by Heidi M.
Member since:
March 8, 2007

Ode to the Dandelion Queen- TSC

July 24, 2007 03:26 PM UTC (Updated: July 24, 2007 07:29 PM UTC)
views: 0 | comments: 28

Here is my weak attempt at a poem. Gentle constructive criticism is welcome.  I haven't written a poem since probably Junior High.

I am inspired by the Dandelion Queen.  How can I not be when she spreads her charm for me to see outside my window?

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Ode to the Dandelion Queen

I was indignant as I did see
One neighbor disrespecting thee

What is he doing to those seeds of yours?
Why he is killing them of course!

Well I will do my best to contend
With the forces that defend

Their right to undo all
The work from spring through fall

That your subjects labor through
In order to serve and please you

 I decide now as I make this rhyme
In the good old summer time

I will adore the little white puffs
That the children love to huff

If only for one reason
For this is the Queen of Dandelion’s season

Comments: 28

Heidi M. Jul 24, 2007, 3:30pm UTC
I tried to edit the typos but the gremlins were present and I decided to leave it as is. Just know i really do know how to spell probably. And anything else that is misspelled. :-)
Elsie Duggan Jul 24, 2007, 4:29pm UTC
Heidi, I love it, Oh to be the subject of a TSC, lol, I am going to get a swelled dandelion head here, I am having so much fun it should not be allowed. How sweet of you to write this, Thank you so much, I am honored.
Heidi M. Jul 24, 2007, 7:08pm UTC
It was a joy!
Heidi M. Jul 24, 2007, 7:30pm UTC
ok. editing success!
Elsie Duggan Jul 25, 2007, 2:06am UTC
Thanks again Heidi,
Elsie Duggan Jul 25, 2007, 2:19am UTC
Heidi, following your dream is wonderful, I followed mine, children are a lot of work but such rewards you get. There is nothing else quite like that in life. I wouldn't exchange that experience for any amount of money in the world. I am sure you feel the same.
William Dotani Jul 25, 2007, 2:32am UTC
Nice little ditty, but it's a pity Elsie has you under her spell.
Next step will be you using dandelions as a seasoning
in all of your soups and stews.
MW Q. Jul 25, 2007, 2:39am UTC
I was wondering when somebody would get around to something like this..other than William , of-course :)! Sweet poem, Heidi. We all love our Dandelion Queen.
Rita B. Jul 25, 2007, 9:06am UTC
Elsie got me here. Thanks Elsie. This is cute. :)
Heidi M. Jul 25, 2007, 11:53am UTC
Elsie had me under her spell before any dandelions came into the picture. Thanks for the comments!
Wilma M. Jul 25, 2007, 4:46pm UTC
I bet Elsie has been slipping you some of her wine! That's how she gets her foot in the door every time. I see you are from Washington also, Heidi. I'm in Spokane.

I was just out weeding and see Elsie has made a return trip to my yard. She is certainly a busy lady. She didn't even stop in to say hi!
Heidi M. Jul 25, 2007, 7:14pm UTC
My neighbor was out yesterday killing his weeds which is "REALLY" what prompted this poem. (just kidding Elsie! It's all about you! I just need to get everyone off my back. shhh.) I don't generally kill mine because my kids and dogs and cats are in the grass all the time. i hate putting poison out there just to get rid of a few weeds. ~GASP!~ Did I say weeds? (Elsie, you know i didn't really mean that!)
Larry H. Jul 25, 2007, 8:44pm UTC
thanks for sharing your poem..
William Dotani Jul 26, 2007, 5:12am UTC
I guess I should give a critique. Using the word dandelion in a poem could offend those using Scott's anti weed products and if you are ever up the creek without a paddle, these people would remember your poem and do nothing but wave, smile and take photographs with a digital camera. I'm sure you know better than to use 4 letter words, but using a 9 letter word in a poem is worse.
Heidi, very cute poem. I liked it a lot.
Heidi M. Jul 26, 2007, 8:33pm UTC
William, I appreciate your words of wisdom and will take them to heart. I never thought about it that way and am most concerned. After all if someone is going to take my picture, I don't want it to be with a digital camera.
William Dotani Jul 28, 2007, 9:20am UTC
Your neighbor seems wise, yet it should be no surprise
that Elsie did drop by, but in the stealth cloak she wore
you could not see her unless she rested and snored
Although 24/7 she'd like to be planting these seeds
She does get worn out by eating chocolate ants no doubt.
William Dotani Jul 28, 2007, 9:22am UTC
Please notice I did not use any 9 letter words in my above little sprite.
Heidi M. Jul 28, 2007, 6:38pm UTC
I appreciate your restraint.
Elsie Duggan Jul 30, 2007, 12:24am UTC
OH my, William is after me again Heidi, I don't know what to do, I came to thank you for your comment on my image I think. I am so bad, I read all the comments and that is what takes me so long and by the time I am here to thank you I can't remember whether it is an article, poem or picture you commented on, don't tell anyone of this senilty slip of mine will you, thanks, lol.
Heidi M. Jul 30, 2007, 1:04am UTC
Elsie, you make me smile!
Elsie Duggan Jul 30, 2007, 1:23am UTC
I am here to thank you again, this time I am almost sure it is an image you commented on, Thank you, I am so tired, lol, no sleep last night and out all day today but determined to get caught up and thank every one who takes the time to read and view my things. Thank you Heidi.
Elsie Duggan Jul 30, 2007, 1:25am UTC
No , I looked it was the Haiku, thank you , lol, oh gee.
Heidi M. Jul 30, 2007, 1:29am UTC
I commented on quite a few of your images. Don't feel like you have to thank me for every one. I had a garage sale this weekend and have gotten behind on reading and viewing everything. I try to keep up with you and William if i can because you two are so great about commenting on all of mine. I really really appreciate that. I will try to post more soon. I have a ton of photos I could be posting so maybe that is my next step- when I have time.
Elsie Duggan Jul 30, 2007, 11:35am UTC
okay Heidi, just this one thank you for four in a row I see here now, I appreciate it that you visit my pictures. and leave such nice comments . thanks again
William Dotani Aug 2, 2007, 9:57am UTC
Elsie always insists people say cheese when she takes their photograph. The reason is because cheese is yellow just like dandelions.
Marilyn (PaintsOnSlate) S. Aug 10, 2007, 10:29am UTC
Charming and joyful. Good job.
William Dotani Aug 19, 2007, 6:53am UTC
I've been abducted. Help!
Dandelion stew. Yuck!

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