For my dear wife, Barbara, written August 20, 2007, on the shores of Shamrock Lake, just outside of Yosemite National Park.
I feel her coming, spirit floods my heart
For she unsealed that hatch, love’s lifeline dear
Sweet twinge of warmth, anticipation’s part
Contented smile reveals that she is near
Her thoughts and mine diverge and yet as one
We battleplay, forge truce with hot, close breath
A final pulse, line item, just for fun?
A trusting smile concedes to discord’s death
When day is blue and tastes of bitter loss,
Or traveled path fades and I’ve lost my way
A word, a nuzzle, and she takes my cross
Unveils the loving smile she earns each day
For all I am there can be no denial
I cherish all you are, you make me smile
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I toast you for thinking that about your wife and for saying it so beautifully.
--Bonnie
Beautiful, beautiful. The title and the last line synchronize hearts that listen, my friend.
I smile for you and Barbara.
John, my great friend - I always relish your comments - they help me to see things in more and varied ways. Thank you for your heartwarming wishes.
Wisely written in gentle verse
Speak volumes
And generate a serious sigh
For this poetry my esteem is high
Jan, I am honored that you have rendered your own brand of poetic criticism. Thank you for the compliments and especially for the wonderful verse.
Patry - Yes, this was from my heart. You are absolutely right, I am a lucky man, and the gratitude comes easy for me in this relationship.
Your poem is at once simple and complex like its subject matter
...And beautifully written.
definatly a ten
Don't forget to vote in the FC Romance Contest (only 10s count)
Thanks- Vivian A. Runaway
When day is blue and tastes of bitter loss,
The contrast is huge, but it works somehow even as it jolts me. The poem nspires me on various levels, not the least of which is to treasure my own wife. Thank you!
Julia - yes, we both feel lucky...most of the time. ;-)
John - I had never written a sonnet before, but I wanted to try. I did put a lot of thought into it, I can't take credit for the feeling, except to say that your kind observation makes me feel good. Thank you.
Ed - Thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts.
Vivian - Thank you for the kind comments and wishes. We do work at being happy. Mostly work because I can be a stinker. But, as Ringo once sang, "It's getting better all the time." I'm planning on finding time to come and vote.
Gerry - I am so happy you stopped by to comment, and I'm very happy you enjoyed this. I felt very inspired by my subject matter as I wrote this, and I think that comes across, which you identified. If this gets your wife a night on the town or breakfast in bed, so much the better! :-)
how lucky to have someone to love..and to be loved like this....
When day is blue and tastes of bitter loss,
Or traveled path fades and I've lost my way
A word, a nuzzle, and she takes my cross
Unveil the loving smile she earns each day
Neal, yes, my wife was pleased.
Vinay, I'm so pleased you came to see this. I appreciate your kind words.
Lynn, no, I actually was thinking of unveiling when I first wrote it, but I wanted to slavishly conform to iambic pentameter, and worked the line round to where it is. My myopia simply overlooked that unveils is much better without the baggage of an extra syllable. I am changing it now. Please feel free to point out all the things (numerous to be sure) that could be better. Thanks!
reflective sighs and smiles that are the creative breaths of merging
tonalities in a cherished and delicately witnessed union that I cannot help but envy. The glow in your wife's face in the photo makes it a very easy glide through the easy warmth of your words.
I almost forgot to mention that this line pulses with magical passion
that makes me quiver a bit inside, so perfectly seductive in its encapsulation of
the intimate exchange.