by La Bellota
Member since:
April 11, 2006

punctuation....

August 26, 2007 04:46 PM EDT (Updated: August 27, 2007 02:46 PM EDT)
views: 42 | rating: 10/10 (9 votes) | comments: 16

a storm rolls in

sending electricity through my skin

a moon slowly becomes full

and my hands feel empty

thoughts of you stinging my lips, my breasts, my hips

 

 

link to this page
Bookmark this post:
Facebook
Twitter
Delicious
Buzz
More

Comments: 16

Carol Lloyd Aug 26, 2007, 6:17pm EDT
very nice ty
Alison H. Aug 26, 2007, 6:45pm EDT
That's a 10. Just beautiful.
Alison H. Aug 26, 2007, 8:01pm EDT
Sometimes the smallest poems pack the biggest punch.

See Robert Bly's collection of small poems (from different poets).
Alison H. Aug 26, 2007, 8:08pm EDT
Post the poem to some of the poetry sites on Gather. There are many!
La Bellota Aug 27, 2007, 9:12am EDT
oh...I want to but I am afraid. I am just trying. I am soooo not a "poet" in all the poet-y sense of the word. BUT thank you so much for liking it.
Michele Scercy Aug 27, 2007, 11:47am EDT
This is just delicious.
Syed The Shah Aug 27, 2007, 2:31pm EDT
Beautiful and sweet.
Very hot the final verse.
Gracias.

Shah
Osofo Addo Aug 27, 2007, 3:34pm EDT
Interesting and nice poem . Thank you for sharing
Yasher the Cute Canadian Aug 27, 2007, 4:31pm EDT
:)
La Bellota Aug 27, 2007, 4:54pm EDT
why Bradley, that is exactly what I meant......*assumes angel posture complete with flickering fluroscent light halo* ;)
Lavonne www.bildurdreams.com Aug 27, 2007, 4:57pm EDT
That was great. You're more of a poet than you think.
La Bellota Aug 28, 2007, 8:34am EDT
I KNEW IT! hee.
very cool poem La Bellota, thanks!!!

Join the Conversation
Chime in! Become a Gather member to comment.
Already a member? Sign in
top
 
Gather | Friends | Groups | Share
About Gather | Engagement Marketing | Make New Friends | Gather Points | Advertise on Gather | Gather Press | Privacy | Terms of Service | Community Guidelines
Books | Celebs | Entertainment | Family | Food | Health | Moms | Money | News | Politics | Spirituality | Sports | Travel | Writing
Version 16865, "Oz"; Copyright © 2009 Gather Inc. All rights reserved.