by amarpreet k.

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Dark night lingers on

September 06, 2007 05:15 AM EDT (Updated: September 06, 2007 11:11 AM EDT)

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Dark night lingers on

Getting darker by every moment

Engulfing every bright spot

Nothing else exists

Dark night lingers on

Moments lie heavy

It seems like eternity

Despair and gloom

Overshadows hope

Dark night lingers on

Creepy haunting sounds

Voices of beaten souls

Lifeless body

Drifting burdens of life

Dark night lingers on

Stars and moon non-existent

Stark naked is the sky

Dark clouds and thunder

Sun drowned in sea of sorrow

Dark night lingers on

Taking me into it

I am no longer alive

I am just a part of night

Dark night lingers on

My spirit is dark

Devilish is the laugh

That takes all

Darkness of night

Dark night lingers on

I don't want to see light

Coz I might not exist with it

I am so much a part of this night

Copy right @Preetidutta 20/07/07

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Comments: 39

summer L. Sep 6, 2007, 5:49am EDT

oye

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amarpreet k. Sep 6, 2007, 5:50am EDT

oye kya ..?? huh ! bolo bolo

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summer L. Sep 6, 2007, 6:03am EDT

Dark night wil make a beautiful morning wid first ray of sunlight.... be part of the morning... coz its comin through.. :)

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amarpreet k. Sep 6, 2007, 6:06am EDT

:-):-) a beautiful summer morning are you talking about .. I agree that darkest hour is the indication of dawn..

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andrew c. Sep 6, 2007, 6:26am EDT

great poem

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PURUSHOTHAMA RAO R. Sep 6, 2007, 7:38am EDT

Dark night lingers on
welcoming the dawn to ring on
wait for the flowers to bloom in
to make the morning a fragrant one

good verse Amar madam

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amarpreet k. Sep 6, 2007, 7:50am EDT

Thanks Andrew and Purushotham ...
I am not a pessimist though this poem is devoid of any hope ...Its just I wanted it to be like that ..

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amarpreet k. Sep 6, 2007, 8:09am EDT

Hi Reena ,
nice one ..i liked the litle verse you added ..
ah ! the sleepless nights ...I do seek inner peace during sleepless nights ...but at times its too hard to wait and watch.

any comment given here becomes my copyright ..I might add them in my poem ...:-)

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Maanav K. Sep 6, 2007, 8:31am EDT

"Voices of beaten souls
Lifeless body
Drifting the burden of life"

Brilliant lines.. A spontaneous feeling....

Plain.. straight and unpredictable flow of feelings and thought.. we are more dark than we think ourselves to be... good comparision with night!!

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amarpreet k. Sep 6, 2007, 8:33am EDT

and I find writing stories quite tough ...though I wan to write many ..
I used to follow rhyme ..but sometimes just write down not caring about it ..

you are a great story teller Reena ...I hope to see a collection of short stories from you in print some day

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amarpreet k. Sep 6, 2007, 8:34am EDT

Manav , somtimes feeling are deep and words simple , you can it better but you want to say it that way ...you got what I wanted to say ...thanks for commenting

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Minakshi w. Sep 6, 2007, 9:48am EDT

Amarpreet, that is a dark poem!! What great thoughts, wondering whether you will merge into the darkness yourself if light does come your way..
No, you will always find light..always be positive!!
Thank you for your support.

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Jonathan S. Sep 6, 2007, 11:29am EDT

Its a deep poem with feelings that many will share but yet we feel alone when we write poems like that. Its a 10.

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Shannon W Sep 6, 2007, 12:39pm EDT

Very nice

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Sheila Deeth Sep 6, 2007, 3:13pm EDT

Loved the repetition. Very powerful.

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Alison Pearce Sep 6, 2007, 7:27pm EDT

Fabulous! Powerful imagery!

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Jai S. Sep 6, 2007, 7:44pm EDT

Looks like this piece may have been written after reading the book of Revelation in the Bible! dark.....

