
I followed Elsie here and I must say that I am glad I did. Thank you for sharing your poem, rather grand in feelings and I relate.
Connie Hersom Ethier Sep 28, 2007, 7:19am UTC
Fred:

I followed Elsie here as well. I loved the poem. I couldn't help but think that denial helps us cope for a bit when we need it. That is not a bad thing. Anyway, I read that and thought that it was like asking your heart for a few more moments in which to deny. That was very powerful. I hope you heal soon, from the wedge between your heart and soul.
April B. Sep 28, 2007, 11:41am UTC
God, this is beautiful... I love it.
Fred Hose Sep 28, 2007, 11:53am UTC
What a wonderful glowing vibrant comment Bhawana.
Well I had a bad moment but I'm over it now. Thanks to my beautiful friends.

What I say in my comments to you are richly deserved. In fact I don't even say enough.
Bless you.
Fred Hose Sep 28, 2007, 11:56am UTC
Thank you dear Marianne. I knew what you meant. Just kidding you. Yes, I'm happy.

You addressed my soul? That's beautiful Carol. Thank you.
William Dotani Sep 28, 2007, 5:51pm UTC
Fred, I prefer to read thoroughly before giving any critique. Sometimes I'll read something of yours or of another person and say nothing at that time. I mean it has to be good for me not to say anything. I hope that makes sense. I then will come back the next day, or asap, and reread before finally giving you my honest opinion. I'm quite elated at your response.
William Dotani Sep 28, 2007, 5:55pm UTC
By the way, just to let you know you have a central role in part 2 of my paranoia story. The comments are yours. Maybe a bit, just a tiny bit out of context. This article is my roast of Magi, but I decided the more the merrier.
Fred Hose Sep 28, 2007, 6:05pm UTC
Hello dear Amar

I feel so much appreciation in your words. I want to thank you for that. The way you wrote made me realise that you understood and felt each word.

That means a lot to me. A lot.
*Carol ~Bronx Southern Belle Y. Oct 2, 2007, 9:14pm UTC
So lovely. So poignant. So . . . : {
Thanks for having so beautiful a soul.
Monika V. Oct 4, 2007, 5:42pm UTC
Welldone Fred. This poem is so true and how beautifully you described seperation between heart and soul.
Fred Hose Oct 4, 2007, 6:24pm UTC
I'm so glad that you enjoyed this. Thanks Elsie but I'm feeling much better now. One has these moments.

Well it's something that you and I can share. Of course Elsie dear. You are one of my great friends. Yesss.
Fred Hose Oct 4, 2007, 6:28pm UTC
Thank you Paula, Constance and April.
Thank you for your visits. It's OK...I'm on my way up again. I'll soon be writing something upbeat again.

Wow April...that was praise indeed. Thank you.
Fred Hose Oct 4, 2007, 6:31pm UTC
Thank you Bill. I fully agree with your approach and I see fully what you're getting at.

I've been to your adventure story where I got dramatically acquainted with dear Wilma.
What a first meeting. It was great fun.
Fred Hose Oct 4, 2007, 6:35pm UTC
Thank you Rose. I'm so happy that you saw something in this poem. Mastery???? Hmmm...well I'm trying my best.

Hello Monika. Welcome to my site. Yes...that seperation is a kind of self defence...and it works. Thank you for your praise. Did me some good.
Shelbia C. Aug 14, 2009, 7:20pm UTC
This is wonderful
Fred Hose Aug 15, 2009, 12:19pm UTC
Thank you Shelbia
I'm especially grateful that you went to the trouble of finding this piece in the dusty archives.
I really value that.

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