REMEMBRANCE OF THINGS IMPERFECT(METAMORPHOSIZED INTO A POEM)

I like this new incarnation very much, Boris. Especially the way using lineation in this way puts emphasis on your subject-object relationship for the speaker with this fallen marvel, the Sun, which now possesses a fruity qualia--canteloupe, orange--and not only synaesthetizes the sky with its juices, it squirts its ¨warm essence over our bodies.¨There is for the reader the feeling of immersion in the sun which works both as analogy and activated memory, and the synaethesia possibilities of the earlier lines are amplified in a sensitive reader´s conscious work space if they can fuse perceptions of taste and sight together at this juncture.

Thank you so much for showcasing so much talent in one day, my dear friend. After our phone call this afternoon, this has been a remarkable Sunday on the Sim Common with Boris!

I like the whimsy and child-like style in the speaker's view as and adult. The notion that the Sun would fall into your front yard is worth of "amazement," and "incredulity." It seems as though the speaker lives in an appartment or a condo, since the neighbors are following you down the stairs.

It is a curious problem that the sun in the front yard is also enjoys the benefit of the experience with "It is warm and beautiful,/ glistening in the mid-noon light.

It is not a puzzle to me that such delight should be taken with natural world when its observation is coupled intimately with unbridaled imaginative creation.

Amazing and captivating work - Thank you Boris.

I just read "THE ANATOMY OF REMINISCENCE!" This is a wonderful extension of it and a powerful demonstration of right and left brain function. Well done, Boris!!

Boris, what I find most riveting is the seeming incongruity between the title and the poem itself. There is something deeper than is readily comprehensible at first read and now I want to dwell in that space and figure it out.

Thank you Susan, I look forward to any further comments that you might have on this poem.

its incredible how
you turned the whole thing
into a poem
its perfectly synthesized
it even makes it more sublime and beautiful
...
but thats just cause im a poetry fan
congratulations

This is lovely, surreal beauty and joy. I, too, would like to merge with the sun, as it is the giver of all life energy.

The band The Great Lake Swimmers has a song in which the sun falls from the sky, "drunk from drinking all the heat."

This is a wonderful poetic treatment of the incident which motivated your earlier essay.
While the poem relates the subjective personal experience with vivid and tangible detail, it also makes the memorable experience a collective reality, confident that this warming experience is shared with the neighbors, the dogs, shining not just from the sun, but shining along with the sun.

I really appreciated the imagery of your poem.

remembrance nudges me
out of a shady reverie
into the power of the sun
imperfect perfection of poetry
Ripe melon juice confection fun
we realize this reality
dream, self, and sun are one

So sorry, it is so hot, I am worried, my brain turns to ?, generic comments, are so (finish this line). Thank you for sharing this @ Post Art - Any Medium Boris! I shall try to return.

Boris, at some point of time I really need to learn to tune in more to your frequency. But these hours are ...

Great imagerery. It is beautiful.

I remember reading this Boris. Here comes the Sun!

Ra Atum!

Isis

Oh obviously it is brilliant no pun intended as are you O Hexenmeister!

Isis

Alright the pun was intended!

Still true boy genius and wunderkind, master of time and space!

Isis
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A Sun Smoothie in the making!

I love the idea that we can feel the ripeness in your poem, Boris. What a great imagination you have.

great poem, wonderfully written!!

wonderful poem Boris.

I love how you describe the sun as an orange, squirting juices. I have never heard the sun being described like that and very true.

Very interesting and thought provoking.
Karen~