by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

For My Wife (Rev)

August 19, 2007 09:27 AM EDT
views: 51 | rating: 10/10 (18 votes) | comments: 34
Her image lingered well into the night
I sensed her presence in a dawn so bright
It made me giddy 'though I was alone
Sweet plans of seduction ran through my bones

Certain flowers live on this higher plane
Some leave you gasping then likewise abstain
Their path is longing but blind is the way
Wistful belonging was the fate of clay
 
I was a poor man with not much to give
Her eyes were shining my hope she'd forgive
Words of passion from a heart stirred with fire
Somehow I felt she shared in my desire

I felt so nervous with doubts causing pain
So deep was my love did she feel the same
It just was her truth that could save my life
No need of seduction she gave me sight

The dawn now breaks as I catch memory
This flower grew and gave much love to me
A few rough patches in dreams we have shared
Soon I'll say goodbye to my love my air
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Comments: 34

lynn a. Aug 19, 2007, 9:37am EDT
Wow. A lot of emotion in this poem, William. And the imges, ah.
Nice job here, William. Vivid imagery. Nice touch...!
Donald M. Aug 19, 2007, 10:32am EDT
William that is so beautiful . Thank you for sharing. Have a wonderful Sunday.
Bundy P Aug 19, 2007, 11:19am EDT
Very sweet
Donald M. Aug 19, 2007, 1:01pm EDT
William I like the tribute to your Wife and will not pick on you, because it was a great thing for you to do. Now I will tease about the jokes. and fun I will poke, but your lovely wife deserves the utmost rrespect. So jokes, I,ll neglect.
Susan B. Aug 19, 2007, 1:25pm EDT
Well written!
Wilma M. Aug 19, 2007, 1:38pm EDT
A lovely tribute to your wife. Do you share this poetry with her?
Marinela Kotsina Aug 19, 2007, 2:29pm EDT
The spirit on a higher plane! beautiful
The body made out of clay! beautiful
How can one not like your poetry?
I do not think there is such a person
thank you
Maria G. Aug 19, 2007, 2:43pm EDT
Bill this is such a beautiful peace. So heart-felt, so heart-warming! I loved the flow and the imagery too...both style and sentiment expressed are simply perfect!
Marge H. Aug 19, 2007, 4:59pm EDT
Your wife is a very lucky lady. If my husband were to write a tribute like this to me, I would fall in love with him all over again.
Sheila Deeth Aug 19, 2007, 6:46pm EDT
What a lovely poem. Lucky lady.
Alison Pearce Aug 19, 2007, 7:15pm EDT
Beautiful William, I could feel your love for her in every word!
Donald M. Aug 19, 2007, 7:56pm EDT
William, just stopping in again to wish you and your family a blessed day.
Sheila Deeth Aug 19, 2007, 8:46pm EDT
Came back to reread it. And all your pictures are back. It's a poem worth rereading. Enjoying it.
John Harris Beck Aug 19, 2007, 10:52pm EDT
"to my love my air" -- you end in perfect simplicity.
golds g. Aug 19, 2007, 10:55pm EDT
thanks
Elsie Duggan Aug 19, 2007, 11:13pm EDT
William this is a beautiful poem, As a tribute to your wife it is wonderful, I just don't like the last line, Is the original poem still up? I am going to try and find it. Your talent is showing through here it flows so smoothly. It says so much too.
Elsie Duggan Aug 19, 2007, 11:20pm EDT
This lovely William, I looked and the original is not up so I don't remember what the revision is about, I think you should defintely show this to your wife, she will love it. To be adored by a man is so special and your words describe that exactly. You can't live without her, that is plain from this poem. Every woman wants to know that.
William Dotani Aug 20, 2007, 12:29am EDT
Elsie, I did show this to my wife. She knows I can't exist without her. She even jokes about this at times.
William Dotani Aug 20, 2007, 12:31am EDT
I'm going to promote a poem by Maria G (see her comment above). Her poem Blind Divinity is splendid and I believe you will enjoy it.
Marge H. Aug 20, 2007, 9:24am EDT
Thanks William, for sharing the information about Maria G's "Blind Divinity."
Fred Hose Aug 20, 2007, 9:35am EDT
You touched our hearts there, Bill.
I think that you and your wife fond and shared love in many continents. I feel that at times you leant on each other. You shared the elements of a grear love.
It's beautiful that you tell us about it. It made my day.
Kelly M. Aug 20, 2007, 4:30pm EDT
Beautiful!
Connie C. Aug 20, 2007, 4:48pm EDT
This was a very beautiful poem. It shows how much you love your wife by your words. It sounds like you also respect her and that is so very important. My husband is my best friend and I could not live, nor do I want to, without him.

I loved your poem.
Donald M. Aug 20, 2007, 4:59pm EDT
I agree with Connie. A poem that reminds us all, how much we love our partners and how lost we would be without them.
William Dotani Aug 20, 2007, 5:00pm EDT
My last line simply means I expect I will leave this Earthly plane before her.
William Dotani Aug 22, 2007, 1:17pm EDT
My sincere thanks for all your wonderful comments.
Donald M. Aug 22, 2007, 7:31pm EDT
William we all just were told how much love you have to give your wife. Its wonderful
Donald M. Aug 22, 2007, 7:33pm EDT
As for me I admire a Man that speaks kindly of his wife. Tells the world about her. Lets her know also his commitment to her.
Donald M. Aug 22, 2007, 7:34pm EDT
You were already a friend, now you have my deep respect.
William Dotani Aug 23, 2007, 2:31am EDT
Thank you. I do adore my wife.
Heidi M. Aug 25, 2007, 12:09pm EDT
this was absolutely beautiful!

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