Well of course you get it right the first time! You will be addicted, for a while after my first one they were popping out of my head all the time. They are so fast. Then, after one of Ed's tutorials I started adding pictures and making them haiga poems. This one was very good, doesn't sound like a beginner at all. Have a great day!
As always Elsie, another winner. I like the Haiku poems also. I can't write one but I do like to read them. Again, a form that tells so much with just a few words.
I'm just learning about Haiku here on Gather so I'm not qualified to judge whether it's right or wrong. All I know is... I like it and the soothing mental image it creates.
For those who want to learn more about the mechanics of haiku, I found a poet who calls himself a Haiku Enthusiast here in Gather who wrote a very good article about it:
Lovely poem Elsie. There are many different versions of Haiku that I have encountered and each has a slightly different set of "rules." Depending on which branch of Haiku one follows just about any short 3 line poem could be considered Haiku by one set of standards or another. The guidelines I typically follow are:
3 lines syllable pattern 5-7-5 has to do with nature or the seasons relates human nature with the natural world the lines do not rhyme
For your first attempt at Haiku though, this was a great poem!
My dear friend, you never cease to amaze me Elsie! I've been trying to come up with that would be at least presentable, and I don't seem to get the gist of Haiku. That was simply a well written Haiku! Now I guess I'll go eat some chocolate covered ants! {just kidding}
ERROR! should read (come up with what would be) I just don't like making errors dag nab it all to heck! And what the hey am I doing up this late!?!? LOL
Wonderful words that promote a wonderful image of the winds. You don't mention a season, that said, I had visions of warm spring puffs of orange-blossom-scented breezes, even though trees can have leaves all year round. I miss the trees!
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This definitely a Haiku and a good one, too.
Don't know what one is but it sounds lovely anyhow!
What a grand job you've done for a first time try!!! You've used a great 5-7-5 pattern regarding nature and have created a wonderful imagery!!!
I am ever impressed with your talents! Haiku Away!!! :)
For those who want to learn more about the mechanics of haiku, I found a poet who calls himself a Haiku Enthusiast here in Gather who wrote a very good article about it:
GREAT ARTICLE ABOUT HAIKU
These are some of his haikus that I truly liked:
BRET'S HAIKUS
On sweating brow of millions
Pulling yellow weeds
~Woodswoman~
Whatever it is; I love the impressions from your words.
Blessings
3 lines
syllable pattern 5-7-5
has to do with nature or the seasons
relates human nature with the natural world
the lines do not rhyme
For your first attempt at Haiku though, this was a great poem!
I've been trying to come up with that would be at
least presentable, and I don't seem to get the gist
of Haiku. That was simply a well written Haiku! Now
I guess I'll go eat some chocolate covered ants!
{just kidding}
I just don't like making errors dag nab it all to heck!
And what the hey am I doing up this late!?!? LOL
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