Legacy in Time

Comments: 20

Barbra L. Jul 18, 2007, 9:37am EDT

Superb! A sentiently written masterpiece!

Warren Keating Jul 18, 2007, 9:40am EDT

When I read "Famished for morsels of focus", I knew I was in for a treat. You're work is better than ever, and it was pretty darn brilliant in the first place! Thanks for posting this revealing, intense piece.

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Spencer T. Jul 18, 2007, 11:00am EDT

Superb.

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Anne B. Grote Jul 18, 2007, 11:40am EDT

Beautifully composed thoughts about who you are and where you are going. Keep up the good work, Amanda. I really enjoy your pieces.

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Rosa See Ya Jul 18, 2007, 12:37pm EDT

That's so cute. I really like the thought of circling time in orbit.

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John F Walter Jul 18, 2007, 12:54pm EDT

The poem develops a tension between its subject´s struggle to get back to reality and the fantastic illusions and abysses where her mind goes. This is deftly communicated in tightly condensed and richly alliterative free verse, where we feel the pathos of lacking our own sign for ourselves in a cosmos that is a simulation of the one we can never fully grasp with our senses.

Very well done, Amanda. An exceptional poem, especially when placed in a sequence (along with the anterior piece) that shows the poet/speaker grappling with her disease and the delusions that spring from it.

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Cecile V. Jul 18, 2007, 1:26pm EDT

Incredible!

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Miz Lynn aka/BooBoo Jul 18, 2007, 2:21pm EDT

Incredible, stupendous, awesome are just a few words that came to mind when I read this!

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Granny Janny H. Jul 18, 2007, 4:07pm EDT

Inspiring spiral of spirit.
Enter it into the poetry contest.
Wowee...
I simply simmer in your poetry!

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Wilma M. Jul 18, 2007, 6:11pm EDT

Awesome. I kept reading the first two lines over and over, then finally was able to move on to the rest.

Have to second the comment made by Amy George.

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elizabeth e. Jul 18, 2007, 9:13pm EDT

Beautiful piece amanda...with words you tell us where you have been and why...like Amy...I fear for where you might be going...hold on...your life...a real life is just out there...and not on the slopes of Saturn.

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Atticus *. Jul 18, 2007, 9:31pm EDT

Marvelous amanda! - yes we need to leave a guidepost to point the way back home. Better still is to find an anchor. You are a brilliant poet, but please don't go wandering the cosmos without some sort of map. ;-)

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Kathryn E. Jul 18, 2007, 10:04pm EDT

stunning!

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Barbary Chaapel Jul 18, 2007, 11:27pm EDT

I smiled at your ending, Amanda. Another self-writing (self-righting)
poem from a super agile mind.

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Beryl Singleton Bissell Jul 19, 2007, 11:34am EDT

I'll be looking for it!

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Cathryn flowers Ritchie Jul 19, 2007, 12:26pm EDT

I've watched the pains/joys of surfing moments that long for solid ground in my daughter's life. Your words are full of understanding, sorrow and hope. My prayers are with you.

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