She Sees

She goes to the mirror,

Practicing now

She sees what she wants

And she calls to me

Her voice is the high note

Of summer energy

She sees her aura

When she moves reflected mystery

So I see her learn

And I see her grow

I see her hope

And I hope she knows

That the light she carries

Has this sensitivity:

It can move with her

And live in me

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Sandy (Site Psychic™) Knauer Aug 14, 2007, 3:07pm EDT

Beautiful, Gerry.

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Gerry Wass Aug 14, 2007, 3:33pm EDT

Thank you, Sandy, for breaking the ice on this one!

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Sandy (Site Psychic™) Knauer Aug 14, 2007, 3:36pm EDT

My pleasure, Gerry. This stayed with me after I clicked away and read other submissions. Thank you for publishing something that reached my heart.

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Edward Nudelman Aug 15, 2007, 3:53pm EDT

Yes, I agree with Sandy, really a wonderful softness here. I love, "Her voice is the high note Of summer energy," and I like the flow and the transition beginning with "I hope she knows" into a declarative is quite spectacular.

I'm going to feature this in the afternoon slot of Writing Essentials.

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Luna Rushdi Aug 15, 2007, 9:44pm EDT

This is so beautiful Gerry, makes me think of autumn evenings, soft, colourful and nostalgic.

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Gerry Wass Aug 15, 2007, 10:52pm EDT

Thank you, Ed. I'm honored to have a slot on Writing Essentials, especially because, as I hope you know, you've been a motivating influence to get me to rediscover poetry.

Luna, I thank you also for your kind comment. I had not thought of the idea of softness until you and Ed mentioned it, but it will become part of my concept of this poem.

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John Harris Beck Aug 19, 2007, 7:33pm EDT

Excellent poem, Gerry, drawing on your clear thought and your warm heart, all poured out as a fast-flowing stream of affection.

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Barbary Chaapel Aug 24, 2007, 2:57pm EDT

Isn't this just the prettiest poem that lets us imagine so many wonderful and important things. I think your last line inspired, Gerry.

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Tom C. Aug 29, 2007, 9:50pm EDT

Agreed, this is really beautiful. It sends such a strong feeling of hope to me. Hope for the future of this unfolding mystery that will forever illuminate your life in a special way.

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John F Walter Aug 30, 2007, 8:31pm EDT

Sincere. Exquisite. Heartfelt. The repetition of the verb ¨see´ here reinforces the speaker´s capacity to glimpse the intention of his beloved. Naked lyric, that expresses the essential truth about love: It is an active verb. ¨It can move with her/ and live in me.¨

Bravo, my friend.

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Gerry Wass Aug 30, 2007, 10:34pm EDT

John, Barbary, Tom and John--

I am brought nearly to tears of joy as I read your comments, wonder and gratitude beyond words for the opportunity to be part of this community. Thank you for blessing and inspiring me with your words!

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