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Edward Nudelman Sep 6, 2007, 9:59pm EDT

hauntigly repetitive refrain brings the reader into the fullness of the dark picture. And you've got a stunner of a last line here that really pulls the message of the poem through and gives it flesh. Well done indeed.

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Elsie Duggan Sep 6, 2007, 11:50pm EDT

Very lovely poem with such deep undertones, but I think you will see the light again, the poem sounds to me like there is hope, very well written. Of course I am the eternal optimist, and I find hope in everything for everyone,

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amarpreet k. Sep 7, 2007, 5:07am EDT

Minnie : its a dark poem ,I wanted to keep it that way ..plain and dark ..but I know there is light and hope ..I am an eternal optimist and would seek light and never let myself drowned in darkness . thanks for stopping by ..

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amarpreet k. Sep 7, 2007, 5:09am EDT

true Jonhathan; sometimes you feel all alone in this world even if you know that there are people so close to you that they will feel bad if they know that you felt alone ...but sometimes you have only yourself and this dark feeling .

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amarpreet k. Sep 7, 2007, 5:15am EDT

shannon, sheila,Vishenda,Alison ..thanks you all for commenting

Jai:its so nice to see you friend ..unfortunately I haven't read bible ...

Ed : A word of praise from you means a lot ..because of this dark line all my friends are scolding me ..they don't like me to paint a hopeless picture ...but can't help it ..I don't feel like changing it .

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amarpreet k. Sep 7, 2007, 5:17am EDT

Elsie: I am also an optimist ..thanks for your wishes , everyone need them at one time or other.

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Sammie B. Sep 8, 2007, 8:21pm EDT

I love the repetition. It really sets the mood and everything.

To me, I don't think the ending lives up to the rest of the poem. But that may just be me since the rest of the poem was very good. ^_^

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Atticus *. Sep 9, 2007, 1:34pm EDT

To understand the dark you must become darkness (in a sense at least). This poem is hauntingly beautiful in its melancholy, amarpreet. Fine work.

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Pamela G. Sep 10, 2007, 8:28am EDT

This is simply lovely.

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Richard Melendez Sep 12, 2007, 5:54am EDT

Amarpreet... I was linked into the night and I shivered. Very evocative poetry. Your verse draped me in its darkness and mood. Haunting effort.

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amarpreet k. Sep 12, 2007, 8:19am EDT

Sammie, Aticus ,Pamela and Richards ...I am glad that you liked it .
thanks for stopping by

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Fred Hose Sep 13, 2007, 8:31am EDT

Hi Amar
Oh this is a most unusual and yet very absorbing poem. You want the night to last. You are part of the night???
There is a great tension in the air because the day is dawning. Nothing can stop it. What you want you can't have...and really should not have. You should face the day. Wow... there is drama in the air. You captured it well.

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amarpreet k. Sep 13, 2007, 8:40am EDT

Fred , here you are asking me more like a friend , like all my friends here have said ..
I don't want to be a part of night and rather believe that life is all about facing night and welcoming dawn...
I am glad that you liked it

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Bhawana 'Gather Proud Mom' Sep 13, 2007, 6:50pm EDT

Dear Amar....this shows that you can find out the positive qualities from anywhere....I can feel that essence which sprayed on us...Great writing....
specially when you give the reasons that you don't wanna see the light..

love
Bhawana

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Shruthi P. Sep 26, 2007, 7:07am EDT

Amarpreet, I like this poem and I like that repetition of the line "dark night lingers on" adds to the melancholy effect...

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Monika V. Sep 28, 2007, 10:38am EDT

Amarpreet, again this poem is unique. I liked it and one more thing I want to say you look very beautiful :)

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Dena Straughn Oct 12, 2007, 4:30am EDT

I have been in places, thankfully not now, where this made perfect sense. I was hurt very deeply in the light, found comfort in the dark, and did not want to face the daylight and all that would be illuminated there. -But face it I did!

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